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From the abstract to the concrete SENTENCE LEVELING Adapted from Pat Sherbert’s APSI class
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Leveling means to group the sentences in your paragraph on different levels to show the logical progression of thoughts. WRITING A LEVELED PARAGRAPH
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Abstract – Existing in thought, but having no physical existence Examples: love, justice, freedom Concrete – Existing in a real, physical form Examples: dog, car, chair, turkey ABSTRACT VS. CONCRETE
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Leveling means that the sentences move from abstract ideas to more concrete ideas. WRITING A LEVELED PARAGRAPH
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S. I. HAYAKAWA’S ABSTRACTION LADDER
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TRANSLATING THE ABSTRACTION LADDER TO WRITING Imagine this discussion. “I have a pet at home.” “What kind of pet?” “It’s a dog.” “What kind of dog?” “It’s a Saint Bernard.” “Grown up or a puppy?” “It’s full grown.” “What color is it?” “It’s brown and white.”
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TRANSLATING THE ABSTRACTION LADDER TO WRITING Imagine this discussion. “I have a pet at home.” “What kind of pet?” “It’s a dog.” “What kind of dog?” “It’s a Saint Bernard.” “Grown up or a puppy?” “It’s full grown.” “What color is it?” “It’s brown and white.” More abstract -- pet
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TRANSLATING THE ABSTRACTION LADDER TO WRITING Imagine this discussion. “I have a pet at home.” “What kind of pet?” “It’s a dog.” “What kind of dog?” “It’s a Saint Bernard.” “Grown up or a puppy?” “It’s full grown.” “What color is it?” “It’s brown and white.” More abstract -- pet More concrete – A fully grown, brown and white St. Bernard
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I like motoring better than flying. I like Rambler cars. I like American cars better than English cars. I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. I like travel. ANSWERS
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I like motoring better than flying. I like Rambler cars. I like American cars better than English cars. I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. I like travel. (1) ANSWERS
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I like motoring better than flying. (2) I like Rambler cars. I like American cars better than English cars. I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. I like travel. (1) ANSWERS
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I like motoring better than flying. (2) I like Rambler cars. I like American cars better than English cars. (3) I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. I like travel. (1) ANSWERS
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I like motoring better than flying. (2) I like Rambler cars. (4) I like American cars better than English cars. (3) I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. I like travel. (1) ANSWERS
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I like motoring better than flying. (2) I like Rambler cars. (4) I like American cars better than English cars. (3) I like my Rambler Classic four-door sedan. (5) I like travel. (1) ANSWERS
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PRACTICE TIME WITH EXAMPLE B
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1. Livestock 2. Cows______________ 2. Pigs_______________ 2. Sheep_____________ THE DEAD-LEVEL PARAGRAPH
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Dead-level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. The second kinds of animals are pigs. Finally, we also have sheep. THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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1. Livestock 2. Cows__________________ 3. Dairy______________ 3. Beef_______________ 4. Angus__________ 2. Pigs___________________ 3. Pork_______________ 4. Berkshire_______ THE MULTI-LEVEL PARAGRAPH
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Multi-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. We also have pigs on the farm. These are used for pork. They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig. THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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Dead-Level Paragraph 1. Livestock 2. Cows______________ 2. Pigs_______________ 2. Sheep_____________ Multi-Level Paragraph 1. Livestock 2. Cows__________________ 3. Dairy______________ 3. Beef_______________ 4. Angus__________ 2. Pigs___________________ 3. Pork_______________ 4. Berkshire_______ THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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Dead-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. The second kinds of animals are pigs. Finally, we also have sheep. Multi-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. We also have pigs on the farm. These are used for pork. They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig. THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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Dead-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. (1) The first kinds of animals are cows. (2) The second kinds of animals are pigs. (2) Finally, we also have sheep. (2) Multi-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. The first kinds of animals are cows. We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. We also have pigs on the farm. These are used for pork. They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig. THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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Dead-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. (1) The first kinds of animals are cows. (2) The second kinds of animals are pigs. (2) Finally, we also have sheep. (2) Multi-Level Paragraph We have several types of livestock on my farm. (1) The first kinds of animals are cows. (2) We have dairy cattle, which produce milk, and beef cattle, which are used for meat. (3) In fact, our beef cattle are Angus cows, which are among the most expensive kind. (4) We also have pigs on the farm. (2) These are used for pork. (3) They are the Berkshire species, which are a rare breed of pig. (4) THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THE TWO
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I don’t want this Dead-level paragraph (1, 1, 1, 1) or (1, 2, 2, 2, 2) This is a little better Straight-level paragraph (1, 2, 3, 4, 5) This is the best Multi-level paragraph (1, 2, 3, 2, 3, 4) or (1, 2, 3, 4, 2, 3, 2, 3, 1) or all sorts of variations WHAT KIND OF PARAGRAPH DO I WANT?
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PRACTICE TIME
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I share my house with two cats._____ The elder cat is named Sally._____ She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice._____ The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally._____ She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice._____ The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice._____ The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle._____ She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat._____ Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat. (3) Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift._____ I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat. (3) Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift. (3) I hate it when she does this!_____ PRACTICE TOGETHER
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I share my house with two cats. (1) The elder cat is named Sally. (2) She is a white, brown, and black Calico who likes to chase invisible mice. (3) The other cat is named Yerdle. (2) She is named after Dr. Seuss’s book Yerdle the Turtle because she is a Tortoise shell cat. (3) Although she, too, is getting older, she still takes great pleasure in killing birds and bringing them to me as a gift. (3) I hate it when she does this! (4) PRACTICE TOGETHER
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1. I share my house with two cats. 2. The elder cat is named Sally. 3. She is a white, brown, and black 2. The other cat is named Yerdle. 3. She is named after Dr. Seuss 3. Although she, too… 4. I hate it when she does this! PRACTICE TOGETHER
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