1. Expository Essay Expose: verb—make (something) visible, typically by uncovering it.

2. Question: How do themes emerge in the crucible, and how are they shaped and refined by actions and images? Thesis—Rough Draft: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text. What is missing in the thesis according to the question? Talk to a partner 1 minute.

3. Question: What themes are introduced in The Crucible and how are the themes developed over the course of the text? Thesis—Rough Draft: Thesis Revision: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by. by the actions of the characters. The previous thesis was missing the “how are they shaped and refined by actions.”

4. Write your own rough draft of a thesis. Take out a piece of paper. Title it “Rough Draft Thesis.”

5. Question: How do themes emerge in the crucible, and how are they shaped and refined by actions and images? Use this template to write your own thesis: Thesis: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of ______________________________________is developed throughout the text by ( through plot, character, language, image). (If you don’t like this template, feel free to be creative and write your own! Just make sure you answer the essay prompt.)

6. What are your first steps in starting an essay?

7. What is a thesis? A thesis is an answer to a question. –How did hip-hop change popular culture?

8. Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis. General Statement “Sweet Spot” Too Narrow

9. Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis. THESIS Question: How did hip-hop change popular culture? General Statement: Hip hop changed the culture in many ways. “ Sweet Spot”: Hip hop influenced popular culture through dress, language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with the youth. Too Narrow: Hip hop drastically altered Jessica’s dress and speech, her enormous hoop earrings sparkling in the sun, her apple bottom jeans accentuating body parts while she strutted through Poway, Oceanside, bopping her head, grooving to some internal music by 50 (Fiddy) Cent.

10. Thesis Question: How did hip-hop change popular culture? Too broad: Hip hop changed the culture in many ways. Too Narrow: Hip hop drastically altered Jessica’s dress and speech, her enormous hoop earrings sparkling in the sun, her apple bottom jeans accentuating bulbous body parts while she strutted through Poway, Oceanside, bopping her head, grooving to some internal music by 50 (Fiddy) Cent. Sweet Spot: Hip hop influenced popular culture through dress, language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with the youth.

11. F.A.T.T. Thesis Include “F.A.T.T.” in your thesis. Focus: What is the main idea? Author: Author’s full name Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations” Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?

12. F.A.T.T. Thesis Focus: What is the main idea? Author: Author’s full name Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations” Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem? In the article(Text), “Rap the World”(Title) by Dean Young(Author) (Focus) hip hop influenced popular culture through dress, language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with the youth.

13. Thesis: Expository Essay Write an essay in which you determine a theme of the literary work you’ve been studying, and analyze, in detail, its development over the course of the text. Be sure to explain how the theme emerges and how it is shaped and refined by specific details. Use relevant facts, concrete details, quotations, and/or other information to develop your ideas. How are the themes in The Crucible developed over the text? Identify themes in The Crucible. Track how they are developed over the text.

14. Introductions In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters. What is the subject matter of this thesis? –Example: “The subject matter of this thesis is________________.” Talk to a partner. 1 minute

15. Introductions Interesting Statement of Fact –Start introduction with a compelling fact. –Tone of introduction is factual, objective, and scientific. –Writer is telling reader, “I’m not messing with feelings. It’s all facts, baby.” –Good for writing that is heavily leaning on logic Research papers Expository papers

16. Introductions Take out ANOTHER piece of paper. Write “interesting fact” on this paper.

17. Crucible (noun) a ceramic or metal container in which metals or other substances may be melted or subjected to very high temperatures. a place or occasion of severe test or trial. "the crucible of combat” Could you use this for your “Interesting statement of fact?”

18. Introductions Interesting Statement of Fact Look up an interesting fact about the subject matter of your thesis. My subject: Paranoia weakens bonds On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. When Ebola was discovered in Libya, the citizens were treated like cattle and rounded up in tents. Students come up with one:

19. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis: On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters.

20. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. So what?

21. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. So what?

22. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration camps. So what?

23. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised because of a vast paranoia. So what?

24. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised because of a vast paranoia. This erosion of charity appears throughout American history, even during the early stages when witch-hunts were rampant because of religious paranoia. So What?

25. Introductions Start first sentence with interesting fact On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised because of a vast paranoia. This erosion of charity appears throughout American history, even during the early stages when witch-hunts were rampant because of religious paranoia. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters

26. Finding Quotes to support your thesis Take out a piece of paper. Hamburger-Hotdog a regular piece of paper. Write your thesis in the middle diamond. Choose two quotes to support your thesis on the two halves.

27. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Author: Arthur Miller Title: “The Crucible” Say: HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our hearts break, we cannot flinch; these are new times, sir. There is a misty plot afoot so subtle we should be criminal to cling to old respects and ancient friendships. I have seen too many frightful proofs in court—the Devil is alive in Salem, and we dare not quail to follow wherever the accusing finger points! (68) (Page Number ) Quote #2 Author: Arthur Miller Title: “The Crucible” Say: That was long ago. Today neither of them is alive, Not the hare, nor the man who made the gesture. ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come.. (1) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters.

