1. 20-23 Word Choice: Redundancy, Tone, and Style

2. Delete synonymous and wordy material in a sentence Incorrect: The firefighter put out the hot fire. Correct: The firefighter put out the fire. (Fire is hot.)

4. Avoid wordiness! Write as simply and clearly as possible. Incorrect: School starts at 8 a.m. in the morning. Correct: School starts at 8 a.m. (a.m. means morning)

6. Practice Eliminating Redundancies How many redundancies can you find in the following commercial? http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VsbOuaFh 0Rk http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VsbOuaFh 0Rk

7. Synonymous Pairs in Writing Past memoriesVarious differencesEach individualBasic fundamentals True factsFuture plansTerrible tragedyEnd result Free giftPast historyUnexpected surprise Completely finish Large/small in sizeRound/square in shape Heavy/light in weight Period in time Choose one set of synonymous pairs and explain WHY these are wordy/unnecessary. Incorrect Example: You will receive a free gift if you spend $20 at our store. (All gifts are free.) Correct: You will receive a gift if you spend $20 at our store.

8. Choose one set of redundant categories and one set of redundant abbreviations and explain WHY these are wordy/unnecessary. Incorrect Example: GRE exam (Graduate Record Exam) Correct: GRE

9. Tutorial #2: Writing Style A writer should always keep the same style throughout a piece of writing.

10. Formal vs Informal Formal: Use proper, standard grammar if writing to an unknown audience or for the purpose of something important like a job application. Example: I am applying for the receptionist position advertised in the local paper. I am an excellent candidate for the job because of my significant experience Informal: A writer can choose to use slang or idioms if they are writing to a familiar audience, like friends or for the purpose of something like a journal. Example: I want to talk about the job ad you put in the paper. I’m a great person to work there because I am da bomb!

11. Word Choice/Diction Many words have similar meanings but different feelings attached to them. A writer chooses specific words to convey his exact meaning. Example: I dumped my books on the desk. I placed my books on the desk.

12. Tone Tone = the author’s feelings toward his or her subject Style and word choice reflect the author’s tone Style and tone need to remain consistent within a piece of writing

13. Tutorial #3: Using Conjunctions to Link Clauses **Choose the conjunction that best expresses the meaning between the words you are joining** Illogical: The coach kicked Michael off the team if he skipped practice. Logical: The coach kicked Michael off the team because he skipped practice.

15. Practice Replace the conjunction in each sentence with one that is more logical. 1.Kate wanted an A on the exam, so she didn’t study. 2.If she is asked to prom, and she will buy a dress. 3.Krista stayed up late to finish her homework if she was tired. 4.Natalie had the hiccups, yet she left class to get a drink.