1. foreward

2. a citizenship reminder

3. ***From your syllabus: We all must feel comfortable, and we all must have respect for one another even though our viewpoints may (can and will) differ, we still need to grant another’s right to their beliefs, even if something they are saying seems “wrong” to you.

4. ***From your syllabus: Because of this, I ask that we give one another the utmost respect. Who knows, maybe we’ll learn a little something new about each other, our different cultures, and our different lives.

5. We don’t all agree; we aren’t supposed. This class (in conjunction with being a writing class) is very much a thinking class.

6. Thinking about concepts we may not have considered before … Thinking about viewpoints we may not have considered before … Thinking about our own viewpoints, why we have them, and what if anything we should change about them.

7. That said: You won’t agree with me nor I with you, but there is room for all of our opinions, and there is room for change. That’s where our writing comes in— writing to inspire change!

8. In this class, you are writing to inspire the changes YOU want to see happen!

9. narratives wra115 / spring 2007 sue webb

10. addressing global-to-local issues

11. Evaluation Scale: Excellent=4 Good=3 Fair in Some Parts=2 Weak=1 Assignment/Audience: completed all requirements of the writing assignment; your essay is sensitive to your audience. Thought: Your essay shows that you have thought deeply about your topic; You point out things that many people may not have noticed before. Organization/Unity: Your essay is organized around a thesis; your body paragraphs are unified and related to the thesis; you use transitions to connect ideas between sentences and between paragraphs. Support/Development: You support your ideas with specific reasons, details, and examples, which add “spice” to your essay; in developing your ideas, you integrate paraphrase and quotation from reading material. Language/Grammar: Your essay demonstrates control of sentence structure, punctuation, spelling, and other grammatical elements. Your sentences vary in structure and style. You use a wide range of vocabulary correctly.

12. be specific

13. who? what? where? when? why? how?

14. me, I, my, my best friend, our neighbor, etc. USE SPECIFIC PEOPLE, SPECIFIC PLACES, SPECIFICS IN GENERAL!

15. Generalities Kids today… In today’s society… In this day and age…

16. me, I, my, my best friend, our neighbor, this guy named john.

17. who? what? where? when? why? how?

18. who? My best friend, Jamie what? Took LSD where? One night, out at Cheney Lake when? She was 19, I think it was 1980 why? I never did understand what the hell happened. She freaked out; ended up drinking a can of Raid and spending 6 weeks in the psych ward of St. Francis hospital. She hasn’t been the same since. how?

19. specifics

20. who? what? where? when? why? how?

21. details “That was the last I remember of that night. The next morning, I woke up in my bed to find white monitor stickers all over my stomach and a hospital bracelet on my wrist. At 2 a.m. on January 1, I was checked into hospital X for overdosing on alcohol. I blew a.29 that night, or as the doctor explained to my parents, if I would have gone to sleep that night without getting treatment, I would have died from overdosing.”

22. the names the scene the place the date & time the reasons the means

23. give readers the details and you reel them in!

24. spelling & grammar

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28. proofreading please! Ever been told to READ ALOUD? You should!

30. there / their / they’re a place / ownership / sub+verb

31. then / than next / comparing

32. you

33. adding “spice”

34. description “My friends would always buy the greenest, fluffiest, most gorgeous looking marijuana with orange hairs all over it.”

35. description “After the two longest days of my life, it was finally Friday! I put the mushrooms in my pocket and hopped into my car. What I didn’t know was that the license plate had expired. After about two minutes of driving, I looked back and saw flashing lights in the review. My heart sank. I was starting to shake and sweat began to bead on my forehead. I kept telling myself to calm down, but the shaking wouldn’t stop.”

36. punctuation commas & semi-colons that *%!$(^& comma

37. single/plural issues “When they got her to the hospital, she was in a coma. They called her mother who got there as fast as they could.”

38. keeping tense pick one Occasionally you may work in a flashback or a flash forward, but generally you will work in either past or present tense.

39. metaphor “So we all scurry out of the house to our cars like cockroaches from light.”

40. ordering events “After driving about 10 minutes, I knew I was close when I saw many of my friend’s cars parked on the street. Marching through the snow, and parking the car, I was happy to get inside the warm home and see many of my friends.”

41. ordering events “The following morning, I woke up at about one o’clock in the afternoon.”

42. technique “I’m fucked is the only thing reoccurring in my head. … Hands where I can see them,” he tells me as I get out of the car. Holy shit! I’m getting arrested two weeks before my eighteenth birthday.”

43. parallelism “Between the ride along with officers and looking through files, there was never a dull moment.”

44. on being profound “Honestly I believe the root of his [drug] problems came from when he lost his arm down to about the elbow in an accident at his job. … He feels he cannot function unless he is high, for it helps him numb the pain he feels from the devastation of losing his arm.”

45. on being profound “I did not get out of trouble because “God” helped me; I got out of trouble because America’s judicial system is racially and economically unfair. I was white and middle class, so I caught a break. If I was born a poor, black kid in the ghetto and got in that situation with the cops, I would have been beaten until my face was pulp.”

46. on being profound “For some reason, marijuana takes longer to get out of a person’s system than any of the other drugs.... Since he could not risk getting caught smoking, he started doing other drugs more and more often. He got into drugs that would not show up on drug tests.”

47. writing the analysis This powerpoint will be available through our home page and you can download it and refer to it for your future work(s).

48. posting your papers I’ll make a folder in the common Lackey-Webb ANGEL site for you to post your works. This is optional, but feel free to remove names and places (use John and Kalamazoo) – I think it would be most valuable to one another to gain the perspectives of your classmates. While there are over 50 of you, with over 50 different histories and lives, you still share some amazing similarities and some profound moments in your lives. We would all grow by reading one another's’ stories. I’ll make a folder in the common Lackey-Webb ANGEL site for you to post your works. This is optional, but feel free to remove names and places (use John and Kalamazoo) – I think it would be most valuable to one another to gain the perspectives of your classmates. While there are over 50 of you, with over 50 different histories and lives, you still share some amazing similarities and some profound moments in your lives. We would all grow by reading one another's’ stories. —OPTIONAL

49. writing the analysis This powerpoint will be available through our home page and you can download it and refer to it for your future work(s).

50. credits Ashley, Abby, Jackson, Joe, Ruba, Luis, Alonzo, Alex, Leanna, Luke, Kerry, Josh, John, Daeik, Jeff, Ben, So Yean, Joe, Katey, Katelyn, Justin, Jeff, Josh, Jameka, Angela, Tony, Lavoughnda © 2007