1. Presented by Stephanie Churchill Adapted from Alice Nine and Pat Jacoby Revised by Amanda DeMunbrun, Coronado High School

2.  Start with a STUDENT Friendly rubric  Students MUST know the rubric for EACH type of writing inside and out  9 th grade Expository (Inform) and Literary (A story)  10 th grade Expository and Persuasive  11 th grade Persuasive and Analytical (best predictor of college readiness and success)

4. Score Point 4 Highly Effective The essay represents an accomplished writing performance. Score Point 3 Generally Effective The essay represents a satisfactory writing performance. Score Point 2 Somewhat Effective The essay represents a basic writing performance. Score Point 1 Ineffective The essay represents a very limited writing performance. ORGANIZATION  Responds to prompt in a meaningful way  Organized with clear central idea (thesis statement)  Ideas strongly related to central idea and focused on topic  Unified and coherent  Uses meaningful transitions; ideas are connected  Easy to follow writer’s thinking  Responds to prompt in a way that makes sense  Organized with clear central idea (thesis statement)  Most supporting ideas related to central idea, but not always focused on topic  Most transitions are meaningful and sufficient to show relationships among ideas  Can follow flow of essay  Structure of essay is evident but not always appropriate  Central idea (thesis statement) is weak or unclear  Supporting ideas related to topic of prompt but not connected to central idea  Ideas are choppy or repetitive  Transitions and connections between sentences are weak  Difficult to follow writer’s thinking  Structure of essay is inappropriate  Response to prompt is vague or confused  Not organized around a central idea (thesis statement)  Most ideas are weak and/or not related to prompt  Not focused on topic  Ideas are choppy or repeated  No transitions or connections between sentences  Unclear and/or difficult to read DEVELOP- MENT OF IDEAS  Uses specific, well-chosen details and examples  Thoughtful and engaging  Uses his/her own experiences to connect ideas in interesting ways  Understands how to write an expository essay  Uses specific details and examples that add some substance  Shows some thoughtfulness  Expresses original ideas; is not formulaic  Understands how to write an expository essay  Details and examples do not always make sense or are not completely explained  Not very thoughtful  Response to topic is formulaic  Limited understanding of how to write an expository essay  Development of ideas weak  Details and examples are inappropriate, vague or insufficient  Confusing and/or weakly linked to the prompt  Writer does not understand how to write an expository essay USE OF LANGUAGE CONVENTIONS  Uses words that express exactly what he/she means  Has an appropriate tone  Word choice makes essay clear and strong  Sentences have a purpose are varied, well- controlled, and enhancing  Uses different types of sentences  Consistent control of sentence boundaries, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar  Minor errors do not make essay confusing  Overall strength contributes to effectiveness of essay  Uses words that are for the most part, clear and specific, and contribute to effectiveness of essay  Has an appropriate tone  Uses different types of sentences  Adequate control of sentence boundaries, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar  Some errors, but do not interrupt the meaning of the essay  Uses words that are not specific or not correct; makes writing confusing  Tone is not appropriate to the task  Sentences are awkward or somewhat controlled  Has partial control of sentence boundaries, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar  Some errors distract and take away from meaning of essay  Uses words that are vague or limited  Tone is not appropriate to the task  Sentences are simple, awkward and uncontrolled; take away from idea of essay  Has little or no control of sentence boundaries, spelling, capitalization, punctuation, and grammar  Serious, persistent errors interfere with meaning of the essay Student Friendly Expository Rubric English I and English II

5.  1. Read (typically 4 th grade synopsis, 7 th grade quote, English I Information, quote, fact, excerpt) – The Context  2. Think (topic)  3. Write (Charge)  4. Be sure to – (Rubric)

6. Read Think Write

7. Introduces context for thinking Inter - prets the quot e Establishes the topic Presents assertion options and form Personalized focus to the prompt Rubric – what assessed on

8. READ The digital audio player, also known as the MP3 player, first became available to the general public in 1996. Unlike the compact disc player, this technology did not require that music be stored on separate discs. MP3 players have now become the dominant medium for listening to music. The MP3 player came out in 1996 It was different from CD players because it didn’t need a bunch of discs MP3 players is how people listen to music The MP3 player came out in 1996 It was different from CD players because it didn’t need a bunch of discs MP3 players is how people listen to music Focus on pulling out the nouns and the verbs

