1. Are You Writing General Details? OR Are You Writing Specific Details? Cafeteria Writing January 21, 2011

2. The Key to Ideas How to FOCUS and Control Your Ideas Relevant Supporting Ideas Major Details Specific Examples And Elaboration

3. Informational Paragraph Example Sample Body Paragraph Some people don’t choose to exercise, but instead eat the right foods! Eating the right foods can help you stay fit too! People should eat around five to six servings of breads and pasta a day. For fluids people should drink healthy liquids such as water, milk, and orange juice. Relevant Supporting Idea Major Detail Specific Details and Examples Controlling Idea or Focus:There are many ways to stay healthy.

4. 5 th Grade Example of a Paper Scoring 1 out of 5 (Does Not Meet) Hi. I heard you want to be healthy. So follow these tips. If you want to be healthy exercise everyday. Another way to stay healthy is eat the right foods. Also, remember not to be lazy. So there you have it. Have fun being healthy.

5. There are many ways to stay healthy. One way to stay fit is to exercise and stretch often. Another way to stay fit is to eat the right foods. Getting fit is a hard thing to do because there are also many things not to do. Most people who want to stay healthy choose to exercise. Playing sports is a great way to stay active! You should play sports everyday. Some people don’t choose to exercise, but instead eat the right foods! People should eat the right number of servings of each food group each day. Eating the right foods will make you feel good. Although there are many things you can do to stay fit, there are also many things you can’t do and won’t help. To me the biggest thing someone could do to make them not fit is to act very lazy. Being fit is a great thing. So remember to be healthy. 5 th Grade Example of a Paper Scoring 2 out of 5 (Does Not Meet)

6. There are many ways to stay healthy. One way to stay fit is to exercise and stretch often. Another way to stay fit is to eat the right foods. Getting fit is a hard thing to do because there are also many things not to do. Most people who want to stay healthy choose to exercise. Playing sports is a great way to stay active! People can play basketball or soccer. A lot play baseball. While other, play tennis or swim often. Some even jog, walk, or bike to stay fit. Some people don’t choose to exercise, but instead eat the right foods! People should eat the right number of servings of each food group each day. Eating the right foods can help you stay fit too! And it will make you feel good. Although there are many things you can do to stay fit, there are also many things you can’t do and won’t help. To me the biggest thing someone could do to make them not fit is to act very lazy. Being lazy will make it hard to stay fit because exercising and eating the right foods will be harder for them. Being fit is a great thing. Now you have some great tips you can use. Remember stay active not lazy! 5 th Grade Example of a Paper Scoring 3 out of 5 (Meets)

7. There are many ways to stay healthy. From exercising often to eating the right foods to avoiding some things, there are many ways to do a body good. Most people who want to stay healthy choose to exercise. Playing sports is a great way to stay active! People can play basketball or soccer. A lot play baseball. While others, play tennis or swim often. Some even jog, walk, or bike to stay fit. Some people don’t choose to exercise, but instead eat the right foods! Eating the right foods can help you stay fit too! People should eat around five to six servings of breads and pasta a day. For fluids people should drink healthy liquids such as water, milk, and orange juice. Although there are many things you can do to stay fit, there are also many things you can’t do and won’t help. To me the biggest thing someone could do to make them not fit is to act very lazy. Being lazy will make it hard to stay fit because exercising and eating the right foods will be harder for them. Occasionally people will just jump on the couch grab a bag of popcorn, and just stay there and watch TV for a long time, but this is absolutely something that people shouldn’t do. Being fit is a great thing. Now you have some great tips you can use. Remember stay active not lazy! 5 th Grade Example of a Paper Scoring 4 out of 5 (Meets)

