2.  Suzie believed but could not confirm that Billy had feelings of affection for her.  Suzie assumed that Billy adored her.  Working as a pupil under someone who develops photos was an experience that really helped me learn a lot.  Working as a photo technician's apprentice was an educational experience.

3.  Ludwig's castles are an astounding marriage of beauty and madness. By his death, he had commissioned three castles.  Ludwig's three castles are an astounding marriage of beauty and madness.  The supposed crash of a UFO in Roswell, New Mexico aroused interest in extraterrestrial life. This crash is rumored to have occurred in 1947.  The supposed 1947 crash of a UFO in Roswell, New Mexico aroused interest in extraterrestrial life.

4.  The employee with ambition…  The ambitious employee  We read the letter we received yesterday and reviewed it thoroughly  We thoroughly read the letter we received yesterday.

5.  The report, which was released recently…  The recently released report…  The system that is most efficient and accurate…  The most accurate and efficient system…

6.  Imagine a mental picture of someone engaged in the intellectual activity of trying to learn what the rules are for how to play the game of chess.  Imagine someone trying to learn the rules of chess.  I received your inquiry that you wrote about tennis rackets yesterday, and read it thoroughly. Yes, we do have...  I received your inquiry about tennis rackets yesterday. Yes, we do have...

7.  Any particular type of dessert is fine with me.  Any dessert is fine with me.  Balancing the budget by Friday is an impossibility without some kind of extra help.  Balancing the budget by Friday is impossible without extra help.

8.  Cut out words like kind of, sort of, basically, for all intents and purposes, basically, specifically, etc.  Cut out repetitive wording!  The supply manager considered the correcting typewriter an unneeded luxury.  The supply manager considered the correcting typewriter a luxury.

9.  Past memories  Free gift  True facts  Future plans And redundant categories:  Large in size  Heavy in weight  Honest in character  Extreme in degree

10.  It is the governor who signs or vetoes bills.  The governor signs or vetoes bills.  There was a big explosion, which shook the windows, and people ran into the street.  A big explosion shook the windows, and people ran into the street. Source: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/572/1/