2. Improving Descriptive Writing Painting an Original Picture

3. Purpose of Descriptive Writing  Describe something in an original and unique so that it appeals to the five senses  Touch it  Taste it  Hear it  See it  Smell it

4. Keys of Being Descriptive  Be original  Be creative  Stretch your imagination  For example, instead of this: The hot, yellow sun went behind the mountain and covered the valley in red.  The sun cut itself on a sharp peak and bled into the valley.—John Steinbeck  Try this:

5. How’s This?  She was super hero beautiful. Her hair was as black as coal, her lips red as blood. Is it original and creative?

6. Clichés: The Descriptive Killer  1 : a trite phrase or expression; Also : the idea expressed by it  2 : something (as a menu item) that has become overly familiar or commonplace

7. Finding Clichés Through Experience  If you have seen it  Or heard it  It’s probably a cliché

8. Finding Clichés Through Others  Ask someone really old  (You know, anyone over 21)

9. Finding Clichés On-line  Choose a keyword to look up  Go to a cliché website and look up the keyword  Cliché finder is one of the best places to look: http://www.westegg.Com/cliche/ http://www.westegg.Com/cliche/  You may have to try more than one keyword

10. Fixing Clichés  Identify the clichés  Replace them with more descriptive writing –Think of a new comparison –Look up words in a thesaurus –www.m-w.comwww.m-w.com

11. A Little Practice  Each of you will be given a poem  Identify ALL the clichés  Replace half of them (you can choose the easiest ones if you’d like)  Don’t worry about making it rhyme  We’ll do the first stanza together

12. Which of the following do think are clichés? She’s as pure as the driven snow, Her face is as white as a sheet, Her hands are as smooth as silk, Her nails as red as a beet. She’s as pure as the driven snow, Her face is as white as a sheet, Her hands are as smooth as silk, Her nails as red as a beet.

13. She’s as pure as the driven snow, Her face is as white as a sheet, Her hands are as smooth as silk, Her nails as red as a beet. Her hair is like the golden sun, Her eyes blue like the sky, She’s as beautiful as an angel, and as hot as a firecracker on the 4 th of July. Her temper is as quick as lightning, Her hatred cold as ice, Her laughter is loud and clear, But her crying is as quiet as mice. Her beauty may be skin deep, But her mind is as sharp as a knife. I’m just small potatoes, And she seems larger than life They say she’s one in a million, But I don’t believe what they say. If she’s all that and a bag of chips, Why say it with a cliché? Same Old New Girl Assignments turned in tomorrow at the beginning of class will be eligible for full credit