1. Thesis Statements Dos and Don’ts

2. What is wrong with the following thesis statement? Cell phones are the worst thing that has ever happened to this country because they are linked to brain cancer, they cause automobile accidents, and they distract students from their schoolwork. This statement can’t possibly be proven. It includes a sweeping word (worst). Do not include words like “always” “never” “best” “worst” “all” “none” or “every” in your thesis statement. Cell phones should not be used daily because they are linked to brain cancer, they cause automobile accidents, and they distract students from their schoolwork.

3. What is wrong with the following thesis statement? Robots are a bad thing for America. This statement is too general. Avoid words like “bad” “good” “nice” and “fun” in your thesis statement and in your writing. Be specific about why your technology is beneficial or detrimental and pose a solution. Robot manufacturing needs to be more regulated in this country because robots may be capable of harming people, harming the environment, or threatening national security.

4. What is wrong with the following thesis statement? I am writing this article about why you shouldn’t buy a hybrid car. First of all, you should not use “I” or “you” in an essay. Secondly, never start a thesis with “I am going to tell you” or “I am writing about.” Like Nike says, Just Do It! State your position like it is a fact. This is more persuasive. Despite the fact that hybrid cars have received a lot of good press, they aren’t delivering on all of their claims that they will lower hazardous emissions.

5. What is wrong with the following thesis statement? People use many lawn chemicals. This thesis is just an observation. It is unclear what the author’s position on this topic really is. You need to take a stand in your thesis. People are poisoning the environment with chemicals just to keep their lawns green.

6. What is wrong with the following thesis statement? The thesis of this paper is the problems with cochlear implants. Your thesis needs to take a stand, not announce the topic. Cochlear implants should not be approved by the Food and Drug Administration because of the many complications that can arise during and after surgery.