1. Paragraph My trip to Las Vegas! Topic Sentence Detail Sentences
Concluding Sentence

2. My trip to Las Vegas was the best trip I ever took
My trip to Las Vegas was the best trip I ever took! I went to Las Vegas with a bunch of my friends in May of We flew there after work one day, and getting there took forever! After we got settled, we started to check out our hotel and the sights around us. There were so many fun things to do! My trip to Las Vegas was an amazing experience in my life!

3. Essay Step 1: - Prewriting My trip to Las Vegas! Graphic Organizer
Outline

4. Carnival, shows, and attractions
Step 1a:
Booked flight and hotel with my sister and all of our friends!
Sister had to cancel her trip because she was having a baby!
Shopping!
Dinners!
My Trip to Las Vegas
Packed my suitcase, met friends at the airport, left for our trip!
Carnival, shows, and attractions
Long plane ride, left my phone on the plane, shuttle took forever!
hotel, restaurants, casino, pool

5. sister had to cancel, sad because she will miss the fun!
Step 1b:
Introduction:
Body:
Booking My Trip
reserving hotel
booking flight,
sister had to cancel, sad because she will miss the fun!
Leaving for Las Vegas
packing
Long flight and shuttle to hotel
Enjoying Las Vegas
attractions
Hotel, reatsurants, pool
Dinners and shopping!
Conclusion:

6. Essay Step 2: - Drafting My trip to Las Vegas! 1. Body 2. Introduction
3. Conclusion

7. Introduction: Body: Conclusion:
Booking our trip to Las Vegas was awesome! All of my friends, my sister, and I
were so excited to be going on a vacation together. First we made reservations at the
Mirage Hotel. Then, we booked our flights through Southwest Airlines. Just as we started
To build our excitement for the trip, my sister found out she was having a baby, and had to
Cancel. We felt bad that she was going to miss out on all the fun, but we couldn’t help being
excited for ourselves. We were even more thrilled when our departure day finally arrived!
When the day came to leave for Las Vegas, we could hardly wait! My friends and I met at the
airport after work one day, and we immediately boarded our airplane to leave. It seemed like
The longest airplane ride ever because we couldn’t wait to get there! Once we did finally arrive,
We boarded a shuttle that would take us to our hotel. Once I was on the shuttle, I realized I
Left my cell phone on the airplane! When we arrived at our hotel, unpacked, and settled in, we
decided to venture out to see all the wonderful things there was to do in Las Vegas!
Las Vegas has an endless amount of activities and sights to see! Our hotel alone had four
Restaurants, an outdoor swimming pool with waterfalls and two outdoor restaurants, a huge
Casino, and tons of shopping! We also visited other hotels to see attractions like New York,
New York to see their rooftop rollercoaster, and also MGM to see Sigmund and Roy’s white
tigers. Shopping at the Bellagio and Ceasar’s Palace was extraordinary, and dinners were
indescribable. I Felt so lucky to have been able to visit Las Vegas!
Conclusion:

8. Introduction: Body: Conclusion: Introductory Sentence – Big Idea!
Thesis Statement – Mentions the names of your body paragraphs.
Concluding Sentence – Wraps it up and leads in to first body paragraph.
Body:
Booking our trip to Las Vegas was awesome! All of my friends, my sister, and I
were so excited to be going on a vacation together. First we made reservations at the
Mirage Hotel. Then, we booked our flights through Southwest Airlines. Just as we started
To build our excitement for the trip, my sister found out she was having a baby, and had to
Cancel. We felt bad that she was going to miss out on all the fun, but we couldn’t help being
excited for ourselves. We were even more thrilled when our departure day finally arrived!
When the day came to leave for Las Vegas, we could hardly wait! My friends and I met at the
airport after work one day, and we immediately boarded our airplane to leave. It seemed like
The longest airplane ride ever because we couldn’t wait to get there! Once we did finally arrive,
We boarded a shuttle that would take us to our hotel. Once I was on the shuttle, I realized I
Left my cell phone on the airplane! When we arrived at our hotel, unpacked, and settled in, we
decided to venture out to see all the wonderful things there was to do in Las Vegas!
Las Vegas has an endless amount of activities and sights to see! Our hotel alone had four
Restaurants, an outdoor swimming pool with waterfalls and two outdoor restaurants, a huge
Casino, and tons of shopping! We also visited other hotels to see attractions like New York,
New York to see their rooftop rollercoaster, and also MGM to see Sigmund and Roy’s white
tigers. Shopping at the Bellagio and Ceasar’s Palace was extraordinary, and dinners were
indescribable. I Felt so lucky to have been able to visit Las Vegas!
Conclusion:

