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1 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining Why is the second example more effective than the first? Many geologists think that the San Andreas Fault is going to generate an earthquake. This earthquake is likely to happen sometime in the next 20 years. This earthquake is likely to be very intense. Many geologists think that the San Andreas Fault is going to generate a very intense earthquake sometime in the next 20 years. Next i

2 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining Why is the second example more effective than the first? Many geologists think that the San Andreas Fault is going to generate an earthquake. This earthquake is likely to happen sometime in the next 20 years. This earthquake is likely to be very intense. Many geologists think that the San Andreas Fault is going to generate a very intense earthquake sometime in the next 20 years. Next i CLOSE The second example presents the ideas clearly and concisely.

3 Wordiness MENUEXIT When you combine short, related sentences and sentence parts into single sentences, your writing will flow more smoothly clearly show relationships among ideas be more interesting to read Sentence Combining Next PREVIOUS

4 Wordiness Use the following sentence combining strategies as you revise. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENUEXIT MENU Sentence Combining Combine whole sentences Combine sentence parts Insert words or phrases Use an appositive phrase Combine with who, which, and thatCombine with who, which, and that

5 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Continue…

6 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? Seabiscuit was a small horse. He had the speed of a much larger animal. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

7 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? Seabiscuit was a small horse. He had the speed of a much larger animal. PREVIOUS

8 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Seabiscuit was a small horse. He had the speed of a much larger animal.. He PREVIOUS

9 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Seabiscuit was a small horse had the speed of a much larger animal. PREVIOUS

10 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Seabiscuit was a small horse had the speed of a much larger animal., but he PREVIOUS

11 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Seabiscuit was a small horse had the speed of a much larger animal., but he Notice how combining the sentences makes the relationship between the ideas clearer. Next PREVIOUS

12 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora. His older brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often had several sons. Only the oldest son inherited the family fortune. Click to see the answer PREVIOUS

13 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora. His older brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often had several sons. Only the oldest son inherited the family fortune. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

14 Wordiness MENUEXIT My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora. His older brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often had several sons. Only the oldest son inherited the family fortune. ORIGINAL REVISED My great-grandfather Jorge was born in Zamora, and his older brother was born in Madrid. In those days, families often had several sons, but only the oldest son inherited the family fortune. Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Combine Whole Sentences Next

15 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Use subordinating conjunctions like these to combine two sentences whose ideas are not equally important. The less important sentence then becomes a subordinate clause. when after before until while since because as if so that providedwhether if unless though although Next PREVIOUS

16 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining How might these two sentences be combined using a subordinating conjunction? I tried out for the swim team. I wanted to be like my grandmother Maria. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

17 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining This revision combines the two sentences, making the less important idea the subordinate clause. I tried out for the swim team. I wanted to be like my grandmother Maria. ORIGINAL REVISED I tried out for the swim team because I wanted to be like my grandmother Maria. Next PREVIOUS

18 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining How would you combine these sentences using subordinating conjunctions? Jorge decided to go to the Philippines. Opportunities were better there. He didn’t know anyone. He found work right away. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

19 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Notice how much more smoothly the revised sentences flow. Also notice that the relationships between ideas are now clearer. Jorge decided to go to the Philippines. Opportunities were better there. He didn’t know anyone. He found work right away. ORIGINAL REVISED Jorge decided to go to the Philippines because opportunities were better there. Although he didn’t know anyone, he found work right away. Menu PREVIOUS

20 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. Continue…

21 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. PREVIOUS How can these sentences be combined by creating a compound subject? My teammates always laughed at my jokes. The coach laughed, too. Click to see a revision

22 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. PREVIOUS Because the students and the coach are both performing the same action, these sentences can easily be combined. My teammates always laughed at my jokes. The coach laughed, too. ORIGINAL REVISED My teammates and the coach always laughed at my jokes. Next

23 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Jorge hoped to meet someone at the dance. Pilar Luisa hoped to meet someone there too. They met during the first samba. They have been together ever since. Click to see the answer PREVIOUS

24 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Jorge hoped to meet someone at the dance. Pilar Luisa hoped to meet someone there too. They met during the first samba. They have been together ever since. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

25 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Combining similar subjects and predicates with coordinating conjunctions gives the paragraph a better flow and makes it more interesting to read. Jorge and Pilar Luisa both hoped to meet someone at the dance. They met during the first samba and have been together ever since. Menu PREVIOUS

26 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Continue…

27 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS How could these two sentences be combined? We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path. Click to see a revision

28 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS How could these two sentences be combined? We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path.

