1. 1 Academic Writing II Spring 2013 Meet twice a week Monday, Tuesday Time: Monday 8:00-9:50 (3-106) Wednesday 4:10-6:00 (1- 307) E-mail: austinkc@hotmail.com Phone: 134 3922 0499 Website: http://austincasey.yolasite.com/ Office Hours: (ICB 319) Wednesday 6-8, Thursday 10-12

2. 2 Today: Homework Due: Entrance Exam, Journal 6 (topic of your choice) Read: Brain Drain (talk about structure Homework: Essay 2

3. Schedule Last Day of Class: Wednesday June 19 th (5 more weeks including this week) Week 17 Final Exams Week: Week 19 July 1st-July 5 th

4. Internet Usage Peaks at 11PM EST for US Web Users Arbor Networks recently released a large scale study on internet usage utilizing the data from 110 geographically diverse Internet service providers and tens of millions of subscribers. One of the more fascinating points of this study is when internet usage peaks for US internet users. There was once a point where Internet usage peaked at 8AM in the morning when most US visitors get into work. However this new study showed that Internet usage now peaks at 11PM Eastern time and stays high until 3AM in the morning. This is unique to the United States as Europe was found to peak around 7PM then drop sharply for the rest of the night. Other than a slight dip during dinner hours, US users continue to use the Internet at a high rate during the late hours of the day. Late Night Internet Statistics: Online Videos, Games & Chat 2012

6. This graph displays the traffic cycle of North American internet users. The blue line marks internet usage through the day showing the most usage in the late afternoon, a slight drip during dinner and a significant spike at 11PM in the evening. The yellow segment is cable / dsl traffic which signifies consumer usage and attempts to exclude business traffic. The graph clearly shows that consumers play a huge role in the late night peak. North American Website Usage

7. What are They Doing Online so Late!

8. Online Gaming – Grows 60% after 2PM. Spikes between 8PM-11PM. Team Gaming – The social nature of gaming contributes to the sudden spikes and drops as seen in the World of Worldcraft usage. A team or a “guild” of players will schedule a time to play together thus causing massive spikes and drops in the usage data. Online Video Watching – Peaks at Midnight. Instant Messaging – IM usage is constant throughout the day while reaching 80% of peak at 10AM and maintaining that rate until midnight

9. The study showed that the rise in usage was not necessarily due to higher number of users surfing the web. In fact Arbor’s analysis suggested that web surfing was constant throughout the day. The data revealed that video watching and online gaming contributed greatly to the late night peak. Though instant messaging and video watching is done throughout the day, video watching starts to rise in the evenings while online gaming jumps as soon as work is over. It skyrockets right after dinner time, peaks around 11PM and carries for the next few hours. We do have to consider the three hour difference between the east and west coasts to account for usage from 12PM to 3AM. In Conclusion

10. When do you use the internet the most? Mornings: Before 10AM Work Time: 10AM - 6PM Early Evening: 6PM - 10PM Why am I still up?: After 10PM When do you find yourself using the Internet the most? What do you think is contributing to the late night spike? Do you find these trends surprising or not surprising?

11. Social Gaming Ad Revenue Is Growing By Big Double Digits Every Year The rising of social networking has raised many more sectors alongside with it. One of them is the social gaming sector which already produced few multi-billion companies. A recent report from eMarketer has examined this phenomenon. Social Gaming Ad Revenue Social gaming companies and social networks (mostly Facebook) will earn this year $293 million from ads just from social games, an 80.4% increase from last year! Most of the revenue, about $205 million (which constitutes 70% of the total earnings) comes from the United States alone.

13. eMarketer forecasts that in the next couple of years, this sector’s ad revenue will keep growing in big double digits: In 2012 it will grow by 53.1% to $449 million. In 2013 it will grow by 42.7% to $641 million. Even though that in 2012 and 2013 the ad revenue from the United States will slightly go down to 65% (compared to 70% in 2011, as stated), it still constitute a very big and dominant share from the total ad revenue worldwide. The Total Video Game Industry Ad Revenue It will be a mistake just to look at the social gaming sector alone, without looking at the whole video game industry all together. This industry’s ad revenue, which contains also gaming websites and advergames, will earn $950 million in 2011 at the US alone:

15. Vocabulary: Chapter 9 p.79, 85 administrative (administration, administrative, administratively) cycle (cycle, cyclic, cyclically) eliminate (eliminated) enhance (enhancement) exclusion (exclusive, exclusively) facilitate (facilitator, facility) maximize (maximum, maximum, maximally) restrict (restriction, restricted, restrictively)

