2. Teacher: Li Dongying ( 李冬英 ) Class: Class Three, Grade Nine Date: May 26, 2009 Writing

3. 好的开端是成功的一半。 1.A good beginning is half done. 有志者，事竟成 。 2.Where there is a will, there is a way. 3.Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母。

4. 伟大的理想造就伟大的人物。 4.Great hopes make great men. 蜡烛照亮了别人，却烧尽了自己。 5.A candle lights others and consumes itself. 6.Honesty is the best policy. 做人诚信为本。 02

5. 好的开端是成功的一半。 1.A good beginning is half done. 有志者，事竟成 。 2.Where there is a will, there is a way. 3.Failure is the mother of success. 失败是成功之母。

6. 伟大的理想造就伟大的人物。 4.Great hopes make great men. 蜡烛照亮了别人，却烧尽了自己。 5.A candle lights others and consumes itself. 6.Honesty is the best policy. 做人诚信为本。 02

7. Things I hate to do I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The thing that I hate most is smoking. As we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves but also harmful to others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste of money to smoke. What’s more, smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. 时态： 人称： 题材： 要点： 写事 一般现在时 第一人称 I Why? (the reasons) 03

8. Things I hate to do I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The thing that I hate most is smoking. As we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves but also harmful to others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste of money to smoke. What’s more, smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. Things I hate to do Introduction keep pets 、 tell lies Reasons harmful 、 pollute air waste money 、 sick Conclusion hate smoking most Center hate smoking most 05

9. Things I hate to do I hate to keep pets and tell lies. The thing that I hate most is smoking. As we all know, smoking is not only bad for ourselves but also harmful to others. Whenever my father smokes, I feel rather sick. Besides, it is a waste of money to smoke. What’s more, smoking pollutes the air. So I hate smoking most. 1. 全文无语法错误 2. 点题并紧扣主题 3. 层次清晰 层层递进 4. 句子完整 好词颇多 06

10. 1. Comprehend ( 审题 ) 2. Outline ( 提纲 ) 3. Write ( 写作 ) 4. Correct ( 修改 ) 39

11. The person I respect ( 我最敬佩的人 ) 参考 Use the following points as a guide. ( 下列要点仅供参考 ) Who’s the person you respect? Why do you respect him/her? What will you learn from him/her? 要点 题材题材 人称 时态 写人 第三人称 (he/she) 一般现在时、 一般过去时 Why? (reasons) 09

12. Part one The person I respect Who…? The person I respect is… teacher 、 (famous person 、 family member 、 friend…) What…? I will learn from him/her and try to … Part two Part three (main body) Why…? 16 cool… super star excellent performance confident successful never give up (Jay Chou) (work hard/be honest/be responsible…)

13. 要点 The person I respect 题材 人称 时态 写人第三人称 (he/she) 一般现在时 Why? (reasons) Part one Part two Part three Who…? (The person I respect is…) famous person 、 teacher 、 family member 、 What…? Why…? friend… (I will learn from him/her and try to …) 21 cool… supe r star excellent performance confident successful 、 never give up 、 (Jay Chou) work hard/be honest/be responsible…

14. The person I respect my brother. He is born in 1982. He do well in all his subject and he is also good at sing. He has much friends. He even with the famous singer sha baoliang had dinner before. My brother has won a lot of awards and he has set a good exmple for me. I will learn from him! The person I respect is was does s singingmany He even had dinner with the famous singer Sha Baoliang before. 大小写错误 动词时态错误 词组固定搭配用错 example Chinglish 现象 名词单复数错误 拼写错误 主谓一致错误 Sha Baoliang 24

15. 单词： 拼写错误、大小写错误、名词单复数错误 句子： 动词时态、主谓一致、 Chinglish 现象 词组固定搭配错误 25-27

16. The person I respect is my brother. He was born in 1982. He does well in all his subjects and he is also good at singing. He has many friends. He even had dinner with the famous singer Sha Baoliang before. My brother has won a lot of awards and he has set a good example for me. I will learn from him! First, he What’s more, he For example, he In addition, my and I hope I will be as super as him! 28 Where there is a will, there is a way.

17. 1. 正确运用连接词，使层次更清晰，条理更清楚。 (2) 递进： besides 、 in addition 、 what’s more… (3) 转折： however 、 but 、 although… (8) 总结： in a word 、 as you can see… (4) 对比： on the other hand… (5) 原因： because of 、 now that 、 … (6) 结果： therefore 、 as a result… (7) 举例： for example 、 such as… (1) 顺序： first 、 secondly 、 finally… 30

18. 2. 适当运用名言，使文章更出彩。 30-33 A good beginning is half done. Where there is a will, there is a way. Failure is the mother of success. Great hopes make great men. A candle lights others and consumes itself. Honesty is the best policy.

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20. Topics on “person” A successful person… My favourite super star I want to thank______ My good friend/classmate… A famous person A great person A popular person My family member (father/mother…) 38

21. 1. Comprehend ( 审题 ) 2. Outline ( 提纲 ) 3. Write ( 写作 ) 4. Correct ( 修改 ) 39

22. Finish the passage “When I met a difficulty” according to the four steps. 40

23. When I met a difficulty （当我碰到困难时 ） 必须包括 Use the following points as a guide. （ 必须包括下列要点） What difficulty did you meet? Describe how you faced and overcame it. How did you feel after you overcame it? 要点 题材题材 人称 时态 写事 第一人称 (I) 一般过去时 How? (ways)

24. Part one When I met a difficulty What…? (My difficulty was…) poor study 、 What…? (I felt happy/exciting…) Part two Part three (main body) How…? poor study bad health 、 not good at sports 、 having an argument with… improve the ways of study ask for help practise more have enough sleep…