1. Improving Your English Writing Part 5: Essay Re-Start John E. Clayton Nanjung University, Spring, 2004

2. Good Day! Please turn-in journal 1. Please DO NOT turn-in your essay revisions.

3. First Essay - Results 5% 26% 19% 48% 4% 2%

4. A Movie of Your First Essay Results

5. What I Did With Your Essays

6. What Does It Mean? No – your writing days are not over…

7. But we must go… Back to the beginning…

8. Syllabus 01 Introduction; Student photos; Overview 02 Information cards; Punctuation; Writing processjournal 1 03 Paragraphs; Essays – structure, outline, thesis, etc.journal 2 04 No Class - National Day Holiday 05 No Class – Education Conference 06 Essays – conclusion 07 Essays – Let’s start againJournal 1 08 Mid-term exam 09 Review exam, Introduce Business letters, Moviejournal 2 10 Business – Personal Statement 11 Business – Personal Statement, Resumejournal 1 12 Business - Resume 13 Business – Cover lettersjournal 2 14 Movie – “Wizard of Oz” – if we are caught up 15 Review for final exam 16 Final exam http://software.nju.edu.cn/~clayton/

9. Things To Avoid in Your Essays Remember, this is academic writing – Do not use – big, strange fonts or clip art. Use Times Roman, or Ariel – 12 point Don’t ask the reader questions. (eg: “Don’t you think so…”) Try to avoid clichés. (eg: “a coin has two sides”, “a sword has two edges”, “in a word”, etc.)

10. “But…This is NOT How We Write in China!” If you come to an American university from another country, you will find that essay writing expectations will probably be different. No matter how you have been taught to write in your own country, you will be expected to write academic essays in an "American" fashion.

11. Thesis – What’s the Big Deal? American academic essays are usually "thesis-driven." This means that you as the writer must explain the main point of your essay at the start. An academic essay is not a mystery novel - your reader does not want to figure out the plot or search for clues, which is why you state your thesis at the start.

12. Writing Differences The thesis-driven essay may be different from non-American writing forms, in which the thesis is often implied, delayed, or delivered at the end of the essay. Consider the thesis statement a concise version of the entire essay, which usually appears in the introductory section of an essay. A thesis provides the reader with a "road map," clearly laying out the route ahead.

13. Writing Differences Note that a thesis is an interpretation of a subject, not the subject itself. For Example: The subject of an essay might be Smoking, but the thesis must then offer a way to understand smoking that others might dispute.

14. Goal of the Thesis The thesis states: - the primary goal of the argument - indicates the reasons to support the argument. Every assertion that you make afterward must be related to the thesis statement. The rest of the essay must clarify or support your thesis.

15. Example 1 Subject: Smoking Argument: Smoking is harmful, and should be banned Primary goal: to ban smoking in public places. Reasons: it’s dangerous, harmful and annoying. Thesis: “Smoking should be banned from public places, because it is dangerous, bad for health, and very annoying to other people.”

16. Example 2 Subject: Television Argument: Some programs are educational, and kids should be encouraged to watch them. Primary goal: to encourage children to watch good programs. Reasons: to develop skills and broaden views. Thesis: “While much on television is useless “fluff”, children should be encouraged to watch good programs, because they help develop listening skills and introduce the child to the world around them.”

17. Example 3 Subject: Reading books Argument: Books should remain a key resource for university students. Primary goal: to encourage students to read more printed books. Reasons: inexpensive, relaxing, always available. Thesis: “Even though we are bombarded with information today, we should continue to invest time reading old-fashioned paper books, because they are inexpensive, they can help us relax, and they won’t shut-down at 11:00pm.”

18. Example 4 Subject: Camping Argument: A university club should be established to focus on outdoor activities, especially camping. Primary goal: encourage the creation of a campus club to promote camping. Reasons: healthy, relaxing, good use of time. Thesis: “Even though some people say the university should be for academics only, the university should establish a club to promote camping, because it is a healthy, relaxing activity that uses time wisely.”

19. Classroom Exercise 1.Get in a group with one or two others. 2.Find an argumentative topic on the handout. 3.Create a thesis statement as you saw in the examples: 1.Subject… 2.Argument… 3.Thesis… 4.Primary goal 5.Reasons

20. Make-Up Class Movie Night What? “The Haunted House”, with Eddie Murphy Where? Pukou, room 3-226 When? Monday night, November 1 st, 6-8:00pm Who? All of Mr. Clayton’s writing class students Problem! 300 students, 120 seats 

21. Homework Assignment Prepare for the mid-term exam (next week!) Select a subject from the “sample thesis topics” list and write a good thesis statement. Write an essay introduction paragraph, using your thesis statement.