9. Introduction: Body: Conclusion:
Last Spring, I went to Las Vegas, Nevada. I had a blast! So many
things made my trip memorable including booking my trip,
my traveling experience, and also all the wonderful things we
did while we were there. My vacation to Las Vegas is one I will
never forget, especially because of how it all began!
Body:
Booking our trip to Las Vegas was awesome! All of my friends, my sister, and I
were so excited to be going on a vacation together. First we made reservations at the
Mirage Hotel. Then, we booked our flights through Southwest Airlines. Just as we started
To build our excitement for the trip, my sister found out she was having a baby, and had to
Cancel. We felt bad that she was going to miss out on all the fun, but we couldn’t help being
excited for ourselves. We were even more thrilled when our departure day finally arrived!
When the day came to leave for Las Vegas, we could hardly wait! My friends and I met at the
airport after work one day, and we immediately boarded our airplane to leave. It seemed like
The longest airplane ride ever because we couldn’t wait to get there! Once we did finally arrive,
We boarded a shuttle that would take us to our hotel. Once I was on the shuttle, I realized I
Left my cell phone on the airplane! When we arrived at our hotel, unpacked, and settled in, we
decided to venture out to see all the wonderful things there was to do in Las Vegas!
Las Vegas has an endless amount of activities and sights to see! Our hotel alone had four
Restaurants, an outdoor swimming pool with waterfalls and two outdoor restaurants, a huge
Casino, and tons of shopping! We also visited other hotels to see attractions like New York,
New York to see their rooftop rollercoaster, and also MGM to see Sigmund and Roy’s white
tigers. Shopping at the Bellagio and Ceasar’s Palace was extraordinary, and dinners were
indescribable. I Felt so lucky to have been able to visit Las Vegas!
Conclusion:

10. Introduction: Body: Conclusion: Read through intro and body.
Last Spring, I went to Las Vegas, Nevada. I had a blast! So many things made my trip memorable including
booking my trip, my traveling experience, and also all the wonderful things we did while we were there. My
vacation to Las Vegas is one I will never forget, especially because of how it all began!
Body:
Booking our trip to Las Vegas was awesome! All of my friends, my sister, and I were so excited to be
going on a vacation together. First we made reservations at the Mirage Hotel. Then, we booked our flights
through Southwest Airlines. Just as we started to build our excitement for the trip, my sister found out she
was having a baby, and had to cancel. We felt bad that she was going to miss out on all the fun, but we
couldn’t help beingexcited for ourselves. We were even more thrilled when our departure day finally arrived!
When the day came to leave for Las Vegas, we could hardly wait! My friends and I met at the airport
after work one day, and we immediately boarded our airplane to leave. It seemed like the longest airplane ride
ever because we couldn’t wait to get there! Once we did finally arrive, we boarded a shuttle that would take us
to our hotel. Once I was on the shuttle, I realized I left my cell phone on the airplane! When we arrived at our
hotel, unpacked, and settled in, we decided to venture out to see all the wonderful things there was to do in
Las Vegas!
Las Vegas has an endless amount of activities and sights to see! Our hotel alone had four Restaurants, an
outdoor swimming pool with waterfalls and two outdoor restaurants, a huge casino, and tons of shopping! We
also visited other hotels to see attractions like New York, New York to see their rooftop rollercoaster, and also
MGM to see Sigmund and Roy’s white tigers. Shopping at the Bellagio and Ceasar’s Palace was extraordinary, and
dinners were indescribable. I Felt so lucky to have been able to visit Las Vegas!
Conclusion:
Read through intro and body.
Restate intro and wrap it up!...NO DETAILS!

