1. CSI Is On The Scene! (Composition Style Investigation) Presented by: Kaye Price-Hawkins Priceless Literacy in Abilene, TX www.pricelessliteracy.homestead.com

2. CRIME SCENE Any rough draft or a revising and editing or proofreading selection is the perfect crime scene in a composition class.

3. FORENSICS TEAM  Experts---Writers--know the rules; pay attention to details—mentor texts  Peers---community of writers--help one another—peer models of good writing  Teacher ---demonstrates, models, conferences and collaborates with the students

4. “Concentrate on what cannot lie... the evidence.”...Gil Grissom Physical ---- Capitalization, usage, punctuation, spelling (something you can see or hear) DNA----Details, word choice, syntax, grammar, usage (that which must be processed/examined) –D=delete—What should you delete? (unconnected details/information, empty dialogue) –N=need—What could you add to the paper? (details/information, meaningful dialogue) –A=adjust—What specific adjustments are needed? (usage, paragraph placement, word choice)

5. TOOLS “Self”-Phone (Equipped with a camera – to visualize the scenes) Lab (Handbooks, Dictionary, Guides (mini-folder of strategies), Writing Community) Records on file (professional models, mentor texts, teacher models, peer samples, or completed essays in portfolio)

6. Input from the Boss! Conference might include these steps: 1. Ask open-ended questions. 2. Ask follow-up questions. 3. Listen to the student and then give feedback. 4. Compliment the writer on something they have done well or the attempt they made.

7. COLLECTING EVIDENCE Talkshots (Dialogue) –Conversation should reflect character’s attitude/personality. –Connect dialogue with snapshots - Modified with permission from Barry Lane’s …After the End

8. Collecting Evidence, continued Thoughtshots –Exposes feelings, attitudes, reflections, opinions or reactions to others –Editorial comments -Modified with permission from Barry Lane’s …After the End

9. Collecting Evidence, continued Snapshots (Description) –Includes sensory details (see next slide for Sensory Strip) –reveals more about the characters, relationships, or the plot –Creates mood -Modified with permission from Barry Lane’s …After the End

10. Description depends on careful word choice. Sensory Strip Details create a picture for the reader. - inspired by Kathy McCutcheon/ modified by Kaye Price-Hawkins Available on Kaye’s website… What do you see? What do you hear? What do you smell? What do you taste or say? What sensations or textures do you feel? What are you thinking? What is the “big idea” that is implied? What are you feeling?

11. Revising and Editing Questions Conference questions Peer Group questions Independent Checklist

12. Mini-Folder of Strategies Revision Editing

13. Revision Walk * Check for text evidence: –Active Verbs (Subject performs action) –Striking Verbs (unusual verbs or verbs that create images) –Extraordinary Vocabulary/ Literary Devices –Graphic Description * use mentor texts and student texts

14. Check the Introduction…

15. Possibilities for conclusion BA DUH!BOOM!!!!! Looking back… LessonFuture, Reflection Learned; thoughts; Thoughts Decision Next time; Emotions madePlans, Hopes Memoryand Wishes Connect to the introduction (or beginning).

16. My Website!

17. CASE CLOSED! Ready for publication! – Submit – Read aloud – File (portfolio) Next case…