1. CM 220 College Composition II Unit 6: A Blueprint for Progress: Putting the Pieces Together 1

2. ASSIGNMENTS AND DRAFT GUIDELINES Unit 6 2

3. Unit 6 Reading ReadingWhere to find The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing, ch. 6 (pp. 37-44) Doc Sharing The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing, ch. 14 (pp. 169-180) Doc Sharing KU Writing Center resources on paragraph development and graphic organizers Links in reading and “Extra, Extra!” tab Unit 6 overviewClick on “Reading” icon on unit home page 3

4. Unit 6 Invention and Tech Labs Invention Lab: Strategies for defeating writer’s block and prewriting for draft Tech lab: Prezi (animated presentations), Photoshop and Gimp (graphic design) 4

5. Unit 6 Draft: The Blueprint for Progress Purpose: Pull together all the pieces of your research, pre-writing, and organizational techniques into a coherent essay. While this draft will not be perfect or complete, it is not “rough,” either. Do edit and proofread! Be sure to format according to APA guidelines. Consider submitting to the Writing Center for additional feedback. 5

6. Draft Guidelines Includes introductory paragraph with thesis statement and concluding paragraph. Note: Introduction and conclusion will be revised and expanded as part of the unit 8 Invention Lab. Supports main points effectively and clearly. Uses research, evidence, and examples to support assertions. Skillfully refutes counter-arguments without ignoring data that contradicts the student’s thesis. Refers to at least 3 secondary sources in the body of the paper and on the references page. One should be an academic source from the Kaplan Library. 6

7. Draft Guidelines Paragraphs are well-developed, coherent, and logically organized. Style is appropriate for academic writing. Style is clear and concise. Project is free of serious errors in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. Follows accepted conventions of Standard American English. Follows APA guidelines for the document layout and citations (including title page, in text citations, and References page). Meets 3-5 page length requirement; this does not include the title and references page. 7

8. Draft guide lines Does not use 1 st or 2 nd person Does not use contractions Includes a source that opposes your Big Idea Uses credible academic sources 8

9. DEFEATING WRITER’S BLOCK Having problems? 9

10. What causes it? Anxiety and stress Fear of others’ opinions Difficulties with research Too close to topic 10

11. How to defeat it? Know your topic—be prepared. Don’t strive for perfection—this is a draft! Don’t edit and proofread while writing. Don’t stress over the introduction—come back to it later. Be confident! Just do it Note: see the Dennis Stokes video for more details. 11

12. PREWRITING FOR DRAFT The next step 12

13. Getting Started with Your Big Idea At the end of this unit, you will submit a 3- 5 page draft of your Big Idea. You want to have begun this work What can you do to GET STARTED? 13

14. Common Prewriting Techniques Freewriting Brainstorming Bubbling Clustering See ch. 6 of The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing for more on the writing process. Listing Informal outlining Annotating Questioning 14

15. Organizational Tools 15

16. Bubbling Chart: Food Additives 16 Food additives—are they dangerous? Decreasing nutritional value of food? Compare ingredients and nutritional value Health risks?Cancer Rising obesity rates Impact on brain development? Neurological disorders (Parkinsons, Alzheimers, ADD ) Changing what we grow and how we grow it? Farmers growing more corn, soybeans (used in many of the additives like HFCS)

17. Listing chart: Banning cigarettes Main pointsSupport from sources? Audience concerns to address Examples I could use Cigarettes are bad for everyone’s health, smokers and non-smokers alike Surgeon General (warnings), medical reports on second- hand and third- hand smoke effects Should the government outlaw everything that is bad for us (fast food, etc.?) Childhood asthma and allergies, even ear infections, often tied into parents’ smoking Those horrible pictures they showed in elementary school of black lungs of smokers! 17

18. Organizing and Developing Your Ideas Establish a thesis Consider writing an outline (it can be changed later) Take the ideas in the outline and brainstorm each concept/argument Begin researching and incorporating evidence to support your argument/claims 18