16. Chapter 9 – Quiz next Monday Learn the meaning of all the words Learn how to conjugate the words on p.85 (those will be used for quiz)

17. 17 1. The government needs to control the food industry more, such as requiring proper labeling and enforcing mislabeling 2. Refugees who face troubles in their country should be given citizenship because it is a kind of human rights 3. Our country should provide rice / financial aid to poor countries 4. Corruption: bribes, high-level government officials cannot play stock market 5. International companies need to be controlled more 6. High Housing Prices: government control, enforcing laws, etc 7. Inflation: high prices of foods etc 8. Companies such as Coca-Cola should not market to children, it is a bad influence 9. Gender Gap / Imbalance: more boys than girls 10. Education: various Discuss Topics

18. 18 11. Environmental Protection, water issues, air pollution 12. Serious Malignant Accidents: drunk driving, university murder/suicide 13. Imbalanced Development: cities vs villages 14. Social Welfare / Healthcare System: some farmers or peasants have no salary, insurance, or pension. Hospital care is expensive 15. Religion: various issues, role of religion in everyday life 16. Undeveloped Regulations and Laws: some laws are not clear, some people are outside the law 17. Brain Drain 18. Cosmetic Surgery 19. Sex Education 20. Volunteer Groups Corruption: Haiti Crisis, Red Cross Discuss Topics

19. 19 21. Gap between rich and poor 22. Migrant Workers 农民工子弟教育问题 23. High school education: liberal arts major vs. science major 24. Copyrights: Samsung vs Apple, Geely vs Toyota 25. Gap Year: Accept or not 26. Media should report details of crimes 27. School bullying 28. Taxes: Farmers subsidy 29. Education: University should be free 30. Interracial Adoption 31. Human Cloning Discuss Topics

20. 20 32. Nursing Homes (send elder family members to home care) 33. Cremation/Burial, graveyards are filling up, space issues 34. Death Penalty, kill the killer? 35. Animal Rights, circus, rare meats 36. Hunting and Guns 37. Legal drugs for sports enhancement, recreation, Legalize Marijuana 38. GMO food 39. Space technology, technology of ITER (20,000,000,000 Euro) 40. One child policy 41. Boarder Arguments 42. Vegan / Vegetarian 43. Euthanasia Discuss Topics

21. Essay: Brain Drain – New Words Issue: many talented or rich individuals are relocating abroad and taking their expertise with them. There are PROS and CONS

22. 22 Activity: Brain Drain List 5 good points and 5 bad points (PROS & CONS) 1. 2. 3. 4. 5.

23. Essay 2: Argument Read the essay called Brain Drain and complete the peer review Is it a controversial topic? Who disagrees with her? Do the majority agree or disagree? Do you agree or disagree? How about the structure? Did you find the thesis and topic sentences clearly? Supporting evidence is enough? Is the essay persuasive enough? Can it change the mind of some readers?

24. Essay: Brain Drain– Problems Introduction is too long / unnecessary explanations/ Needs more interesting details, personal opinions No topic sentences No hook/hook is boring, typical entry (textbook style) Structure problems: thesis is not in the correct place Should add more personal examples about real people Has too much common knowledge Most people agree / not controversial Did not mention groups who disagree directly Combine last 2 paragraphs

25. Essay: Grow Up – PROS High level vocabulary and grammar, however we expect more quality from this kind of writer

26. 26 Chinasmack.com – translated Chinese blogs into English Boingboing.com – Western media trending website Reddit.com – Western media trending website Shanghai Daily p.2-3 – Chinese current events in English 21 st Century – Chinese current events in English English Weibo – Chinese current events in English Useful English Websites for Current Events / Social Issues

27. 27 Activity: choose a controversial topic List 3 good points and 3 bad points (PROS & CONS 1. 2. 3. Supporting evidence 1. 2. 3.

28. 28 Essay 2: Structure Introduction Topic 1, your point, counterpoint, refute (response) Topic 2, your point, counterpoint, refute (response) Topic 3, your point, counterpoint, refute (response) Conclusion

29. Essay 2: Argumentative Essay Rules for Essay 2: 1.Research Essay (3 Academic References) 2.Argument, counter argument + refute 3.Who disagrees with you 4.One quote (1-3) Academic 5.Cannot use first or second person (I, you, etc)

