1.   Re-Vision- looking at something already seen, but from a new perspective.  Ex: When Hollywood likes to remake a film, the intention is to see it from a new pair of eyes potentially making it better  Re-Vision is looking at what we’ve put on paper, but trying to make it better. What is Revision

2.  Breaking Down Revision  A. Content Do we understand what each paragraph is trying to do? Does each paragraph build off of the thesis statement? Part of revision is re-evaluating the content of our papers; what is and isn’t necessary?  B. Structure Is your paper easy to follow? During the revision process, it’s important that our papers are structurally sound; the arguments in your body paragraphs build off of your thesis statement, but the paper has to be coherent and easy to follow

3.   Thesis Statement: Obesity is the leading health issue in the United States.  1 st Paragraph Sentence Error: Obesity is defined as being immensely overweight.  Note: We are not trying to define obesity; we are only trying to prove why it’s major health issue.  1 st Paragraph Sentence Correction: People do not pay attention to what they are eating.  Note: This revised idea works, because it’s an argument branched off of the thesis statement. Examples of Content & Structure

4.   After solidifying our arguments, it’s important we go back and fix our grammatical errors.  Ways to Self-Edit:  Say your sentences out loud—great trick for wordiness.  Break Grammar Down into Categories: Commas, Spelling Errors, Passive Voice, etc.  DO NOT RELY ON SPELL CHECK!!!!!!!! C. Grammar/Punctuation