Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining Why is the second example more effective than the first? The orange is not native to Florida. The orange was first.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining Why is the second example more effective than the first? The orange is not native to Florida. The orange was first brought to America by Spanish colonists. The Spanish colonists brought the orange during the 1500s.They settled in what is now Florida. The orange was first brought to America by Spanish colonists when they settled in what is now Florida during the 1500s. Next i

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining Why is the second example more effective than the first? i The second example presents the ideas more clearly and concisely. Why is the second example more effective than the first? The orange is not native to Florida. The orange was first brought to America by Spanish colonists. The Spanish colonists brought the orange during the 1500s.They settled in what is now Florida. The orange was first brought to America by Spanish colonists when they settled in what is now Florida during the 1500s. CLOSE

Wordiness MENUEXIT When you combine short, related sentences and sentence parts into single sentences, your writing will flow more smoothly clearly show relationships among ideas be more interesting to read Sentence Combining Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness Use the following sentence combining strategies as you revise. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENUEXIT MENU Sentence Combining Combine whole sentences Combine sentence parts Insert words or phrases Use an appositive phrase Combine with who, which, and thatCombine with who, which, and that

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? Mel Fisher found a fortune diving for treasure. His search of sunken ships cost several lives. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? Mel Fisher found a fortune diving for treasure. His search of sunken ships cost several lives. PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Mel Fisher found a fortune diving for treasure. His search of sunken ships cost several lives.. His

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Mel Fisher found a fortune diving for treasure. His search of sunken ships cost several lives. PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Mel Fisher found a fortune diving for treasure. His search of sunken ships cost several lives., but his

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Notice how combining the sentences makes the relationship between the ideas clearer. Next PREVIOUS Mel Fisher found a fortune diving for treasure. His search of sunken ships cost several lives., but his

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? In 1913, the editor of the New York World wanted to spice up his newspaper. He came up with the crossword puzzle. It became an overnight sensation. Who could have predicted its lasting popularity? Click to see the answer PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? In 1913, the editor of the New York World wanted to spice up his newspaper. He came up with the crossword puzzle. It became an overnight sensation. Who could have predicted its lasting popularity? Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT In 1913, the editor of the New York World wanted to spice up his newspaper. He came up with the crossword puzzle. It became an overnight sensation. Who could have predicted its lasting popularity? ORIGINAL REVISED In 1913, the editor of the New York World wanted to spice up his newspaper, so he came up with the crossword puzzle. It became an overnight sensation, but who could have predicted its lasting popularity? Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Combine Whole Sentences Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Use subordinating conjunctions like these to combine two sentences whose ideas are not equally important. The less important sentence then becomes a subordinate clause. when after before until while since because as if so that providedwhether if unless though although Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining How might these two sentences be combined using a subordinating conjunction? The large audience gasped in shock and surprise. The phantom appeared out of the mist. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining This revision combines the two sentences, making the less important idea the subordinate clause. The large audience gasped in shock and surprise. The phantom appeared out of the mist. ORIGINAL REVISED The large audience gasped in shock and surprise when the phantom appeared out of the mist. Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining How would you combine these sentences using subordinating conjunctions? Most people think of music videos as a recent innovation. The concept is not new. It goes back to the 1920s. Oskar Fishchinger made films to illustrate music. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Notice how much more smoothly the revised sentences flow. Also notice that the relationships between ideas are now clearer. Most people think of music videos as a recent innovation. The concept is not new. It goes back to the 1920s. Oskar Fishchinger made films to illustrate music. ORIGINAL REVISED Although most people think of music videos as a recent innovation, the concept is not new. It goes back to the 1920s when Oskar Fishchinger made films to illustrate music. Menu PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. PREVIOUS How can these sentences be combined by creating a compound subject? Chris Ballard, the author of Hoops Nation, searched for the best pickup basketball games. His friends helped him in this quest. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. PREVIOUS Because Ballard and his friends are both participating in the same search, these sentences can easily be combined. Chris Ballard, the author of Hoops Nation, searched for the best pickup basketball games. His friends helped him in this quest. ORIGINAL REVISED Chris Ballard, the author of Hoops Nation, and his friends searched for the best pickup basketball games. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Andrew auditioned for a part in the play. Megan also auditioned for the play. They both got parts in the play. They will be memorizing their lines this weekend. Click to see the answer PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Andrew auditioned for a part in the play. Megan also auditioned for the play. They both got parts in the play. They will be memorizing their lines this weekend. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Combining similar subjects and predicates with coordinating conjunctions gives the paragraph a better flow and makes it more interesting to read. Andrew and Megan auditioned for parts in the play. They both got parts and will be memorizing their lines this weekend. Menu PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS How could these two sentences be combined? The musicians in India used complex musical formulas. The formulas were called ragas. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS How could these two sentences be combined? The musicians in India used complex musical formulas. The formulas were called ragas.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the music into the first sentence. The musicians in India used complex musical formulas. The formulas were called ragas. The formulas were

