1. Embedding Quotations

2. Things to know about using quotations… A quotation cannot be a stand alone sentence when used in an essay. You should build the quotation into your own writing A quotation does not argue for you. You need to explain why it’s there. Short, well explained quotes are much better than long ones.

3. QUESTION Does Romeo believe his life is being guided by fate or that he has control of his own destiny?

4. Quotation: “I fear, too early; for my mind misgives Some consequence, yet hanging in the starts, Shall bitterly begin his fearful date With this night’s revels, and expire the term Of a despised life closed in my breast by some vile forfeit of untimely death.” (Shakespeare I, iv, 106-111).

5. Not Embedded and Crappy Romeo believes he is controlled by fate. “I fear, too early; for my mind misgives/Some consequence, yet hanging in the stars,/Shall bitterly begin his fearful date/With this night’s revels, and expire the term/Of a despised life closed in my breast/By some vile forfeit of untimely death.” (Shakespeare I, iv, 106-111) This quotation proves Romeo believes in fate.

6. What’s wrong with this answer?

7. Not Embedded and Crappy Romeo believes he is controlled by fate. “I fear, too early; for my mind misgives/Some consequence, yet hanging in the stars,/Shall bitterly begin his fearful date/With this night’s revels, and expire the term/Of a despised life closed in my breast/By some vile forfeit of untimely death” (Shakespeare I, iv, 106-111). This quotation proves Romeo believes in fate. 1. This quote is too long and not embedded 2. This is called ‘scaffolding language’

8. Let’s fix it.

9. STEP 1: Embed the Quote Romeo believes he is controlled by fate. Romeo says, “I fear, too early; for my mind misgives/Some consequence, yet hanging in the stars,/Shall bitterly begin his fearful date/With this night’s revels, and expire the term/Of a despised life closed in my breast/By some vile forfeit of untimely death.” (Shakespeare I, iv, 106-111) This quotation proves Romeo believes in fate. -Quotes embedded but still too long and no context provided.

10. STEP 2: Provide Context Romeo believes he is controlled by fate. Before he enters the Caplet’s party, Romeo says, “I fear, too early; for my mind misgives/Some consequence, yet hanging in the stars,/Shall bitterly begin his fearful date/With this night’s revels, and expire the term/Of a despised life closed in my breast/By some vile forfeit of untimely death.” (Shakespeare I, iv, 106-111) This quotation proves Romeo believes in fate. -Quote now has context but is still too long.

11. STEP 3: Shorten Quote and Remove Scaffolding Romeo believes he is controlled by fate. Before he enters the Caplet’s party, Romeo says that he senses, "Some consequence, yet hanging in the stars,/Shall bitterly begin his fearful date/With this night’s revels” (Shakespeare I, iv, 107-109). He believes that the stars control his fate, not his own actions. -The quote is shortened and embedded. In addition, the scaffolding is removed.