1. Using a Wiki to Scaffold Primary-School Students’ Collaborative Writing JOURNAL CRITIQUE Analyzed By: Norzie Khamis [MP101430] Fatimah Hishamuddin [MP091133] Fatimah Hishamuddin [MP091133] Nurul Shafiza [MP101337] Nurul Shafiza [MP101337] Evaluated by: Prof. Dr. Baharuddin bin Aris

2. THE JOURNAL: Written by: Woo, M., Chu, S., Ho, A., & Li, X. (2011). Woo, M., Chu, S., Ho, A., & Li, X. (2011). Taken from: Educational Technology & Society, 14 (1), 43–54.

3. TITLE COMMENT : SHOULD : Short (9 words ) Unclear - Who? - What? 9 words Too general - could mislead Reflect its content Short (< 15 words) Specific yet catchy

4. suggestion Perhaps, a better title would be: The Use of Wiki in Scaffolding English Collaborative Writing Amongst Collaborative Writing Amongst Primary-School L2 Learners

5. abstract BackgroundPurposeResultsConclusion Method? 146 words background Aim/purpose Methods results conclusion 1 paragraph, <300 words

6. suggestion The method could have been written such as: Data were collected qualitatively and quantitatively from a classroom of 38 primary-five students and an English teacher via questionnaire, a semi-structured interview with the teacher, focus-group discussion with selected students and also from students ’ editing information that were recorded in the wiki system. (43 words)

7. INTRODUCTION Problem StatementAims

8. Term Definition Objectives

9. Relevant previous study Terms definition

10. Relevant previous study Research Questions

11. Relevant previous study Underlying Theories

12. COMMENT: Term Definition Relevant previous study Clear Well Supported Linked with previous study Limitation of the study? Learning outcomes? Adequately organised

13. Comments This research clearly stated how the data is collected – qualitative and quantitative The participants were chosen by purposeful sampling. Researchers also stated the reason of choosing those participants. METHODOLOGY

14. Comments In this research, the procedure to collect the data is through intervention program. Researchers clearly stated how the intervention program was held.

15. Research instruments Comments This research used multiple source of evidence. All the research instruments are well organized and useful in collecting and analysing the data.

16. Comments The data were analysed very well and sorted it through types of revision. Then it were categorized using an adapted version of Mak and Coniam’ s (2008). The researcher had analysing the data thoroughly. Data analysis

17. FINDINGS OF THE STUDY CONNECTION WITH PREVIOUS STUDY STUDENTS RESPONSE FROM OPEN ENDED QUESTIONS FINDINGS & DISCUSSIONS

18. DIFFERENT AMOUNT OF THE STUDENTS Comment: The table is well presented and following the basic thesis manual: -the caption is positioned on top of the table - in the centre because it is a single line -in the journal, this table is only be presented after it is being mentioned for the first time.

19. -Clearly states the activities on wiki platform -The caption is well placed (centre; bottom of the figure) -Follow the thesis manual

20. -the caption is at the right place and summarize the types of revision very well, it could be better if it is being done in a table with complete rows and column instead of hanging table like so

21. STUDENTS RESPONSE FROM WIKI’S TEACHER’S RESPONSE FROM OPEN ENDED QUESTIONS

22. PROBLEMS AMONGST THE STUDENTS

23. FINDINGS OF THE STUDY IMPLICATION OF THE STUDY SUGGESTIONS FOR FUTURE RESEARCH CONCLUSION & IMPLICATIONS

24. CONCLUSION OF THE STUDY

25. 32 REFERENCES

26. COMPILED - HARVARD SYSTEM 7 REFERENCES COMPARATIVELY OLD

27. That’s A WRAP ! The journal is, overall, adequately organised and clearly explained as it is well supported with previous studies.The journal is, overall, adequately organised and clearly explained as it is well supported with previous studies. It follows the basic guideline of a research writing.It follows the basic guideline of a research writing. In the conclusion part, this journal further suggests some recommendation for future studies.In the conclusion part, this journal further suggests some recommendation for future studies. While the study has merit, the power of the studyWhile the study has merit, the power of the study needs to be increased by obtaining a larger sample size. However, this research definitely makes its contribution to its relevant field. needs to be increased by obtaining a larger sample size. However, this research definitely makes its contribution to its relevant field.

28. FROM,ILT LADIES… NORZIENORZIE FATIMAHFATIMAH NURULSHAFIZANURULSHAFIZA