1. How could you improve the email (letter) below? VA FEEDBACK  Extending ideas VA FEEDBACK  Extending ideas

2. LO: how can I improve my response for the Writing section of the exam? C/W20 th May

3. Did I get your level right? Highlight the different sentence types

4. School Librarian

5. Hardworking, polite Like reading Play sports Book monitor in Primary School Want to be an English teacher when I am older How do you plan?

6. School Librarian 1. Hardworking, polite Like reading Play sports Book monitor in Primary School Want to be an English teacher when I am older How do you plan?

7. School Librarian 1. Hardworking, polite 1. Like reading Play sports Book monitor in Primary School Want to be an English teacher when I am older How do you plan?

8. School Librarian 1. Hardworking, polite 1. Like reading Play sports 2. Book monitor in Primary School Want to be an English teacher when I am older How do you plan?

9. School Librarian 1. Hardworking, polite 1. Like reading 3. Play sports 2. Book monitor in Primary School Want to be an English teacher when I am older How do you plan?

10. School Librarian 1. Hardworking, polite 1. Like reading 3. Play sports 2. Book monitor in Primary School 4. Want to be an English teacher when I am older How do you plan? Introduction? Conclusion?

11. Dear Mrs Carew, I am emailing you regarding the position of pupil-librarian. I would very much like to be considered for the role and believe I have all the characteristics to be a success.

12. In conclusion, I would like to thank you for taking the time to read my letter and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, ___________

13. Dear Mrs Carew, I am emailing you regarding the position of pupil-librarian. I would very much like to be considered for the role and believe I have all the characteristics to be a success. Firstly, Secondly/Also, Thirdly/In addition/Furthermore In conclusion, I would like to thank you for taking the time to read my letter and I hope to hear from you soon. Yours Faithfully, ___________

14. VA FEEDBACK  Extending ideas  Organising ideas  Sentence structure: accurate, ambitious and varied VA FEEDBACK  Extending ideas  Organising ideas  Sentence structure: accurate, ambitious and varied

21. How could you improve the email (letter) below?