28. Introduction How do you find quotes to support your thesis?

29. Outline (Do Steve Jobs Assignment) Choose two quotes to support your thesis.

30. Quote #1 Say : HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our hearts break, we cannot flinch; these are new times, sir. There is a misty plot afoot so subtle we should be criminal to cling to old respects and ancient friendships. I have seen too many frightful proofs in court—the Devil is alive in Salem, and we dare not quail to follow wherever the accusing finger points! Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Hale proclaims that the devil is spreading in Salem. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): Ultimately, Hale is justifying the court’s reckless and cruel treatment of Rebecca Nurse, who was a stable figure of goodness and piety, simply by conjuring our most primal fears of the Devil.

31. Quote #2 Say : ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by betraying those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court, and to emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a satanic wind. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of the judges and citizens for her own needs..

32. Hamburger Hotdog Paper Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim Quote #1 Author: Arthur Miller Title: “The Crucible” SAY: HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our hearts break, we cannot flinch; these are new times, sir. There is a misty plot afoot so subtle we should be criminal to cling to old respects and ancient friendships. I have seen too many frightful proofs in court—the Devil is alive in Salem, and we dare not quail to follow wherever the accusing finger points! (68) Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Hale proclaims that the devil is spreading in Salem. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): Ultimately, Hale is justifying the court’s reckless and cruel treatment of Rebecca Nurse, who was a stable figure of goodness and piety, simply by conjuring our most primal fears of the Devil. Quote #2 Author: Arthur Miller Title: “The Crucible” SAY: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a— DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come.. (1) Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by betraying those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court, and to emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a satanic wind. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of the judges and citizens for her own needs.. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters.

33. Introduction Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and scene) Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog paper

34. Introduction Take out your introduction Take out your thesis Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog paper Take out your 13 moves list

35. Introduction Write your thesis and transition into your thesis after your introduction: Example: On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised because of a vast paranoia. (Move #1) This erosion of charity appears throughout American history, even during the early stages when witch-hunts were rampant because of religious paranoia. (Move #2) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters.

36. Introduction Take out the essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem” by Tommy Kim.

37. Introduction Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see what kind of moves Mr. Kim has!

38. Expository Essay Moves Take out the essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem” by Tommy Kim. You will highlight each move I will call on you Read the first three words of the sentence for each move.

39. Expository Essay Moves Underline and number each of these moves: 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9.Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition into last paragraph 13.Restatement of thesis

40. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis.

41. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis

42. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote

43. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1

44. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1

45. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1

46. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph

47. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)

48. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9.Say #2

49. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9.Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition into last paragraph 13.Restatement of thesis

50. Expository Essay Moves 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9.Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition into last paragraph 13.Restatement of thesis

51. Expository Essay Moves: Copy these moves and check them off as you write. 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence) 9.Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition into last paragraph 13.Restatement of thesis

52. Introduction Take out your introduction (scene/statement of fact) Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hamburger paper Take out my essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem” Take out your 13 moves list (we just copied them down)

53. Essay Take out the following and begin your essay: Introduction (interesting statement of fact) Hamburger/Hamburger paper My rubric, paragraph by paragraph 1.Transition INTO thesis. 2.Thesis 3.Introduction to quote 4.Say #1 5.Mean#1 6.Matter#1 7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph 8.Introduction to quote 9.Say #2 10.Mean#2 11.Matter#2 12.Transition into last paragraph 13.Restatement of thesis

54. Move #1 Write a transition from your introduction into your thesis. Sample you can steal: “This example of __________ was evident throughout American plays like The Crucible.

55. Move #1 and 2 Write your thesis after your transition into your thesis. Example: On December 7 th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised because of a vast paranoia. (Move #1) This erosion of charity appears throughout American history, even during the early stages when witch-hunts were rampant because of religious paranoia. (Move #2) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters.

56. MOVE #3, PARAGRAPH #2! Introduce quote “move” Use the following templates: –The theme of ___________ is first encountered when __________________, “(Quote)”. –(Character’s name) first demonstrates the theme of ___________________ when he/she_______________.

57. Quote #2 Say : ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. Mean (What does the quote “mean”?): Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by betraying those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court, and to emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a satanic wind. MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?): In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of the judges and citizens for her own needs..

58. Move #4 - 6 (Move # 4) HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our hearts break, we cannot flinch; these are new times, sir. There is a misty plot afoot so subtle we should be criminal to cling to old respects and ancient friendships. I have seen too many frightful proofs in court—the Devil is alive in Salem, and we dare not quail to follow wherever the accusing finger points! (Move # 5) Hale proclaims that the devil is spreading in Salem. (Move # 6) Ultimately, Hale is justifying the court’s reckless and cruel treatment of Rebecca Nurse, who was a stable figure of goodness and piety, simply by conjuring our most primal fears of the Devil.

59. Move #7 & 8 Transition “move” into paragraph #3 Use the following template: Not only does themes of (theme) occur ____________, it also occurs during_______________________.

60. Paragraph #3: Moves 9-11 Move 9 (Say): ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you— ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come. Move 10 (Mean) Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by betraying those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court, and to emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a satanic wind. Move 11 (Matter) In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of the judges and citizens for her own needs..

61. Paragraph #4: Moves 12-13 Both examples in The Crucible reveal how the themes of(theme) can developed over the text. This them can also occur (Reference the interesting fact from introduction, and connect it to a larger statement about the world)

62. Essay Rubric If you are finished, turn in the following, stapled: 1.Your Essay 2.The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the paper your partner WROTE on)

63. Finish! 1.Turn in your rough draft in the back tray. 2.If you are not done, finish the essay this weekend or come into tutoring Tuesday morning. 15 week is fast approaching.