2. Powerpoint Templates Page 1 Powerpoint Templates English 105, Meeting 4 by Teri Tosspon, Heald College

3. Powerpoint Templates Page 2 Meeting 4 Review: Commas/ Capitalization, Thesis Intros/Conclusions New material: Run on Sentences Body Paragraphs Compare/Contrast

4. Powerpoint Templates Page 3 Futbol del Tosspon– or some variation thereof 15 minutes to correct the capitalization and punctuation on the handout Decide a “batting order” choose which player is going first. That player is responsible for answering the question drawn. The ball will move one line forward for each ITEM the player corrects from the handout, IN ORDER If they player misses one, the other team has a chance to “steal” the ball and move it down the field the opposite direction. If they make an error, the original team can steal back Both teams will try to move the ball down the field When a team scores, the ball starts all the way at the other end of the field.

5. Powerpoint Templates Page 4 Combining Sentences Coordinating 1.Use a comma & a coordinating conjunction The speaker rose to his feet, and the room became quiet. 2. Use a semicolon, an adverbial conjunction, and a comma – I worked hard; therefore, I expected results. 3. Use a semicolon I worked hard; I expected results Subordinating 1. Subordinating Conjunctions While he was eating breakfast, the news came on. 2. relative pronoun. (Who, whose, whoever, what, whatever, whichever, when, that…) The researcher who was studying diabetes had a breakthrough.

6. Powerpoint Templates Page 5 Clauses A clause is a group of words with a subject and a verb SubjectVerb Youstink. Sallyis talking. SubjectVerb Ilovegrammar Sallyis talkingloudly wMost clauses have further information after the verb

7. Powerpoint Templates Page 6 Two Types of Clauses Independent clause (Main clause) –Can stand alone as a sentence –Can be joined to another clause –Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder. Dependent clause (Subordinate clause) –Cannot stand alone as a sentence –Must be joined to an independent clause –Because he wanted to make his own firecrackers. A word that joins clauses is a conjunction

8. Powerpoint Templates Page 7 Joining Clauses A dependent clause can be joined to an independent clause to make a sentence –Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder because he wanted to make his own firecrackers. Or –Because he wanted to make his own firecrackers, Fred filled a cardboard tube with gunpowder. When the sentence starts with the dependent clause, it must have a comma before the independent clause

9. Powerpoint Templates Page 8 Run-ons green book pg 32-34 Run-ons are independent clauses that have been combined incorrectly. There are several types: –The AND run-on –The Fused run-on –The comma splice We will be going into detail on each one

10. Powerpoint Templates Page 9 The and run on (pg 146) two or more relatively long independent clauses with a coordinating conjunction without any punctuation. Goal 1 AND per sentence (some situations warrant 2) (Because this has no punctuation, we have to read it in one breath.) –I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA and we liked each other immediately and we soon became friends and we often hang out at each other’s houses.

11. Powerpoint Templates Page 10 The Fused run on two or more independent clauses run together without any punctuation. –The girls made the fire the boys cooked the steaks.

12. Powerpoint Templates Page 11 The comma splice run-on The comma splice: two or more independent clauses run together with only a comma. –I met Charlyce in a yoga class at the YWCA, we soon became friends. –Sounds right? It is actually two separate independent ideas/clauses. We COULD add a ; (semicolon) to make it correct, or we could separate into two sentences.

13. Powerpoint Templates Page 12 Run-ons In the story of Fred, identify what kind of run-on these are! Fred didn’t throw the firecracker, he placed it between his legs, he wanted to put the lighter away first. Comma splice Fused The fuse burned too quickly before he could throw it the explosive blew up between his legs.

14. Powerpoint Templates Page 13 There are 3 ways to fix Run- Ons 1.Make into 2 (or more) separate sentences. 2.Make a compound sentence *using the methods of coordination* 3.Make a complex sentence *using the methods of subordination*

15. Powerpoint Templates Page 14 Practice- Packet 1. I'd like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now. 2. She gives wonderful parties, I can't wait for her next one. 3. The people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together. 4. I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma my brother lives out there. 5. He was beaming he got an A on the exam. 1. No Change! I'd like to buy a piano, but I really don't have the money right now.. 2. Run On! She gives wonderful parties. I can't wait for her next one. 3. Fragment! The people on the park bench who meet every day and eat lunch together. ; 4. Run on! I'm saving money for a trip to Oklahoma ; my brother lives out there. 5. Run on! He was beaming. He got an A on the exam.

16. Powerpoint Templates Page 15 Body Paragraphs (p 47) Chpt 3, Turn to pg 50 Think of your essay like a Hamburger …. Mmm Without all of the pieces… it’s just not complete! Introduction/Hook Paragraphs prove your thesis. Your thesis is the MEAT!!! Conclusion

17. Powerpoint Templates Page 16 Each Paragraph has a part to play Your individual paragraphs are like pieces of pie. Topic sentence Prove your point: Evidence, a story, a quote, data, research Why does this point matter to your topic???

18. Powerpoint Templates Page 17 Topic Sentence (pg 50) Supports the thesis by clearly stating a main point in the discussion Announces what the paragraphs will be about Controls the subject matter of the paragraph Its like an umbrella for the paragraph –All of the information in the paragraph should RELATE to the topic sentence –The Topic sentence should “prove” or discuss a portion of the thesis!