30. 30 Meaningful Argument = Social Issue 1. Family: Growing Up, Love, Friends, Family, Child Raising, Entertainment of Youngsters, Population Control, Cloning/Genetics, Nursing Homes 2. Education/Jobs: Chinese vs. Western Education, Educating poor people, Educational facilities, Part time jobs 3. Health & Safety: Security & Police, Crime/Prisons, Censorship, Robot Spies, Medical Care, Drugs 4. Sharing: Resources & Energy & Land (food, water, oil, international aid, land/animals, etc)

31. Thesis = topic + opinion + reason (brief reason) Must attach rough draft to get full score (no rough -20%) Essay 2: Argument

32. Rhetorical question = a question that has no expected answer. Ex: don't you think? Isn’t It? Don't overuse It can be used as a hook or to catch the reader's attention Its not academic, and may seem childish if used incorrectly Essay 2: Argument

33. 33 “ Quotes ” A few quotes are good (1-3 per essay) Must have at least one academic quote Don’t forget the in text citation, or you will have plagiarism! Put the in text citation right after the quotes: According to Kant on filial piety, he stated that “family ties are important” (Kant p.66). I agree that having a strong connection in your family is important because...

34. 34 In text citation + works cited page Lucky Smith writes in The Hunting Diaries that “I think people should have the right to own a gun and go hunting, because it is an age old custom which can make us feel more natural. We also get the benefits from cleaner meat and good exercise in the forest; hunting is a way of life” (Smith p78). last name and page number Works Cited Page: Smith, Lucky. The Hunting Diaries. Berkeley, California: Berkeley Books, 2010.

35. 35 When do you cite sources in your essay? When you’re talking about an idea you got from something you read. paraphrase When you quote from something you read or heard. Direct quote When you want to give the reader some places to look for more information.

36. 36 Essay 2: Argumentative Essay Essay 1: Profile Essay 2: Argumentative / Persuasive Essay use quotes and paraphrasing from other authors

37. 37 Essay 2: Argumentative I want this essay to be your opinion, but I also want you to support your opinion with other author's opinions At least 3 references. At least 1 quote You may also use 1 paraphrase

38. 38 Meaningful Argument = Social Issue 1. Family: Growing Up, Love, Friends, Family, Child Raising, Entertainment of Youngsters, Population Control, Cloning/Genetics, Nursing Homes 2. Education/Jobs: Chinese vs. Western Education, Educating poor people, Educational facilities, Part time jobs 3. Health & Safety: Security & Police, Crime/Prisons, Censorship, Robot Spies, Medical Care, Drugs 4. Sharing: Resources & Energy & Land (food, water, oil, international aid, land/animals, etc)

39. 39 Essay 2: Example Title: Video Games are The Devil Thesis: I don't think students need to use video games because they waste time, keep you from playing outside, and they will make your eyes bad. T1 The first thing about video games that disturbs me is that they can take away precious time from students T2 Secondly, I think students will not be encouraged to play outside if they have the latest games waiting for them at home'. T3 Last but not least, using games a lot will make your eyes bad Conclusion

40. 40 More Help You can choose something that most people will disagree with, that can be more fun and interesting for argumentative essays Choose your own topic, a topic not listed is better – it will be fresh and new Write your real opinion, it is easier to have supporting evidence this way You don't have to agree with me, or your friends, or anyone – I want to see original topics.

41. 41 Activity: supporting evidence I support teenagers working. List 3 good points and 3 bad points 1. 2. 3. I support that people have the right to own guns. List 3 good points and 3 bad points. 1. 2. 3.

42. 2. bring home the bread / bread winner = main support(er) of the family Ex: My father has always been bringing home the bread, but when he is on a business trip, it is my mother who takes the role of bread winner. 3. wears the pants (used for moms who are bread winners) Ex: My mom wears the pants in our family Useful collocations

43. 4. to cash in on sth = to take advantage Ex: Once Mary got the position as manager at the company I applied to, it was time to cash in on the situation / friendship. Ex: The clever lad cashed in on tourists by selling hot chocolate and tea at the top of the mountain on a cold spring day. He was able to sell the beverages / refreshments for 70% more than market value! Useful collocations

44. 44 Review: Idioms 4: on Money 1. bread and butter = reliable income 2. bread winner = the supporter of the family 3. bring home the bacon = bring home money for family 4. at all costs = no matter what 5. born with a silver spoon in one's mouth = rich/spoiled kids 6. face value = the obvious value, surface (superficial) value 7. to cash in on sth = draw out money, take advantage of sth 8. hit the jackpot = to get rich, lucky 9. strike it rich = to get rich 10. to be in the red = to be in debt

45. Activity – make a sentence with the following idioms To have filial piety cash in on sth to bring home the bread wears the pants

46. 46 -I am going to show... X -I am going to talk about... X -In this essay... X -In this paper let's consider...X Thesis: Avoid Announcements

47. Movie and Book names Don't use : > or “Title” These are not necessary, as English has spaces and capital letters ….. in the movie Shashank Redemption there is... …. in the book Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets ….

