1. Learning Intention I will describe the snow effectively.

2. How can we describe things? Through the senses: Sight Sound Smell Touch Taste Figures of speech: Similes Alliteration Personification

3. Task Create a mind map to describe the snow. Describe it in the ways listed below……… Through the senses: Sight Sound Smell Touch Taste Figures of speech: Similes Alliteration Personification

4. Learning Intention I will write a piece of personal writing to describe my experience with the snow over the holidays……..

5. What can we write about? THE SNOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Everyone has something to write about!

6. Ideas School being cancelled Not being able to get somewhere important Having fun in the snow Being injured because of the snow How the snow effected different people in your life; you, your parents, grandparents etc Having a white Christmas You must include interesting description of the snow and your feelings!!!!

7. Interesting Openings Read the following openings to personal essays. Decide which is better and be ready to explain why……..

8. Opening 1 The snow was really thick. I like snow so I wasn’t affected too much. I spent a whole day of the holidays building a snowman which was really cool but hard work because the snow was so thick and cold my hands started to hurt. But then when we tried to get to my gran’s on christmas eve we couldn’t because my dad couldn’t get the car out of the snow and he didn’t want to drive because it was dangerous.

9. Opening 2 The last day of term was the best school day ever! Why? Because we didn’t have to go to school…. I woke up to the sound of my mum’s gentle voice. At first I thought I was dreaming because she seemed to be saying something I couldn’t quite believe. She was telling me that school had been cancelled due to the snow! I sprang out of bed like a kangaroo and pulled back the curtains and was confronted with a winter wonderland. The snow fairy had obviously been hard at work the night before as the snow covered the roads and pavements like a blanket of cotton wool. It was still snowing and the flakes whisked gently in the air until they hit the ground with a silent bang.

10. Learning Intention We will self assess, and peer assess, our essays on snow. Why are we doing this? What should we be looking for?

11. Assessment Checklist The following things should have been used correctly: Capital letters Full stops Paragraphs Spelling Interesting description Inclusion of feelings