6. When you write something, do you ever stop to think about what other people will think about it?

7. Rule #1: Your essay should be neat and easy to read

8. Fact: The human eye is drawn to beauty….. People like to look at pretty things!

9. businesses know this ….. fashion designers know this …. movie producers know this ….

11. Think about your handwriting. Is it messy ?

12. Is your handwriting so tiny that no one can read it? (so tiny that no one can read it?) Do people need special equipment to read your handwriting? !

14. 2 people go for a job interview. Which one “looks” like a better worker? Which man do you think is more likely to get the job?

15. 2 students turn in an assignment. Which paper looks better? Which one looks like the student worked harder?

16. bad appearance = (often) bad content good appearance = (often) good content

17. Neat writing is important!

19. Rule #2: Try not to use the same easy words over and over again

22. Which room is more interesting? This one? Or this one?

23. When you use the same vocabulary again and again, your writing is kind of like this picture …… Why not use a lot of different colors (vocabulary) to make it more interesting?

25. Problem: Are your sentences too “salty” (do you repeat the same easy words again and again?)

26. I like to go to Al Ain Mall because it’s near my home. My favorite restaurant is Hatim because I like the food there. I shop at Paris Gallery because it has all my favorite perfumes. I also like to go there because of the games area and the cinema has good movies.

27. Solution: use synonyms I like to go to Al Ain Mall because it’s near my home. My favorite restaurant is Hatim since I like the food there. I shop at Paris Gallery as it has all my favorite perfumes. Another reason I like to go there is for the games area, and the cinema has good movies.

28. What are some other ways to say these words?

29. and

30. also in addition moreover furthermore

31. so

32. therefore as a result consequently

33. but

34. yet however on the other hand in contrast

35. later

36. after that next then later on afterwards

37. in conclusion

38. in summary in brief in short to sum up all in all

39. Your fingerprints are unique Your eyes are unique

40. Rule #3: Make sure you do what the topic is asks you to do

41. When you go to a restaurant …. Q: What will you do if the waitress brings you the wrong order? Are you going to eat it, or are you going to send it back to get what you really wanted?

42. “Enjoy your fish.” “Fish? I ordered PIZZA! I want PIZZA!”

43. Q: When you go the salon to get your hair done for a party or special occasion, how will you feel if they style your hair like this?

44. Of course, you expect to get exactly what you asked for. Anything less is unacceptable! You would surely agree that following directions and doing things correctly is important. Teachers, just like you, should receive exactly what they ask you for on your assignments.

45. Rule #4: Don’t use a lot of short, simple sentences

46. My name is Mariam. I live in Al Ain. I have a big family. We live in Zakher. My major is Business. I enjoy shopping.

47. Problem: Are your sentences like chopped onions (too short?)

51. My name is Mariam, and I live in Al Ain. Because I have a big family, we have a large villa in Zakher. I want to have my own company, so my major is Business. On the weekends, I spend time with my family. In addition, I enjoy shopping with friends.

57. Rule # 5: Give lots of details and examples

58. Q: Have you ever bought a large bag of chips and opened it to find that ….

59. ….. it’s only about half full? how does this make you feel?

61. You’re still hungry? Have some bread!

62. I think you’ll agree that this is not enough food. It’s a little bit of food, but not nearly enough to be a complete meal.

64. When you go to a restaurant, you expect a complete dinner. When you buy chips, you expect a full package. Teachers, like you, want the complete package. When you write an essay, give lots of details and examples.

65. Problem: Are your paragraphs empty like a desert (with too few details?)

66. My bedroom is my favorite room. It is pink and. It’s quiet. I like to sit in there with my sister. I can do what I want there.

67. Solution: add details My bedroom is my favorite room. The walls are pink, and the carpet is white. My bed has a pink cover with lots of white pillows. The curtains are also pink. There’s a large window, so I can see our garden. Some family pictures are on the walls. Beside my bed there’s a table with a lamp. Also, I have a desk and large wardrobe. This room is quiet, so I can study or read there. My sister likes to sit with me in my bedroom, and we can do what we want.