48. Brands Never use all CAPS in writing, it is not academic Brands are always: Nike, Coca-cola, etc Only some brands are special like iPhone (if the brand uses all caps, then you can use it, check internet to find official spelling of brand)

49. How Far Can We Go: Argumentative Essay … ellipses (not a complete thought) Rules: 1.Research Essay (3 Academic References) 2.Counter argument + refute 3.Who disagrees with you 4.One quote (1-3) 5.Cannot use first or second person (I, you, etc)

50. Argumentative Style An argument where nearly 50% of the general population agree, while 50% disagree. Like Task 2 w

51. 51 Activity: Small Arguments (150+ words) 1. Make your own argument about something that doesn’t really matter. It is not a serious social problem. 2. Be creative 3. Choose a small topic 4. It can just be a simple opinion 5. Describe your point and counterpoint 6. Who agrees and who disagrees (two groups)

52. Example: Bananas are the most convenient food because they have their own wrapper and you can carry them around and trade them. Other's Opinion: Many people think eggs are more convenient, but they can easily spoil or break and make a mess. Counterargument / refute

53. Example: with small arguments Opinion I like cats. Rice is better than noodles. TVs are bad. Blue is the best color. Argument Cats are a useful pet because they can catch mice. Rice is better than noodles because it is healthier. TV programs are bad for children because they show a lot of violence. Blue is the best color because it can make you feel calm.

54. 54 Social Issue Rule You must choose a topic that at least 50% of people disagree about. Ex: I think eating well is healthy for your life. NO Ex: I think pollution is wrong because... NO Ex: Why the pencil is better than the pen. NO, small problem Ex: How to install windows 7 NO, too small Ex: Once I saw a dog eating a pie. NO, horribly written, not a thesis

55. 55 Don't be afraid if 50% or more disagree. It may be more interesting 50% or more disagree: Ex: Unfortunately, war is important to develop better technology. YES Ex: Unlike my classmates, I think we should study more and sleep less to become more competitive YES Ex: I may be different, but I think smoking is an important way to relax yourself because... YES

56. 56 Social Issue Rule Your topic must be a social issue that can relate to others. Ex: I had a difficult exam last week. NO Ex: I always struggle with English essays. NO Ex: Many people will struggle with exams if they were not properly educated because... YES Ex: Tests should not be given in our university because... YES

57. 57 Must be a big argument Ex: Bananas are the most convenient food because they have their own wrapper and you can carry them around and trade them. NO Ex: Reading magazines is better than reading novels because you can get more information from the pictures. NO Ex: Children should be limited in the time they spend watching TV everyday for their mental and physical development. YES

58. 58 Try to make it an important issue Bottled water is better than tap water Pet fish are better than pet dogs Taking too much medicine is bad for you Eating too much junk food is bad for you ALL NO

59. 59 Remember At least 50% of people should disagree with you Pollution is bad = No, nearly everyone agrees Government needs to control companies more to prevent pollution even if it hurts the economy = Yes, about 50% will disagree

60. 60 Don't be afraid if 60% or more disagree. It may be more interesting 60% or more disagree: Ex: Unfortunately,... Ex: Unlike many of my classmates, I think we should... Ex: I may be different, but...

61. Writing Task 1: Flow Chart production, manufacturing process As featured in the flow chart, there are ______ steps that ________. Notice the general trends For the conclusion, just paraphrase your introduction. Illustration = diagram, illustrated figure, set of pictures, layout, drawing, representation of _______

62. T2: Synonyms 1. talent = ability, skill, to have a knack for sth 2. to be born with talent = inborn talent = innate talent = raw talent/ability = god-given ability = to be endowed with gifts 3. a genius = a savant = an idiot savant = born a genius = a naturally born genius = gifted kids = hand picked by god 4. fostered talent = book smart, learned abilities, acquired knowledge 5. the age old question of nature vs. nurture = book smart vs. street smart 6. “hard work beats talent” Quote: “hard work beats talent when talent refuses to work hard” 7. on the other hand = to the opposite end 8. clever = street smart, to have moxy, to be cunning (like a fox), to be savvy, to have the right stuff, to be mentally deft

63. The university's bread and butter is student loans Crushing debt Interest rates Filial piety

64. Activity: Choose one, write topic, thesis, supporting evidence What is the most important quality of a good friend? What do you think can make friends break up? Why do modern people have fewer friends these days? What do you think of the educational system in your country? How can teachers encourage creativity in students? Who is the most successful person you know? Do you think an adventurous spirit is born or nurtured? What kind of people are more likely to succeed? Who do you admire the most?

