1. Tosspon Engl 105 Turn in research scaffold and vocabulary 1.Run-On sentences 2.Incorporating research 3.Quoting/paraphrasing 4.CARS – checking sources 5.Your paper!

2. Quick review: Fragments To be a complete sentence- – Subject – Verb – Express a complete thought Watch for words like “although” and “because”!

3. Review: Run ON Fragment= incomplete 2 or more independent clauses (whole sentences) combined incorrectly. – Too many ANDS (goal 1-2 “and”s per sentence) – Fused Jammed together with no punctuation – Comma Splice Jammed together with just a comma (need comma conjunction!!!) I went to the store and bought a candy bar and who did I see there but Kevin who got me a coke and so we went to the park together. Kevin bought me a coke so we went to the park together. Kevin bought me a coke, we went to the park together

4. “Tosspon’s Blurnsball” Teams stand in “batting order” in the dugout (their table). Answer the questions on the worksheet to “hit” – A Single – identify if it is a Fragment (F) or Sentence (S), Run on (R) (take 1 base) – A Double – correct the error – An error at ANY point results in a strike- out – Players move around the bases, when they cross “home plate” they score a point!

5. Incorporating Research  Read the paper  Highlight/circle each quote  Take notes in the margin  What kind of hook is it?  What is the thesis?  what is each main point?  Create a Reverse Outline  Separate piece of paper  Each Paragraph  Each main point

6. Using Quotes/Evidence Look @ each paragraph 1.Write the thesis @ the top of the paper 2.What is the main point of the paragraph? 3.How does the author use each quote? – How does she introduce the quote? – What quote is used – What does it mean to her paragraph? – How does it prove her thesis? “You’ve got about as much charm as a dead slug” He insults her because he can’t trust himself to care for her, as he knows she will likely be dead in a matter of days Haymitch, who starts out a drunk… actually becomes very helpful.. Pg 67 It shows that both Haymitch first showed dislike to protect himself from the hurt her death would cause. Throughout story each character’s mindset and outlook.. As he trains her, he tells Katniss

7. Quoting Pg 393 Quotations must be identical to the original, using a narrow segment of the source. They must match the source document word for word and must be attributed to the original author. – Direct quotation. Jon Krakauer says, “I had been granted unusual freedom and responsibility at an early age, for which I should have been grateful in the extreme, but I wasn’t” (Krakauer, 148).

8. Paraphrasing Paraphrasing involves putting a passage from source material into your own words. A paraphrase must also be attributed to the original source. Paraphrased material is usually shorter than the original passage, taking a somewhat broader segment of the source and condensing it slightly. – Paraphrase. In Chapter 11 of Into the Wild, Walt, McCandless’s father, remembers an early hike with twelve-year-old Chris. They made it to 13,000 feet before turning back from the 14,256-foot summit in Colorado. Chris did not want to quit, and complained all the way down (Krakauer, 109).

9. Summarizing Summarizing involves putting the main idea(s) into your own words, including only the main point(s). Once again, it is necessary to attribute summarized ideas to the original source. Summaries are significantly shorter than the original and take a broad overview of the source material. Summary. In Into the Wild, Krakauer seems to be working out his own past and his relationship with his father as well as telling the sad story of Chris McCandless. Because Krakauer, too, is a man of the outdoors, he understands something about the call of the wild.

10. Practice Paraphrase, Quote, Summary Handout

11. Using Quotes/Paraphrases Your quote can’t make your point for you. YOU must make your point. Use a quote, tell the reader WHAT it shows and why.

12. Signal the Use of a Source Read & highlight the handout Introduce your sources – Dialogue Tags – Phrases – Sentences Divide your sources Use Key Phrases

13. Punctuation Period goes AFTER the quote Citation: use 1 st thing in the Works Cited page (usually author’s last name or article title)

14. Try it on YOUR quote(s) Fill out a paragraph organizer for YOUR main points/ quotes “You’ve got about as much charm as a dead slug” He insults her because he can’t trust himself to care for her, as he knows she will likely be dead in a matter of days Haymitch, who starts out a drunk… actually becomes very helpful.. Pg 67 It shows that both Haymitch first showed dislike to protect himself from the hurt her death would cause. Throughout story each character’s mindset and outlook.. As he trains her, he tells Katniss

15. Works Cited Use www.easybib.comwww.easybib.com Make sure ALL information is correct Works Cited goes on its OWN PAGE – Do NOT trust Microsoft! It uses MLA 2007

16. Plagiarism & Citing Sources Tosspon’s English 105 Heald College

17. Obvious Plagiarism buying, stealing, or borrowing a paper (including, of course, copying an entire paper or article from the Web); hiring someone to write your paper for you; and copying large sections of text from a source without quotation marks or proper citation.