68. Now your desert is a garden!

69. Useful words for explaining and giving examples: because since furthermore moreover in addition for example for instance

70. Look at the following sentences from Writing Project #1, about how a person looks and acts. Have they been explained? Are there examples? My mother is important in my life. My sister is very beautiful. My best friend Reem is a good person.

71. What about these statements. Have they been explained? My mother is important in my life because she always listens to my problems and advises me. My sister is very beautiful. She has long, thick, black hair, amazing green eyes, and a perfect smile. My best friend Reem is a good person. For example, she always helps her younger sisters and brothers with their homework.

72. When you explain, you also answer questions, such as: Who? What? When? Where? Why? How?

73. There was one scary day in my life that I cannot forget. What happened? --- an earthquake Who was there? --- my friends and I Where was this? --- in Mexico City, in a hotel When was this? --- July 10, 2001 at 3 a.m. Why was I scared? --- windows were shaking; walls were moving How did we act? --- we were afraid, but we tried to stay calm; we stood in the doorway

74. When you describe something with lots of details and examples, the person who reads your paper can “see” a picture in his head. Listen to 2 paragraphs about a wedding. Which paragraph has the best details and examples? Which wedding can you “see” more in your mind?

75. Paragraph 1 My sister’s wedding was a lot of fun. It was in 2003 at the Hilton in Al Ain. My whole family was there. There was a nice dinner. Everyone was happy. Later there was music, so some people danced. I took a lot of pictures of my sister’s special day. We will miss her in our home, but I think she will be happy in her new life.

76. Paragraph 2 My sister’s wedding was a lot of fun. It was in September 2013 at the Palm Atlantis Hotel in Jumeirah Beach in Dubai. The party hall was a light blue room with a large, beautiful dark blue and pink carpet. The room was decorated with hundreds of pink and purple flowers. There were also lots of pink and purple balloons. The tables all had white cloths on them, and there were silver candles on top of each table. Musicians played Arabic and Indian music up on the front stage. Everyone was happy, and they danced to Bollywood songs. My whole family was there --- even my cousins who live in Bahrain and Oman. The women especially were all wearing long, beautiful gowns of different colors, and they had on lots of jewelry. There was a huge buffet of Indian food, so we ate dishes like chicken biryani, beef, lamb, and fish tikka. Then, there was a large white cake that had pink flowers all over it. Guests ate the cake with tea and coffee. Later on, many of the guests came and gave my sister presents wrapped with pretty paper and colorful ribbons.

77. Rule #6: Make sure you organize your information in the correct place

78. Q: What do a doctor, a mechanic, and a teacher all have in common? A: Hmmm, let’s see ……

79. “I’m a mechanic ….. so I look for certain things in certain places.”

80. “If I want to check the engine, I don’t look inside of the car!”

81. “If I want to check the oil, I don’t look at the tires!”

82. “ I’m a doctor, and when I check someone’s blood pressure … I don’t look at his feet!”

83. Doctors, like mechanics, look for certain things in certain places “I look for the heart in the chest, not on top of the head!”

84. So do teachers … “I’m looking for an introduction with a main idea in it.”

85. “To find the details, I look at the body paragraphs.”

86. “When I look at a conclusion, I expect to find a restatement of the main idea.”

88. 1-2 general sentences specific main idea topic sentence detail sentences restatement of main idea 1-2 general closing comments Introduction Body Conclusion

89. Other Kinds of Writing Problems  stringy sentences

90. Problem: Are your sentences like spaghetti (too long and stringy?)

91. On the weekend I like to spend time with my family, and we go to the desert or sometimes I go with my friend Mariam to the shopping mall because it’s fun there, and my favorite mall is Dubai Mall because it has a huge cinema, aquarium, Burj Khalifa and lots of other stores.

92. Solution: add some punctuation On the weekend I like to spend time with my family, and we go to the desert. Sometimes I go with my friend Mariam to the shopping mall because it’s fun there. My favorite mall is Dubai Mall because it has a huge cinema, aquarium, Burj Khalifa and lots of other stores.