8. Many people wonder if they’re getting fit or fat. Some choose to be fit and other unintentionally choose to be fat. One way to stay fit is to exercise and stretch often. Another way to stay fit is to eat the right foods. Getting fit is a hard thing to do because there are also many things not to do. Most people who want to stay healthy choose to exercise. Playing sports is a great way to stay active! People can play basketball or soccer. A lot play baseball. While other, play tennis or swim often. Some even jog, walk, or bike to stay fit. There are many sports so don’t give up if your bad at one, try another! Staying active is a great way to stay fit. Some people don’t choose to exercise, but instead eat the right foods! People should eat around five to six servings of breads and pasta a day. For fluids people should drink healthy liquids such as water, milk, and orange juice. A decent amount of kids don’t get enough vegetables; people should eat two to three servings each day, meats are near three to four servings a day. Eating the right foods can help you stay fit too! Although there are many things you can do to stay fit, there are also many things you can’t do and won’t help. One is eat a lot of fats, oils, and sweets; instead, eat them sparingly (once in a while). However, many people become addicted to fast food restaurant’s foods like french fries, bit this is a major “NO”! Instead, you should go to fast food restaurants every once in a while. Occasionally people will just jump on the couch grab a bag of popcorn, and just stay there and watch TV for a long time, but this is absolutely something that people shouldn’t do. To me the biggest thing someone could do to make them not fit is to act very lazy. Being lazy will make it hard to stay fit because exercising and eating the right foods will be harder for them. Being fit is a great thing. People can exercise to achieve this goal. They can also eat the right foods. Although most people only do one of the two, doing both would be much better and improve your life a whole lot more! Remember stay active not lazy! 5 th Grade Example Paper Scoring 5 out of 5 - Exceeds

9. Jump from Boring General Details to Super Specific Details Controlling Idea or Focus:There are many ways to stay healthy. You could write this Relevant Idea and this two very boring General Details OR Most people who want to stay healthy choose to exercise. Playing sports is a great way to stay active! You should play sports everyday. Be more Specific and write your Relevant Detail with a Major Detail and many Specific Details Most people who want to stay healthy choose to exercise. Playing sports is a great way to stay active! For example, I love to play football. In football, you run a lot, which makes your heart and legs stronger. One time I played football for about 3 hours. I must have lost about 1,000 calories. GENERALGENERAL SPECIFICSPECIFIC

10. Let’s Try One More Super Specific Details You could write this Relevant Idea and this two very boring General Details OR We have such a good time at our annual family reunion. I love all the fun things I do with my cousins. Have you ever been to a family reunion? Be more Specific and write your Relevant Detail with a Major Detail and many Specific Details We have such a good time at our annual family reunion. I love all the fun things I do with my cousins. For instance, I love to play football with my cousins because we enjoy the competition. The grown-ups sit and watch, and they also cheer us on. The winning team gets blue ribbons. Controlling Idea or Focus: Family reunions can be fun. GENERALGENERAL SPECIFICSPECIFIC

11. Can you handle it alone? Super Specific Details Controlling Idea or Focus: Play-Station 4 is a great product for a company to manufacture. You could write this Relevant Idea and a few very dull General Details OR The new Play-Station 4 comes with way more cool games than the old Play-Station. These games are really neat. People would love to play these games. Be more Specific and write your Relevant Detail with a Major Detail and many Specific Details The Play-Station 4 comes with way more cool games than the old Play-Station. Some of these games are................................................ GENERALGENERAL SPECIFICSPECIFIC

12. Ms. Parsons came up with this? Super Specific Details Controlling Idea or Focus: Play-Station 4 is a great product for a company to manufacture. You could write this Relevant Idea and a few very dull General Details OR The new Play-Station 4 comes with way more cool games than the old Play-Station. These games are really neat. People would love to play these games. Be more Specific and write your Relevant Detail with a Major Detail and many Specific Details The Play-Station 4 comes with way more cool games than the old Play-Station. Some of these games are Mortal Combat 105, Rockin the Night Away Karaoke, and Can You Beat the Pittsburgh Steelers Football. The Steelers football game is the best, as you compete against Ben Roethlisberger and Heinz Ward. Can you beat the Steel Curtain of Defense? GENERALGENERAL SPECIFICSPECIFIC

13. Okay, now try another Super Specific Details Controlling Idea or Focus: You could write this Relevant Idea and a few very dull General Details OR Outdoor recess is a great way for students to get exercise. Kids need to get exercise everyday. It’s good for them to go outside for recess. Be more Specific and write your Relevant Detail with a Major Detail and many Specific Details Outdoor recess is a great way for students to get exercise. (Well, why is it good for them?) Students need to have outdoor recess every day at school. GENERALGENERAL SPECIFICSPECIFIC