18. Cite It Words or ideas presented in a magazine, book, newspaper, song, TV program, movie, Web page, computer program, letter, advertisement, or any other medium Information you gain through interviewing or conversing with another person, face to face, over the phone, or in writing When you copy the exact words or a unique phrase When you reprint any diagrams, illustrations, charts, pictures, or other visual materials When you reuse or repost any electronically-available media, including images, audio, video, or other media

19. DON’T Cite It Writing your own lived experiences, your own observations and insights, your own thoughts, and your own conclusions about a subject When you are writing up your own results obtained through lab or field experiments When you use your own artwork, digital photographs, video, audio, etc. When you are using "common knowledge," things like folklore, common sense observations, myths, urban legends, and historical events (but not historical documents) When you are using generally-accepted facts, e.g., pollution is bad for the environment, including facts that are accepted within particular discourse communities, e.g., in the field of composition studies, "writing is a process" is a generally- accepted fact.

20. Must Cite in 2 places: In-text Works Cited Page (also known as ‘parenthetical documentation’) In other words- in parentheses. Your in-text citations work with your bibliography (works cited) page to identify where any quotes or ideas borrowed from another author came from. “References in the text MUST clearly point to specific sources in the list of works cited.” - MLA Handbook for Writers of Research Papers, 6 th ed.

21. Halio, Jay L., "Elizabethan Age." Grolier Multimedia Encyclopedia. Scholastic Library Publishing, 2006. HF-L High School. 1 Apr 2006. Life in Elizabethan England. Summer 2005. 31 Mar 2006 <http://renaissance.dm.net/compendium>. Pressley, J. M. "An Encapsulated Biography." Shakespeare Resource Center, February 10, 2005. 3 Mar 2006.http://www.bardweb.net/man.html Shakespeare, William. Romeo and Juliet. New York: Scholastic, Inc., 1969. Thomas, Heather. The Life in Times of Queen Elizabeth I. 23 Mar 2006. 1 Apr 2006. Works Cited

22. In the body of the paper, it looks like this: When Mercutio is wounded, he screams “A plague on both your houses!” referring to both the Capulets and the Montagues (Shakespeare 70). In the body of the paper, it looks like this: When Mercutio is wounded, he screams “A plague on both your houses!” referring to both the Capulets and the Montagues (Shakespeare 70). In-text citations: Direct Quote Works Cited Shakespeare, William. Romeo and Juliet. New York: Scholastic, Inc., 1969.

23. Direct Quotes

24. A.On September 11, 2001, the World Trade Center and the Pentagon were attacked by hijacked airplanes. B.Atta, Binalshibh, al Shehhi, and Jarrah had lived in Germany and were chosen over more established Al Qaeda members due to their exposure to the West and ability to speak English. A.On September 11, 2001, the World Trade Center and the Pentagon were attacked by hijacked airplanes. B.Atta, Binalshibh, al Shehhi, and Jarrah had lived in Germany and were chosen over more established Al Qaeda members due to their exposure to the West and ability to speak English.

25. B was correct: it is specific and not commonly known How would you cite it? In the text of your paper: Atta, Binalshibh, al Shehhi, and Jarrah had lived in Germany and were chosen over more established Al Qaeda members due to their exposure to the West and ability to speak English (National Commission 160). In the Works Cited: National Commission on Terrorist Attacks Upon the United States. The 9/11 Commission Report. New York: W.W. Norton, 2004.

26. Which of THESE do you need to cite? A. “The science labs at East St. Louis High School are 30 to 50 years outdated.” B. When public schools were segregated, conditions were not equal.