29 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the path into the first sentence. We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path. path. It was a

30 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the path into the first sentence. We stumbled along the path. It was a rough and rocky path.

31 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the path into the first sentence. We stumbled along the path. It warough and rocky path.

32 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the path into the first sentence. We stumbled along the pat rough and rocky path.

33 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the path into the first sentence. We stumbled along the rough and rocky path. Next

34 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining In this example, what words could be inserted from one sentence into the other? The best-known earthquake fault in the United States is in California. It is the San Andreas Fault. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

35 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining The new sentence is now concise and direct. The best-known earthquake fault in the United States is in California. It is the San Andreas Fault. ORIGINAL REVISED One of the best-known earthquake faults in the United States is the San Andreas Fault in California. Next PREVIOUS

36 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Continue…

37 Wordiness Click to see the word that must change form MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. PREVIOUS Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute. The changes were technical.

38 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Click to see a revision Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute. The changes were technical.

39 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute. The changes were technical.

40 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute. The changes were technical. The changes were technical.

41 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.

42 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.

43 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute.

44 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute. technically

45 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Next The changes to the drawings were challenging to execute. technically

46 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What word in these sentences could change form in order to combine the two sentences? We loved the marching band. They were from Australia. Click to see a revision

47 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Adding –n­ to Australia turns it into an adjective which can be used to describe the marching band. We loved the marching band. They were from Australia. ORIGINAL REVISED We loved the Australian marching band. Next

48 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Continue…

49 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? The clowns were amusing. They were in the miniature car. Click to see the phrase

50 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? The clowns were amusing. They were in the miniature car. Click to see a revision

51 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. The clowns were amusing. They were in the miniature car. ORIGINAL REVISED The clowns in the miniature car were amusing. Next

52 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted every twenty-five miles. Click to see the phrase

53 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted every twenty-five miles. Click to see a revision

54 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted every twenty-five miles.

55 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Detour signs are posted along Route 91. They are posted every twenty-five miles. every twenty-five miles. They are posted

56 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Detour signs are posted along Route 91.

57 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Detour signs are posted along Route 91.

58 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Detour signs are posted along Route 91.

59 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Detour signs are posted along Route 91.

60 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Detour signs are posted along Route 91. every twenty-five miles

61 Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Menu Detour signs are posted along Route 91. every twenty-five miles

62 Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. Continue…

63 Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. PREVIOUS What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? A favorite dish in Japan is nori, a seaweed, and rice. Click to see the appositive phrase

64 Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. PREVIOUS What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? A favorite dish in Japan is nori, a seaweed, and rice. Next

65 Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Continue…

66 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand marshal of the parade. When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Click to see the sentence Use an Appositive Phrase

67 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Click to see a revision When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand marshal of the parade. Use an Appositive Phrase

68 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand marshal of the parade. Use an Appositive Phrase

69 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand marshal of the parade.. Battaglia is Use an Appositive Phrase

70 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battaglia is the grand marshal of the parade. Use an Appositive Phrase

71 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battagli the grand marshal of the parade. Use an Appositive Phrase

72 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The mayor met with Frank Battaglia. Battthe grand marshal of the parade. Use an Appositive Phrase

73 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The mayor met with Frank Battaglia the grand marshal of the parade. Use an Appositive Phrase

74 Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The mayor met with Frank Battaglia, the grand marshal of the parade. Menu Use an Appositive Phrase

75 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Continue…

76 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Marie Curie won the Nobel Prize for chemistry. She founded the Radium Institute. A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Click to see the answer

77 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Marie Curie won the Nobel Prize for chemistry. She founded the Radium Institute. A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Click to see a revision

78 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Marie Curie won the Nobel Prize for chemistry. She founded the Radium Institute. ORIGINAL REVISED Marie Curie, who founded the Radium Institute, won a Nobel Prize for chemistry. Next

79 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Their oldest son Carlos was an outstanding athlete. He became a champion swimmer. He competed in the Pan Asian Games. These games were held in Manila. He won the Silver Cup. It sits on their fireplace mantel. Click to see a revision

80 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Their oldest son Carlos was an outstanding athlete. He became a champion swimmer. He competed in the Pan Asian Games. These games were held in Manila. He won the Silver Cup. It sits on their fireplace mantel. Click to see a revision

81 Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Turning these phrases into clauses makes this paragraph less repetitive and more concise. Their oldest son Carlos was an outstanding athlete who became a champion swimmer. He competed in the Pan Asian Games, which were held in Manila. He won the Silver cup that sits on their mantel. Menu


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