1. Presenters:Andrew Tracy Allison Editing for Cohesion & Coherence

2. Andrew Overview Definition Relevance to Technical Editors Correct Usage Common Issues Exercises

3. Andrew Cohesion: Sense of Flow Refers to the connectivity within a text More a feel than what Seen in how one sentence ends and another sentence starts Previous sentences set up next sentences

4. Andrew Coherence: Sense of Whole Refers to how easy a piece of writing is to understand Again more a feel than a what Based on how all sentences within a passage cumulatively begin Rhetoric

5. Andrew Concepts for Technical Editors Goes beyond just GSP Primarily judgement-based Six types of cohesive devices Job materials: linking achievements to job aspects ESL: beyond grammatically correct sentences to a well-written document

6. Create unity within sentences/paragraphs transitional adverbs o however, furthermore old/new pattern Correct Usage Tracy

7. Devote a read-though to cohesion/coherence document as a whole o organization of paragraphs o missing information o first/last sentences of paragraphs within a paragraph o underline the old info > subject spot? o separate the sentences > order? Editing for Old/New Patterns Tracy

8. Your posting for a Training Manager in the Plano office caught my attention. Moreover, Toyota’s award for Employee’s Choice – 50 Best Places to Work (2012) proves that Toyota’s leadership values employee satisfaction and shows me that this is a good company to join. I want to apply for this position and show you how I can be a strong asset to Toyota. When I saw the job description on Monster.com, I realized how closely the skillset you need matches my experience. Expand the Paragraph Tracy Your posting for a Training Manager in the Plano office caught my attention. Moreover, Toyota’s award for Employee’s Choice – 50 Best Places to Work (2012) proves that Toyota’s leadership values employee satisfaction and shows me that this is a good company to join. I want to apply for this position and show you how I can be a strong asset to Toyota. When I saw the job description on Monster.com, I realized how closely the skillset you need matches my experience.

9. Your posting for a Training Manager in the Plano office caught my attention. I want to apply for this position and show you how I can be a strong asset to Toyota. When I saw the job description on Monster.com, I realized how closely the skillset you need matches my experience. Moreover, Toyota’s award for Employee’s Choice – 50 Best Places to Work (2012) proves that Toyota’s leadership values employee satisfaction and shows me that this is a good company to join. Old/New Patterns w/in a Paragraph Tracy

10. Common Mistakes Allison Repeating the same linking words o Ex: using “however” throughout a document Using linking words incorrectly o Ex: Using “firstly” when it isn’t your first point Not using enough linking words Using too many linking words

11. Which Paragraph is More Cohesive? Allison A. Some people think it is good to put pictures in a resume. However, the picture has to be professional. If it is unprofessional, it could ruin an applicant’s chances. B. Some people think it is good to put pictures in a resume. The picture has to be professional. If could ruin an applicant’s chances.

12. Allison Which Paragraph is More Cohesive? A. Resumes should be written well. On the contrary, grammatical mistakes are a bad sign. B. Resumes should be written well. For instance, grammatical mistakes are a bad sign.

13. Allison Which Paragraph is More Cohesive? A. A resume should highlight your strengths. Indeed, show how you will be an asset to the company. Indeed, if you can effectively sell yourself on the resume, you have a better chance of being offered an interview. B. A resume should highlight your strengths. Show how you will be an asset to the company. Indeed, if you can effectively sell yourself on the resume, you have a better chance of being offered an interview.

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