27. How would you cite it? In-body: “The science labs at East St. Louis High School are 30 to 50 years outdated” (Kozol 27). In the Works Cited: Kozol, Jonathan. Savage Inequalities: Children in America’s Schools. New York: HarperCollins, 1991. Print.

28. Good Sources/Bad Sources Do NOT use wikipedia as a cited source. Sources that end in.edu or.gov are more reliable. News agencies often end in.com Beware of.org,.com, and.net websites. – Sometimes can be used to show people’s opinions. Should NOT be used for facts unless reputable source such as news site.

29. CARS Is your web source Credible Accurate Reliable Supported See handout, analyze 1 source YOU used. Sometimes you may use a non-credible source, if you are quoting an opinion and state it as such in your paper.

30. Peer Revision: Compare/Contrast Use the Handout Remember to respond (questions 17- 21) – Author- you are asked to write a different STYLE of intro and a different STYLE of conclusion (see chpt 4) If you used a personal story, try using a quote! If you used a call to action, try using an anecdote!

31. Effective sentences Chapter 6, pg 125

32. What’s wrong with these? In accordance with your instructions, I have given birth to twins in the enclosed envelope. There will be a discussion tomorrow on the problem of adultery in the minister’s office Passes will not be given to members until the manager has punched each of them first.

33. Assignment Jigsaw: form into 4 groups Each group will be assigned to make a poster of one (1) subtopic within “developing effective sentences” You will have 20 minutes to create a poster Posters will be presented to the class Take notes as groups present their posters.

34. Develop a Clear Style Give your sentences content – Look @ bulleted sentences on pg 126. – How could you put more information into each? Make your sentences specific – Vague to SPECIFIC Avoid Over-packing your sentences Fix fragments Pay attention to word order Avoid mixed constructions and faulty predication

35. Practice what you’ve learned, pg 134 1.There’s a new detective show on television. Starring Phil Noir. It is set in the 1940’s. According to TV guide. 2.Roger’s marketing skills made him important to his company’s sales department. I can’t help but wonder if he’s welcome. 3.Biofeedback: How to Stop It has so many funny and sarcastic comments about California self-help fads, I couldn’t put it down. 4.The magician became disillusioned when his assistant stole the disappearing rabbit, the magic wand and the invisible ink. 1. According to TV Guide, the new detective show on TV stars Phil Noir and is set in the 1940s.

36. Developing a concise style Avoid deadwood constructions Avoid redundancy Carefully consider your passive verbs Avoid pretentiousness

37. Pg 139, Practice 1.The reason he lost his job was because he was careless and sloppy in his proofreading. 2.The staff notified us that many people (both adults and children) threw their trash on the ground at the company picnic. 3.My older brother Austin was in an accident early Saturday morning and cannot drive to work this week.

38. Developing a lively style Use specific, descriptive words Use specific, precise modifiers that help the reader see, hear, or feel what you are describing Emphasize people when possible Vary your sentence style Avoid overuse of any one kind of construction of the same sentences Don’t change your point of view between or within sentences

39. Pg 144, Practice 1.Judging from the rasping, grating sound … 2.The City Council felt guilty and nervous because 3.To watch Jim Bob eat pork chops was as fascinating as it was disgusting. 4.For sale: gorgeous, ornate antique bureau 5.We discourage boredom and encourage festivities, but most of all have fun. 6.My roommate is a fat, sloppy pig, but he’s a kind and honorable guy at heart.

40. Developing an emphatic style Use specific, descriptive words Use specific, precise modifiers that help the reader see, hear, or feel what you are describing Emphasize people when possible Vary your sentence style Avoid overuse of any one kind of construction of the same sentences Don’t change your point of view between or within sentences

41. Pg 149, Practice 1.Joe Louis, former heavyweight boxing champ, reportedly said, “… 2.Where do most people get their news today? Television. 3.The world’s most important problem: hunger. 4.Greece was my favorite country in my tour of Europe last year. 5. Knuckle-cracking is the habit I can’t stand.

42. Homework: Tuesday Compare/Contrast 1st Draft DUE @ beginning of NEXT MEETING (50 points)

43. Homework: Thurs Compare/Contrast Final Draft email to ttosspon@gmail.com before class!ttosspon@gmail.com If you email it on/before the 27 th you will get 10 points credit.