9. THINK. Think about the new technologies that people use in everyday life. Technologies used in everyday life are cell phones, GPS, Laptops, iPads, iPods…. Interprets the quote to establish the topic

10. WRITE an essay explaining the effect of one new technology on people’s lives. VERB Root is Explain which means give reasons When I explain I must give REASONS I must give EVIDENCE The evidence must SUPPORT my reasons When I explain I must give REASONS I must give EVIDENCE The evidence must SUPPORT my reasons Evidence could be facts, definitions, or examples! The Reasons are my topic sentences—then give evidence. I must write about this. The Charge

12. Be sure to - Clearly state the Thesis Organize and develop your explanation effectively Choose your words carefully Edit your writing for grammar, mechanics, and spelling ThesisThesis ThesisThesis Organization and Progression Word Choice (Language) Explanation means evidence Conventions

13. The digital audio player, also known as the MP3 player, first became available to the general public in 1996. Unlike the compact disc player, this technology did not require that music to be stored on separate discs. MP3 players have now become the dominant medium for listening to music. Think about the new technologies that people use in everyday life. Write an essay explaining the effect of one new technology on people’s lives. English I Expository Prompt from the STAAR 2012 Study Guide17

14.  1. Read – just read it once through without the rubric in mind.  2. Thesis – find and identify the Thesis (highlight or flag it)  3. + (Strengths) – look for and identify the strengths in the paper  4. – (weaknesses) – look at the weaknesses of the paper  5. Score – score the composition according to the rubric (State stops here)  6. Feedback – Focused revision (2 items MAX!)

15.  Use three different colors to identify strengths and weaknesses in the paper (i.e. pink for organization +’s and –’s, yellow for idea +’s and –”s, and blue for conventions)  Flag the strengths (+’s) on the left side of the paper with specific feedback (i.e. write the detail they used down and label it under ideas)  Flag the weaknesses (-’s) on the right side of the paper (remember to be as specific as possible in your feedback)  Only ask students to work on 2 items MAX at a time. (i.e. Conventions – comma slices and run- on sentences)

16.  Writing workshop conferences don’t have to take a lot of time (except maybe the first time)  Additive Scoring is the key to saving time on conferencing  Peer conferencing  Feedback

17.  Read the following quotation: “Take risks. Ask big questions. Don’t be afraid to make mistakes; if you don’t make mistakes, you’re not reaching far enough.”—David Packard, co- founder of Hewlett-Packard  [Think carefully about the following:] Taking a risk means acting without knowing whether the outcome will be good.  Write an essay explaining why it is sometimes necessary to take a chance.  Be sure to — clearly state your thesis organize and develop your ideas effectively choose your words carefully edit your writing for grammar, mechanics, and spelling Page

18.  Brainstorm: ◦ Listing ◦ Web ◦ Outline ◦ Think of what you need to provide:  When might it be necessary to take a chance / risk?  Global [textual, historical] Example 1  Global Example 2  Personal Example (If Exceptionally strong)  Details  Who was involved?  What were the circumstances?  What was the outcome?  Positive?  Negative?

19.  Introduction: 2-3 sentences (maximum of 3) and make sure that the Thesis (which reflects / responds to the prompt) is the last sentence in the introduction.  Address the big idea  Offer a specific thesis

20.  Body Paragraphs: Because organization is addressed, be sure to have clear, indented paragraphs with correct topic sentences. ◦ The topic sentence should connect the content of the body paragraph to the thesis statement ◦ The 1 st body paragraph should develop one of the ideas—provide the example and explanation— discovered in the brainstorm ◦ The 2 nd body paragraph should develop another of the ideas....  SUGGESTION: be sure to choose the strongest examples to illustrate and explain AND put the strongest of these examples and explanations last..

21.  Conclusion: 2-3 sentences  While it is OK to restate the idea—do not say the EXACT SAME THING  Consider concluding by looking at the examples and commenting on what should be taken away from these—create a complete theme or use a truism

22.  If you have: ◦ clearly stated your thesis ◦ organized and developed your ideas effectively ◦ chosen your words carefully ◦ edited your writing for grammar, mechanics, and spelling