1. Practice of English Composition Prof. Shao Guangqing shaoguangqing@gmail.com 영작문 연습

2. Contents  Unit 2 Descriptive essays Part 3 Developing your ideas  Review and warm-up  Reading: Food from the Sea  Language focus: PPs; adding details; Similes  Writing a first draft (homework) Part 4 Editing your writing  Using adjectives  Formation of adjectives  Order of adjectives  Editing a student paragraph

3. Part 3 Developing your ideas  Review and warm-up  Reading: Food from the Sea  Language focus: PPs; adding details; Similes  Writing a first draft (homework)

4. Review and warm-up  Still remember how to draft an outline for a descriptive essay? Introduction  Hook  Background information  Thesis statement Body paragraph  Topic sentence  Details Conclusion  Final opinion

5. Reading: Food from the Sea  Read the essay. What is the main event the writer describes? The writer describes catching and eating crabs on the beach with his father.

6. Examining the student essay  1. What does the place described in the essay look like? The place is very quiet and there are many crabs walking on the white sand.

7. Examining the student essay  2. How does the writer feel about his experience? T he writer feels it was an unforgettable learning experience.

8. Examining the student essay  3. What sounds, sights, smells, or tastes are described? The writer describes seeing crabs walking on the beach and into the traps, and the sounds of the pelicans and the seagulls. He describes the strong smell of the dark, oily fish. He describes the sweet, salty taste of the boiled crabs.

9. Examining the student essay  4. What is the final opinion that the writer gives in the conclusion? The writers final opinion is that food tastes best when it is something that you have caught or grown.

10. Language focus: prepositional phrases in descriptive writing  The boat slowly sank with the water level until it rested on the bay floor. PPs showing position and location.  We took the boat out to his underwater oyster park./The idea was to float the boat over the fence walls. PPs showing direction.

11. Language focus: prepositional phrases in descriptive writing  at six in the morning/in that sweet moment/ on Sunday PPs showing time.  I stood up in defiance./He pulled back in horror. PPs showing manner or attitude.

12. Language focus: adding details to sentence  What is the problem of the following sentences used for description?  They are too general for description. The crabs were good. The crabs were tender and sweet with a salty taste. He bought some fruit. He bought some sweet, juicy strawberries. She walked to the door. She walked quickly and silently to the door.

13. Practice: adding details to sentence  We put the spinach in the pan.  … in a large, iron frying pan.  Our guests enjoyed the dinner.  … the sophisticated dinner.  I entered the room.  … the large, spacious apartment.  We returned from the store.  We quickly returned from the gourmet grocery store.

14. Language focus: similes 직유  The sun was like a glowing ball of fire. — Shakespeare  I was young an easy … and happy as the grass was green. — Dylan Thomas  My love is like a red, red rose. — Robert Burns  He is as clever as a fox.

15. Practice: similes 1.The house 2.The ocean 3.The cold wind 4.Their friendship 5.The train 6.The air a.smelled sweet like honey. b.is as solid as a rock. c.sparkles like a diamond. d.was as fast as a bullet. e.cut sharply like a knife. f.was as huge as a castle.

16. Part 4 Editing your writing Using adjectives Formation of adjectives Order of adjectives Editing a student paragraph

17. Using adjectives  The beach was quiet and still.  Many crabs were walking slowly on the white sand.  The traps looked like round cages.  There were some small, fragrant fish in the trap.  The fishy smell made the crabs hungry.  I smelled the strong smell of the dark, oily fish.  The meat was white, pinkish and tender.

18. Formation of adjectives  V+ing entertaining; exciting  V+ed excited; broken  Noun modifiers a shoe store  describing feelings -ing -ed

19. Describing feelings  The movie was very (bored/boring).  The audience was very (confused/confusing) by the story.  As a student, I found the class very (interesting/interested).  The speaker was very (exciting/excited) by the topic.  The children were (tired/tiring) by the game.  The new tastes were (stimulating/stimulated) to the chef.

20. Order of adjectives  It was a (metal/new/fantastic) sculpture.  … a fantastic, new metal sculpture.  They walked down the (old/elegant/marble) staircase.  … the elegant, old marble staircase.  The museum had (wooden/entrance/beautiful) doors.  … beautiful, wooden entrance doors.

21. Order of adjectives  There were (blue/huge/bright) lights to mark the entrance.  … huge, bright blue lights...  The food was served in (simple/tiny) portions on (small/dinner/modern) plates.  … in simple, tiny portions … on small modern dinner plates.  The women wore (velvet/new/stunning) dresses.  … stunning, new velvet dresses.

22. Order of adjectives generalspecific

23. Editing a paragraph  1. take the long drive to my …  2. a large, white wooden house  3. a big, old red door  4. a spacious kitchen  5. The beautiful old table  6. a white lace tablecloth  7. huge round platters of food