65. Example 1. What is the most important quality of a good friend? Topic: Important quality of friends Thesis: Friendship can teach us the benefits of teamwork, as well as how to get along with others and be successful, therefore trust is an essential quality in a good friend.

68. 68 Essay: Useful Idioms 4: on Money 1. bread and butter = ? 2. bread winner = ? 3. bring home the bacon = ? 4. at all costs = ? 5. born with a silver spoon in one's mouth = ? 6. face value = ? 7. to cash in on sth = ? 8. hit the jackpot = ? 9. strike it rich = ? 10. to be in the red = ?

69. 69 Essay: Useful Idioms 4: on Money 1. bread and butter = reliable income 2. bread winner = the supporter of the family 3. bring home the bacon = bring home money for family 4. at all costs = no matter what 5. born with a silver spoon in one's mouth = rich/spoiled kids 6. face value = the obvious value, surface value 7. to cash in on sth = draw out money, take advantage of sth 8. hit the jackpot = to get rich, lucky 9. strike it rich = to get rich 10. to be in the red = to be in debt

70. Activity – make a sentence with the following idioms Born with a silver spoon in one's mouth face value hit the jackpot to be in the red

71. Common Idioms 3 Apple of my eye Carry a torch for someone Kick the bucket / have a bucket list Diamond in the rough My knight in shining armor Have your cake and eat it too All the world's a stage Be like clay

72. Common Idioms 3 Apple of my eye = your treasure Carry a torch for sb = carry a secret love for sb Kick the bucket = to die Diamond in the rough = sth good in the bad My knight in shining armor = your hero Have your cake and eat it too = best of both worlds All the world's a stage = everyone plays their part in this world To be like clay = moldable, easy to control (person) *neutral word *

73. Activity – make a sentence with the following word sets Jane, clay Bill, diamond in the rough Bill, kick the bucket Jane, have her cake and eat it too

74. Essay Types: You will write 2 essays and weekly journals 1. Remembering an Event (550-650 words) Something that happened to you. An interesting event that you remember clearly. 2. Writing a Profile (550-650 words) You will describe something or someone. 3. Proposing a Solution (550-650 words) You will discuss a problem and explain how to fix it 6. Journal Entries These will be given by the instructor. They will cover various topics. Very similar to IELTS Task 2 questions 7. Vocabulary Quiz A weekly quiz on the target words

75. 75 Course Schedule: Lesson ALesson B Week 4Essay 1: Choose your topicT2 Week 5Essay 1 Rough Draft Due (550+ words) Week 6Essay 1 Final Draft WEDNESDAY(550+ words) Week 7T1 T2 J3 Week 8Quiz J4 Week 9Midterm

76. Journal 1 Different Shops Write an essay comparing and contrasting the experience of shopping at two different kinds of stores. Use specific reasons and examples to illustrate the stores' similarities and differences. Use 4 vocabulary words from Chapter 6

77. Journal 2 Choose an IELTS Task 2 question and answer it. Remember choose a trend or a problem. Then use the format “what are your opinions on this” Use 4 vocabulary words from Chapter 6

78. Journal 3: Bucket List A bucket list is a list of things you want to do in your life before you die. Although this is a creative writing assignment, you must still follow the correct structure as usual. 250+ words, follow normal structure: Introduction, Body, Conclusion. Make a thesis

79. Journal 4: IELTS T2 Choose a science or technology based IELTS Task 2 question and answer it. Remember choose a trend or a problem. Then use the format “what are your opinions on this” Write the question clearly and paraphrase it for the introduction. 250+ words, use 4 vocabulary words from Chapter 7

80. Journal 4: Tech TOPICS: people's reliance on machines, government spending money for space exploration and development of new energy tech like ITER or CERN, military tech, functional robots Will modern people forget basic survival and necessary skills like writing and cooking because they use machines too much? How do you think people in the future will use robots? Why do people long for tech?

81. 81 Journal 5: Small Arguments (250+ words) 1. Make your own argument about something that doesn’t really matter. It is not a serious social problem. 2. Be creative 3. Choose a small topic, narrow it down 4. It can just be a simple opinion 5. Describe your point and counterpoint (like a mini Essay 2) 5. Due Week 12 (Monday)

82. Homework Vocabulary Quiz, Chap 9 words