19. Powerpoint Templates Page 18 Focusing & Placing (pg 53) Focusing – be specific (read examples pg 53) Placement – usually the first sentence in the body paragraph, but does not HAVE to be (read examples pg 54-55)

20. Powerpoint Templates Page 19 Paragraph Development (59) Include enough supporting info/evidence to make readers understand the topic sentence Make the information clear and specific Avoid vague generalities and repetitious ideas

21. Powerpoint Templates Page 20 Paragraph Length (pg 62) Long enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be interesting. Avoid one- or two-sentence paragraphs Divide long-ish paragraphs at a logical point. Use transitional phrases

22. Powerpoint Templates Page 21 Paragraph Unity Stick to the subject Unify sentences around a central or main idea- the topic sentence Unify paragraphs around a thesis

23. Powerpoint Templates Page 22 Paragraph Coherence Use a recognizable order –Time –Space –Deductive –Inductive Use transitional phrases Use examples, compare/contrast, sequence, results Avoid whiplash – maintain coherence!

24. Powerpoint Templates Page 23 Practice Pg 57, Letter C Add topic sentence to the paragraphs –Not all inventors had it easy in life. –Items originally owned by Elvis have increased in value substantially. –Most people do not consider writing a real occupation. –Just as records are kept for collge football winners, records are kept for college football losers!

25. Powerpoint Templates Page 24 Exposition: Compare and Contrast Pg 227

26. Compare and Contrast these 2 clips “Exposing” the subject: give information about it

27. Powerpoint Templates Page 26 Choose a partner. Work together to do a compare/contrast of the trailers –1 do the point-by-point comparison (sample on pg 228) –1 do the Block Method comparison (sample on pg 228) 1951 vs 2010 2010

28. Powerpoint Templates Page 27 Theme Characters 1951 Version Colors 1.Happy/bright 2.Greens/yellows Characters 1.Child Alice 2.Silly, over-the-top Words 1.Constant text on screen 2.Descriptive + Sentences 2010 Version Colors 1.Dark 2.Reds and blacks Characters 1.Nearly adult Alice 2.Intense, scary Words 1.Almost NO text 2.Text it actors’ names, etc. Block method: Trailer for Alice in Wonderland

29. Powerpoint Templates Page 28 Point by Point Thesis: The 2010 version of Alice in Wonderland a was MUCH darker and more sinister movie than the 1951 version. Colors 1.1951 Version: Happy/bright; Greens/yellows 2.2010 Version: Dark; Reds/blacks Characters 1.1951: Child Alice; Silly, over-the-top 2.2010: Nearly adult Alice; intense/scary! Tone 1.1951: Wonder, surprise; Mischievous 2.2010: evil/harmful magic; fearful, intense

30. Powerpoint Templates Page 29 Known Issues (pg 230-231) 1.“So what?” – a)Why should your reader care? FIND A PURPOSE b)Direct your thesis to a particular audience 2.Describe your subjects clearly and distinctly 3.Avoid a choppy essay – use transitions! (pg 231)

31. Powerpoint Templates Page 30 Paragraph planning part 2 Take each one of your topics from the pre-write Develop each one more fully into a paragraph with an example –(quotes, stories, data, facts, etc.) This will help you determine what you need to research The queen of hearts was similar in both films. The Queen in the 1951 version was fat, angry and yelling at her staff, ordering, “Off with his head” for a card off who had minor slip of talking to Alice. The queen of hearts was evil, self- centered, and murderous in both films. But in the 1951 version, she’s not as brutal. In comparing the first appearance of the queen in each movie, it was noted… 1951 movie, 22:30 2010 movie, 18:11 It shows that both films are similar in the main characters’ personalities. The queen is less scary. Most of 1951 A-in-W ‘s characters were more innocent and childlike than the 2010 version The Queen in the 2010 version was small, angry and yelling at her staff, saying “You're right, Stayne. It is far better to be feared than loved.”

32. Powerpoint Templates Page 31 Assignment 1.Choose your topic –choose from: 231-232 –http://homeworktips.about.com/od/essaywriting/a/compare.htmhttp://homeworktips.about.com/od/essaywriting/a/compare.htm 2.Do a pre-write for your topic (during class today) 3.Complete 2-3 Paragraph plan handouts 4.Determine what kind of information you will need for your quotes –Next week: how to introduce quotes. 5.Research. Find sources and appropriate quotes/data/information/opinions.

33. Powerpoint Templates Page 32 Some additional topic options pg 231-232 Halloween night to prom night. Your best friend to your archenemy. Weeds to flowers. Slave insurrection to the Revolutionary War. Being the president to being a homeless person. Being a snob to being a nerd. Christopher Columbus to early astronauts. School bullies to dictators. Writing essays to going to the dentist. Church sermons to campaign speeches. Acting to lying. Hurricanes to blizzards. The 1970s to another decade. The decisions of Red Riding Hood to the decisions of Goldilocks. Wandering on the African plain to drifting in the open sea. Making an apple pie to making a mud pie. Being afraid to being bored. The influence of music to the influence of books. The influence of celebrities to the influence of parents. Learning to ride a bike to learning to drive a car. Going to a movie to watching a movie at home. Spending time with your friend to spending time with your dog. Playing Wii™ games to playing real games.

34. Homework Compare/Contrast 1st draft DUE @ beginning of NEXT MEETING (50 points) Read: Compare/Contrast Student Essays – pgs 233-239 Research Scaffold Vocab 3 – choose 10 words from the articles you choose for your compare contrast paper or GRE words