19. CREATING STRONG PARAGRAPHS The next step 19

20. Strong Paragraphs Are limited and focused Are unified and coherent Are clearly related to the thesis Are well developed Include a clear topic sentence, supporting sentences, and a clear conclusion 20

21. How do I create such a paragraph? Decide on your main idea for the ¶. Write a topic sentence expressing your argument. Explain/develop that idea in ¶ body. Give example(s). Explain relevance of examples. Complete ¶ or transition into next paragraph. (“Paragraph Development,” 2007). 21

22. More Help with Paragraphs For a helpful Writing Center workshop on this topic, review: http://khe2.acrobat.com/p75782349/?launcher=f alse&fcsContent=true&pbMode=normal 22

23. How do I develop paragraphs? Use examples and illustrations Cite data (facts, statistics, evidence, details, and others) Testimony from experts (interviews, quotes, paraphrases) Use an anecdote or story Define terms in the paragraph Compare and contrast Evaluate causes and reasons Examine effects and consequences Analyze the topic Describe the topic Offer a chronology of an event (“On Paragraphs,” 2010). 23

24. Use of comparison/contrast and example Slave spirituals often had hidden double meanings. On one level, spirituals referenced heaven, Jesus, and the soul, but on another level, the songs spoke about slave resistance. For example, according to Frederick Douglass, the song "O Canaan, Sweet Canaan" spoke of slaves' longing for heaven, but it also expressed their desire to escape to the North. Careful listeners heard this second meaning in the following lyrics: "I don't expect to stay / Much longer here. / Run to Jesus, shun the danger. / I don't expect to stay." When slaves sang this song, they could have been speaking of their departure from this life and their arrival in heaven; however, they also could have been describing their plans to leave the South and run, not to Jesus, but to the North. Slaves even used songs like "Steal Away to Jesus (at midnight)" to announce to other slaves the time and place of secret, forbidden meetings. What whites heard as merely spiritual songs, slaves discerned as detailed messages. The hidden meanings in spirituals allowed slaves to sing what they could not say. 24

25. How could this paragraph be developed? We should provide more financial support for 9/11 First Responders. Many are currently in poor health or dying from complications resulting from exposure to toxins at Ground Zero. It is unfair for them to suffer and die without adequate support from the government. What would YOU do to make this paragraph stronger? 25

26. EFFECTIVE TRANSITIONS Putting paragraphs together 26

27. Using Transitions Show relationship between ideas Demonstrate that thoughts are logical and progressive, rather than random and accidental Provide unity and coherence Provide smooth “flow” within and between paragraphs 27

28. Some Example Transitions To indicate time order To provide an example To indicate results In the pastFor exampleAs a result earlierFor instanceconsequently beforeTo illustrateBecause of currentlyspecificallySince precedingIn particulartherefore presentlynamelyFor this reason 28

29. A more complete list LOGICAL RELATIONSHIPTRANSITIONAL EXPRESSION Similarityalso, in the same way, just as... so too, likewise, similarly Exception/contrastbut, however, in spite of, on the one hand... on the other hand, nevertheless, nonetheless, notwithstanding, in contrast, on the contrary, still, yet Sequence/orderfirst, second, third,... next, then, finally Timeafter, afterward, at last, before, currently, during, earlier, immediately, later, meanwhile, now, recently, simultaneously, subsequently, then Examplefor example, for instance, namely, specifically, to illustrate Emphasiseven, indeed, in fact, of course, truly Place/Positionabove, adjacent, below, beyond, here, in front, in back, nearby, there Cause and effectaccordingly, consequently, hence, so, therefore, thus Additional Support or Evidenceadditionally, again, also, and, as well, besides, equally important, further, furthermore, in addition, moreover, then Conclusion/Summaryfinally, in a word, in brief, briefly, in conclusion, in the end, in the final analysis, on the whole, thus, to conclude, to summarize, in sum, to sum up, in summary 29

