1. Paper One Learning Objective: Practice- (Unseen Commentary) Gr 12 Prep for CA1 Oct 2010

2. Writing Style Checklist Does each paragraph open with a sentence which shows what the paragraph is about-topic sentence? Does each paragraph open with a sentence which shows what the paragraph is about-topic sentence? Are there clear explicit signposts for each section of the essay- for example: themes, diction, imagery, structure? Are there clear explicit signposts for each section of the essay- for example: themes, diction, imagery, structure? Does each paragraph indicate clear intentions of the author- what effect is the author is attempting to create-tension, melancholy, suspense, nostalgia? Does each paragraph indicate clear intentions of the author- what effect is the author is attempting to create-tension, melancholy, suspense, nostalgia? Are the quotes well embedded within the text to create a fluid overall style. Are the quotes well embedded within the text to create a fluid overall style. Ensure the essay utilises formal language and ambitious choices-sentence construction/ Ensure the essay utilises formal language and ambitious choices-sentence construction/

3. Introduction Mention: The author The author A brief synopsis of the extract/poem (2 sentences) A brief synopsis of the extract/poem (2 sentences) The prevailing themes evident in the work The prevailing themes evident in the work

4. Prose Themes Atmosphere Setting Imagery Diction Contrast/Juxtaposition Characterisation: actions, thoughts/feelings, description, relationships & contrast Punctuation/Sentence Type and Variety Narrative Voice/Omniscient narrator Tone/Register Dialogue Symbolism Pathos Bathos Hyperbole

5. Poetry Themes Atmosphere SettingImageryDiction Contrast/Juxtaposition Persona: actions, thoughts/feelings, description, relationships & contrast Alliteration Narrative Voice Tone/Register Sibilance Caesura Rhyme Scheme Rhythm/ Metre EnjambementRepetition Personification Onomatopoeia

6. Conclusion Sum up. Sum up. Explain how the text has ‘touched’ you the reader. Explain how the text has ‘touched’ you the reader. Has it provoked you in any way-made you think? Has it provoked you in any way-made you think?

7. Sample Conclusion The simplicity of this extract adds to its beauty. The detailed images leave the reader with a sense of the fullness and vitality of Zimbabwe. Tsistsi Dangaremba’s clever changes in tone and poetic writing style show a complete perception of the surroundings and the changes in life through the eyes on the main character, Tambudzi. There is a certain truth in this passage; the themes of change and growing up are honestly and clearly woven into the narrator’s experience, making them all the more potent. The simplicity of this extract adds to its beauty. The detailed images leave the reader with a sense of the fullness and vitality of Zimbabwe. Tsistsi Dangaremba’s clever changes in tone and poetic writing style show a complete perception of the surroundings and the changes in life through the eyes on the main character, Tambudzi. There is a certain truth in this passage; the themes of change and growing up are honestly and clearly woven into the narrator’s experience, making them all the more potent.

8. Commentary Essay Plan Introduction Introduction Themes Themes Imagery Imagery Diction Diction Structure Structure Persona/Characterisation Persona/Characterisation

9. How to Embed Quotes An embedded quote is simply a quote that flows naturally within your own writing and is not just "dropped in". When you read an embedded quote it will almost sound like part of your own sentence. An embedded quote is simply a quote that flows naturally within your own writing and is not just "dropped in". When you read an embedded quote it will almost sound like part of your own sentence. This is an example of an INCORRECT, dropped in quote: Beneatha is a character who believes in freedom of expression. She said this quote: "People have to express themselves one way or another". This is an example of an INCORRECT, dropped in quote: Beneatha is a character who believes in freedom of expression. She said this quote: "People have to express themselves one way or another". This is an example of an embedded quote: Beneatha is a character who believes that, "People need to express themselves one way or another”. Just think of embedding as weaving a quote into your own writing to create a more appealing final product. This is an example of an embedded quote: Beneatha is a character who believes that, "People need to express themselves one way or another”. Just think of embedding as weaving a quote into your own writing to create a more appealing final product.

11. Words to describe sounds Useful words for describing sounds (add more of your own): Useful words for describing sounds (add more of your own): cacophony, cacophonous cacophony, cacophonous discordance, discordant discordance, discordant dissonance, dissonant dissonance, dissonant monotonous monotonous melodious melodious mellifluous mellifluous mellow mellow harmonious harmonious mournful mournful gutteral gutteral jarring jarring raucous raucous jubilant jubilant rousing rousing