1. 1 On Writing Well Kathryn McKinley The University of Texas at Austin based on Style: Toward Clarity and Grace by Joseph Williams slides by William Cook & Richard Gabriel

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3. 3 Focus Abstract & Introduction Mechanics Sentences Linking Sentences Emphasis

4. 4 Abstract & introduction Contribution Result “This paper introduces a new pointer alias analysis that provides control-flow and context sensitivity. We show that it is one hundred times faster than the prior state of the art.”

5. 5 Abstract & introduction Problem statement Contribution Result Meaning

6. 6 Is this abstract better? Why? “Precise flow and context sensitive pointer analysis is currently limited to programs with 100,000 or fewer lines of code. Pointer analysis clients, such as verification and testing, are consequently limited to small programs because they need high precision. This paper introduces a new pointer alias analysis that provides control-flow and context sensitivity. We show that it is one hundred times faster than prior algorithms and can analyze programs up to 1 million lines of code. Future work should investigate its effects on the precision and scalability of client analysis.”

7. 7 Is this abstract better? Why? “Precise flow and context sensitive pointer analysis is currently limited to programs with 100,000 or fewer lines of code. Pointer analysis clients, such as verification and testing, are consequently limited to small programs because they need high precision. This paper introduces a new pointer alias analysis that provides control-flow and context sensitivity. We show that it is one hundred times faster than prior algorithms and can analyze programs up to 1 million lines of code. Future work should investigate its effects on the precision and scalability of client analysis.” More Precise

8. 8 What could be improved? “Precise flow and context sensitive pointer analysis is currently limited to programs with 100,000 or fewer lines of code. Pointer analysis clients, such as verification and testing, are consequently limited to small programs because they need high precision. This paper introduces a new pointer alias analysis that provides control-flow and context sensitivity. We show that it is one hundred times faster than prior algorithms and can analyze programs up to 1 million lines of code. Future work should investigate its effects on the precision and scalability of client analysis.”

9. 9 Focus Abstract & Introduction Mechanics Sentences Linking Sentences Emphasis

10. 10 Subjects of sentences name cast of characters Verbs name actions involving characters

11. 11 Missing Subjects “Termination occurred after 23 iterations”

12. 12 Missing Subjects “Termination occurred after 23 iterations” “The analysis terminated after 23 iterations”

13. 13 Weak Verbs “The algorithm supports effective garbage collection in distributed systems”

14. 14 Weak Verbs “The algorithm supports effective garbage collection in distributed systems” Stronger Verbs “ The algorithm collects garbage effectively in distributed systems”

15. 15 Verb Nominalization VerbNominalization discoverdiscovery movemovement collaboratecollaboration

16. 16 Adjective Nominalization AdjectiveNominalization difficultdifficulty applicableapplicability differentdifference

17. 17 empty verb + NOM “We conducted an investigation of the tradeoffs.”

18. 18 empty verb + NOM “We conducted an investigation of the tradeoffs.” Verb=Action “We investigated the precision and efficiency tradeoffs.”

19. 19 “there is” + NOM “There is a need for further study of this analysis”

20. 20 “there is” + NOM “There is a need for further study of this analysis” Name the actor “Researchers should study this analysis further in the context of its clients.”

21. 21 NOM + verb + NOM “The formation of cycles during alias analysis prevents further improvements to this algorithm.”

22. 22 “Because the alias analysis creates cycles, we cannot improve it further.” Omit needless nominalization

23. 23 Useful Nominalizations

24. 24 Name an action “I do not understand her meaning or his intention” (what she means what he intends)‏

25. 25 Common concepts “Taxation without representation was not the central cause of the revolution”

26. 26 compilation dependency inheritance implementation

27. Noun+Noun+.. Early childhood thought disorder misdiagnosis often occurs in state-funded labs.

28. Noun+Noun+.. Early childhood thought disorder misdiagnosis often occurs in state-funded labs. State-funded labs often misdiagnosis disordered thought in young children.

29. 29 Passive “The alias analysis was added to gcc.”

30. 30 Passive “The alias analysis was added to gcc.” Active voice “We implemented this analysis in the gcc compiler.”

31. Concision It is imperative to think over in a punctilious manner each and every suggestion that is offered to us.

32. Concision It is imperative to think over in a punctilious manner each and every suggestion that is offered to us. We must consider each suggestion carefully.

33. 33 Focus Abstract & Introduction Mechanics Sentences Linking Sentences Emphasis

34. 34 Linking Sentences subject ideas already mentioned familiar ideas verb action object new ideas

35. 35 Linking Sentences “Precise flow and context sensitive pointer analysis is currently limited to programs with 100,000 or fewer lines of code. Pointer analysis clients, such as verification and testing, are consequently limited to small programs because they need high precision. This paper introduces a new pointer alias analysis that provides control-flow and context sensitivity. We show that it is one hundred times faster than prior algorithms and can analyze programs up to 1 million lines of code. Future work should investigate its effects on the precision and scalability of client analysis.”

36. 36 Topics form a logical sequence of ideas oldnew oldnewoldnewoldnew

37. 37 The Point IntroDiscussion The point (best) ‏ …or here (intro para.) ‏

38. 38 Emphasis Put important things at the end sentencefinal words paragraphlast sent. sectionlast para.

39. 39 Paper Section Paragraph Sentence Containers Large-scale Structure Sequence of items Specific rules

40. 40 Section Titles First sentence (or the point) must include section title (except the introduction or conclusion)

41. 41 IntroDiscussion IDIDID IntroDisc paper paragraphssections IntroDisc IDIDID paragraphs IDIDID IDID sentences

42. 42 Thank you for your attention! Questions?

43. 43 Practicum

44. 44 Improving an Abstract Read it Interview the writer: understand the Problem statement Contribution Result Meaning Top down sentence improvements Subject-action-object Link to next sentence