11. Introduction: Body: Conclusion:
Last Spring, I went to Las Vegas, Nevada. I had a blast! So many things made my trip memorable including
booking my trip, my traveling experience, and also all the wonderful things we did while we were there. My
vacation to Las Vegas is one I will never forget, especially because of how it all began!
Body:
Booking our trip to Las Vegas was awesome! All of my friends, my sister, and I were so excited to be
going on a vacation together. First we made reservations at the Mirage Hotel. Then, we booked our flights
through Southwest Airlines. Just as we started to build our excitement for the trip, my sister found out she
was having a baby, and had to cancel. We felt bad that she was going to miss out on all the fun, but we
couldn’t help being excited for ourselves. We were even more thrilled when our departure day finally arrived!
When the day came to leave for Las Vegas, we could hardly wait! My friends and I met at the airport
after work one day, and we immediately boarded our airplane to leave. It seemed like the longest airplane ride
ever because we couldn’t wait to get there! Once we did finally arrive, we boarded a shuttle that would take us
to our hotel. Once I was on the shuttle, I realized I left my cell phone on the airplane! When we arrived at our
hotel, unpacked, and settled in, we decided to venture out to see all the wonderful things there was to do in
Las Vegas!
Las Vegas has an endless amount of activities and sights to see! Our hotel alone had four Restaurants, an
outdoor swimming pool with waterfalls and two outdoor restaurants, a huge casino, and tons of shopping! We
also visited other hotels to see attractions like New York, New York to see their rooftop rollercoaster, and also
MGM to see Sigmund and Roy’s white tigers. Shopping at the Bellagio and Ceasar’s Palace was extraordinary, and
dinners were indescribable. I Felt so lucky to have been able to visit Las Vegas!
Conclusion:
Taking a trip to Las Vegas with all of my friends is a trip I will never forget!
Planning our trip, experiencing the travels to get there, and enjoying the
different attractions are all a part of the memory we made together! I hope
to go back to Las Vegas again some day!

12. Essay Step 3: - Revising My trip to Las Vegas! 1. Read it over!
4. Change sentences that sound “funny”.
5. Change words that sound “elementary”.

13. Essay Step 4: - Editing My trip to Las Vegas! 1. S.C.O.P.E
2. Page 3 in your handbook.
3. Use Scoring Rubric as a checklist.

14. Essay Step 5: - Publishing My trip to Las Vegas! 1. Heading
2. Blue or black ink only!

15. Last Spring, I went to Las Vegas, Nevada. I had a blast
Last Spring, I went to Las Vegas, Nevada. I had a blast! So many things made my trip
memorable including booking my trip, my traveling experience, and also all the wonderful
things we did while we were there. My vacation to Las Vegas is one I will never forget, especially
because of how it all began!
Booking our trip to Las Vegas was awesome! All of my friends, my sister, and I were
so excited to be going on a vacation together. First we made reservations at the Mirage Hotel.
Then, we booked our flights through Southwest Airlines. Just as we started to build our
excitement for the trip, my sister found out she was having a baby and had to cancel. We felt
bad that she was going to miss out on all the fun, but we couldn’t help being excited for ourselves.
We were even more thrilled when our departure day finally arrived!
When the day came to leave for Las Vegas, we could hardly wait! My friends and I met
at the airport after work one day, and we immediately boarded our airplane to leave. It seemed like
the longest airplane ride ever because we couldn’t wait to get there! Once we did finally arrive, we
boarded a shuttle that would take us to our hotel. Once I was on the shuttle, I realized I left my
cell phone on the airplane! When we finally arrived at our hotel, unpacked, and settled in, we
decided to venture out to see all the wonderful things there was to do in Las Vegas!
Las Vegas has an endless amount of activities and sights to see! Our hotel alone had four
restaurants, an outdoor swimming pool with waterfalls and two outdoor restaurants, a huge casino,
and tons of shopping! We also visited other hotels to see attractions like New York, New York to
see their rooftop rollercoaster, and also MGM to see Sigmund and Roy’s white tigers. Shopping at
the Bellagio and Ceasar’s Palace was extraordinary, and dinners were indescribable. I felt so lucky to
have been able to visit Las Vegas!
Taking a trip to Las Vegas with all of my friends is a trip I will never forget! Planning our
trip, experiencing the travels to get there, and enjoying the different attractions are all a part of the
memory we made together! I hope to go back to Las Vegas again some day!