1. Before After Cutting Words Down to Size The Power of Subtraction and Concision This animation demonstrates how to perform surgery on weak sentences to make them active and more effective. Please place the presentation in SLIDE SHOW MODE. CLICK the slide to start the presentation. The rest of the show is fully automated.

2. In this animation is a demonstration of an effective approach to writing prose that is convincing and concise. A Perfectly Fine SentenceThat Could Be Better... Let’s get it in shape... Step 3: Where does the action occur in the sentence? Step 4: Replace the static noun with an active verb. demonstrates ˄ Step Five: Eliminate need for “that is” by moving the noun to follow the two adjectives that modify it. Step Six: Remove all words no longer required. A Simple Cure: Remove Excess Words and Passive Verbs Are they active or passive? ˄ Step 2: Eliminate passive verbs. ˄ ˅ ˄ ˄ ˄ ˄ ˅ Is it a verb or noun? Step Seven: Pull it all together ˄ This animation demonstrates an effective approach to writing convincing and concise prose. Step 1: Find the verbs. Let’s Compare Sentences

3. Convincing, Concise, and Conclusive This animation demonstrates an effective approach to writing convincing and concise prose. In this animation is a demonstration of an effective approach to writing prose that is convincing and concise. This animation demonstrates an effective approach to writing convincing and concise prose. The Original Sentence The Revised Sentence with the passive verbs and unnecessary words removed Compelling And only 12 Words Convincing Conclusive A Sentence of 18 Words