30. Other approaches Repeating key words or phrases Using parallel structure (express content in grammatically similar ways) Summarizing/rephrasing idea in preceding sentence or paragraph to link to new idea 30

31. What transitions would you use and where? One of Mary Washington University’s best features is its small student population. The average class size is 25-30 students. Students have many opportunities to meet in one-on-one conferences with their professors. This gives each student the opportunity to discuss class assignments. 31

32. What is wrong with this paragraph? Club Palm Resort's beaches are beautiful, and the surrounding countryside is quite scenic. The quality of the food leaves a lot to be desired. Many vacationers enjoy the variety of outdoor activities and the instruction available in such sports as sailing and scuba diving. Unfortunately, security is poor; several vacationers' rooms have been broken into and their valuables stolen. Christmas in the Bahamas can make the thought of New Year's in Chicago bearable. 32

33. Paragraph Workshop Share a paragraph from your draft you are currently working on. Offer your classmates advice on strengthening their paragraphs. Please raise your hand and I will call on you to post your introductory paragraph For an orderly discussion/Do not post a paragraph unless I call on you 33

34. References Brooke, B. (2009). Effective paragraphs. Bob Brooke’s Writer’s Corner. Retrieved from http://www.bobbrooke.com/WritersCorner/effectiveparagraphs.htm http://www.bobbrooke.com/WritersCorner/effectiveparagraphs.htm Clements, K. (2010). Essay development. In The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing, eds. D. Martinez, S. Carlson, & K. VanDam, p. 159-204. New York: Kaplan Publishing. Jensen, M. (2010). The writing process. In The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing, eds. D. Martinez, S. Carlson, & K. VanDam, p. 35-47. New York: Kaplan Publishing. Paragraph development. (2007). The University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill. Retrieved from http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/paragraphs.html.http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/paragraphs.html Stokes, D. (2008, April 20). 6 tips to overcoming and cure for writer’s block [Video file]. Retrieved from http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YF9MxWxP3zQhttp://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YF9MxWxP3zQ Transitions. (2007). The University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill. Retrieved from http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/transitions.html http://www.unc.edu/depts/wcweb/handouts/transitions.html 34

35. Introduction/Thesis/paper Workshop Please offer suggestions to improve the posted paragraph for this student, so it is ready for submission/to get that A on this portion of their paper Thanks! 35

36. Original paragraph One in two first marriages in America end with divorce; therefore before being issued a marriage license, all couples should have six months of counseling on communication, finances, child bearing, parenting, religion, politics, sex, house- cleaning, cooking, and in-laws. High levels of marriage and high levels of divorce may 36

37. show us the need for education and techniques to maintain steady and lasting marriages. Two statewide researches shows that better communication, and good bonding were related to quality and stabile marriages. (Johnson et al., 2001; Schramm, Marshall, Harris, & George (2003) 37

38. Having couples go through formal marital skill training is one proposed solution in order to improve the quality of the relationship. (Family Science Association, 2011) 38

39. Revised Fifty percent of all marriages in this country fail and end in divorce. With the exception of helping spouses escape from violent marriages, divorce typically failed to deliver the promised psychological benefits for adults. According to the (Institute for American Values, 2006), 39

40. unhappily married couples who had divorced or separated after at least five years of marriage are no happier, are not less depressed, nor have a greater sense of personal mastery than those who stayed married. 40

41. With these types of results, more research needs to be done this to determine if divorce is the answer to marriage problems (Institute for American Values, 2006). 41

42. Revised Introduction/Thesis Because one in two first marriages in America end with divorce, before being issued a marriage license, all couples should have six months of counseling on communication, finances, child bearing, parenting, religion, politics, sex, house- cleaning, cooking, and in-laws. 42

43. Cont. These high levels of marriage and high levels of divorce shows the need for education and coping techniques to maintain steady and lasting marriages. 43

44. 1 ST Revised Paragraph One area that couples should have counseling in before marriage is communication, and communication takes a lot of work. The relationship must be always seen through the lens of the other person. 44