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the music into the first sentence. The musicians in India used complex musical formulas The formulas were called ragas.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the music into the first sentence. The musicians in India used complex musical formulas The formulascalled ragas.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the music into the first sentence. The musicians in India used complex musical formulas The fo called ragas.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the music into the first sentence. Next The musicians in India used complex musical formulas called ragas.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining In this example, what words could be inserted from one sentence into the other? Bob Vila has written several books about tools, home repair, and historical houses. His books are informative. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining The new sentence is now concise and direct. Bob Vila has written several books about tools, home repair, and historical houses. His books are informative. ORIGINAL REVISED Bob Vila has written several informative books about tools, home repair, and historical houses. Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Continue…

Wordiness Click to see the word that must change form MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. PREVIOUS Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne. The poems are powerful.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Click to see a revision Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne. The poems are powerful.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne. The poems are powerful.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne. The poems are powerful. The poems are powerful.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne. powerfully

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Next Many of William Butler Yeats’s poems are expressive memorials to his love for Maude Gonne. powerfully

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What word in these sentences could change form in order to combine the two sentences? The audience screamed in appreciation of the hilarious comic. They laughed wildly. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Change the past tense verb laughed to present participle laughing, which can be used to describe the audience’s reaction. The audience screamed in appreciation of the hilarious comic. They laughed wildly. ORIGINAL REVISED Laughing wildly, the audience screamed in appreciation of the hilarious comic. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? The thick, black thunder clouds finally loosened their grip on the rain. The clouds were piled up over the mountains. Click to see the phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? The thick, black thunder clouds finally loosened their grip on the rain. The clouds were piled up over the mountains. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. The thick, black thunder clouds finally loosened their grip on the rain. The clouds were piled up over the mountains. ORIGINAL REVISED The thick, black thunder clouds over the mountains finally loosened their grip on the rain. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind. I played it over and over endlessly. Click to see the phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind. I played it over and over endlessly. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind. I played it over and over endlessly.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind. I played it over and over endlessly.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind. endlessly

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Menu Without wanting to, I kept playing the same tune in my mind. endlessly

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. PREVIOUS What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? Steve Fossett, an American financier, is a dedicated competitor in around-the-world ballooning. Click to see the appositive phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. PREVIOUS What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? Steve Fossett, an American financier, is a dedicated competitor in around-the-world ballooning. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II. Eisenhower was an American general and the Supreme Commander of allied forces. When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Click to see the sentence Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Click to see a revision When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II. Eisenhower was an American general and the Supreme Commander of allied forces. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II. Eisenhower was an American general and the Supreme Commander of allied forces. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II. Eisenhower was an American general and the Supreme Commander of allied forces. Use an Appositive Phrase. Eisenhower was an American general and the Supreme Commander of allied forces.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Use an Appositive Phrase Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Use an Appositive Phrase Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Menu Use an Appositive Phrase Dwight Eisenhower planned the invasion of Europe during World War II., an American general and the Supreme Commander of allied forces,

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Mars is our nearest planetary neighbor. Mars is more than 34 million miles from Earth at its closest approach. A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Click to see the answer

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Mars is our nearest planetary neighbor. Mars is more than 34 million miles from Earth at its closest approach. A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Mars is our nearest planetary neighbor. Mars is more than 34 million miles from Earth at its closest approach. ORIGINAL REVISED Mars, which is our nearest planetary neighbor, is more than 34 million miles from Earth at its closest approach. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Margaret Bourke-White was a famous American photojournalist. She documented many of the events of the second quarter of the 20th century. During the 1930s, she took pictures of farmers living in the Dust Bowl. The Dust Bowl was part of the Great Plains. It was suffering from extreme drought and erosion. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Turning these phrases into clauses makes this paragraph less repetitive and more concise. Margaret Bourke-White was a famous American photojournalist who documented many of the events of the second quarter of the 20th century. During the 1930s, she took pictures of farmers living in the Dust Bowl, which was part of the Great Plains that was suffering from extreme drought and erosion. Menu

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