45. Cont. 1 st Paragraph Without truly relating to each other and communicating well marriage will fail. Researchers have determined that good communication skills are a top predictor of marital happiness (Markman et al., 2010). Cont. 45

46. Revised 2 nd Paragraph Another area where couples getting married need counseling is finances. Having inadequate income is one of the number one reasons for divorce. Being in good financial shape is so fundamental to a stable relationship that it is beginning to have an impact on what people look for in spouses. 46

47. 2 nd Paragraph cont. While two-thirds of all people think a man should be a good provider, more men than women do. Although researchers have known of the association between financial issues and marital satisfaction, researchers have also shown that debt is an especially problematic issue for couples (Skogrand, Johnson, Horrock, & DeFrain, 2011). 47

48. 2nd paragraph cont. These studies have found that debt was one of the top five financial stumbling blocks in marriage. Cont. 48

49. Original References Elizabeth Thayer, and Jeffrey Zimmerman (2001). The Co-Parenting Survival Guide Robert E. Emery Ph. D. (2012). The Truth About Children and Divorce 49

50. Victor William Harris, Ph.D. Dan Moen, Ph.D. Boyd Teemant, Ph.D. (2011). Family Science Association http://www.familyscienceassociation.org/ archived%20journal%20articles/FSR_16_2 _2011/11-50.pdf 50

51. Linda J. Waite, Don Browning, William J. Doherty, Maggie Gallagher, Ye Luo, Scott Stanley (2006). Institute for American Values, Does Divorce Make People Happy? Findings from a study of unhappy marriages. http://fmmh.ycdsb.ca/teachers/FOV1- 00027452/FOV1-00027453../mfdivor.pdfhttp://fmmh.ycdsb.ca/teachers/FOV1- 00027452/FOV1-00027453../mfdivor.pdf 51

52. Revised Reference Page Markman, H. j., Rhoades, G.K., Stanley, S. M., Ragan, E. P., & Whitton, S. W., (2010). The premarital communication roots of marital distress and divorce: The first five years of marriage. Journal of Family Psychology, Vol 24(3), Jun, 2010. pp. 289- 298. Retrieved from Kaplan Library http://web.ebscohost.com.lib.kaplan.edu/ ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?sid=6f470f2c- 65cf-49d1-a025- c88cbd04e9d0%40sessionmgr13&vid=2& hid=126 http://web.ebscohost.com.lib.kaplan.edu/ ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?sid=6f470f2c- 65cf-49d1-a025- c88cbd04e9d0%40sessionmgr13&vid=2& hid=126 52

53. Revised Formatted Reference Page Skogrand, l., Johnson, A.C., Horrocks, A. M., & DeFrain, J. (2011). Financial Management Practices of Couples with Great Marriages. Journal of Family and Economic Issues, March 2011, v. 32, iss. 1, pp. 27-35 Retrieved from Kaplan Library http://web.ebscohost.com.lib.kaplan.edu/ ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?sid=6f470f2c- 65cf-49d1-a025- c88cbd04e9d0%40sessionmgr13&vid=2& hid=126 http://web.ebscohost.com.lib.kaplan.edu/ ehost/pdfviewer/pdfviewer?sid=6f470f2c- 65cf-49d1-a025- c88cbd04e9d0%40sessionmgr13&vid=2& hid=126 53

54. Revised Formatted Reference Page Waite, L. J., Browning, D., Doherty, W. J., Gallagher, M., Luo, Y., & Scott, S. (2006) Does divorce make people happy? Findings from a study of unhappy marriages. Retrieved from http://fmmh.ycdsb.ca/teachers/FOV1- 00027452/FOV1-00027453../mfdivor.pdf http://fmmh.ycdsb.ca/teachers/FOV1- 00027452/FOV1-00027453../mfdivor.pdf 54

55. Did anyone bring a paragraph? Please raise your hand and I will call on you, thanks! 55