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4. Introduction  Is there a hook?  Is there a thesis?  An opinion?  B1 idea-  B2 idea-  B3 idea- Hook? Opinion? B1 idea? B2 idea? B3 idea?

5. Introduction Do you like looking in your mirror? Low self- esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this problem and apply solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the UAE and the world. HookOpinionB1 ideaB2 ideaB3 idea

6. Introduction Low self-esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this problem! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the UAE and the world. Hook?Opinion?B1 idea?B2 idea?B3 idea?

7. Introduction Do you like your reflection in the mirror? How often do you have negative thoughts about yourself? Low self-esteem is a significant problem and it affects the students at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this problem and apply solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the United Arab Emirates and the world. HookOpinionB1 ideaB2 ideaB3 idea

8. Introduction Do you like your reflection in the mirror? How often do you have negative thoughts about yourself? People should apply solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it would improve the United Arab Emirates and the world. Hook?Opinion?B1 idea?B2 idea?B3 idea?

9. Body Paragraphs  Is there a topic sentence?  Is there supporting detail?  Examples?  Explanation?  Is there a concluding sentence? TS? SD? CS ?

10. People must understand self-esteem and the implications for students at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School. Many students with low self-esteem are not good at school. They might be away from school more so their grades will be bad. Some students hate themselves and the way they look. They may feel no one likes them and feel ashamed. They might have few friends and some girls might be cruel and insult them. At Aisha Bint Abi Baker School, girls with low self-esteem might not be involved in sports and other things. Most of all, how the girls feel might change their future. We need to help students with low-self esteem! Body Paragraph 1 TSSDCS

11. People must understand self-esteem and the implications for students at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School. Many students with low self-esteem are not good at school. They might be away from school more so their grades will be bad. Some students hate themselves and the way they look. They may feel no one likes them and feel ashamed. They might have few friends and some girls might be cruel and insult them. At Aisha Bint Abi Baker School, girls with low self-esteem might not be involved in sports and other things. Most of all, how the girls feel might change their future. Body Paragraph 1 TS?SD?CS?

12. First of all, students can be friends with girls who are alone. Secondly, teachers should teach about low self-esteem. They can tell students to set high expectations for themselves and others. Teachers can reward students for good work. Then, students will become accustomed to feeling proud of themselves. Lastly, the school can put up posters about self- esteem. They can make a support place so students can talk about their problems. It is important for everyone at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School to take action to stop low self-esteem. Body Paragraph 2 TS?SD?CS?

13. Conclusion  Is there a thesis in different words than the introduction ?  An opinion?  B1 idea-  B2 idea-  B3 idea- Opinion? B1 idea? B2 idea? B3 idea?

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17. C apitals names, places, titles, “ I ” do you like looking in your mirror? low self-esteem is a significant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! People should understand this Problem and Apply solutions! if all schools solved this problem, It would improve the UAE and the world. BONUS 1.yesterday My dad helped me so i was Happy. 1.fatima ali and noora abdulaziz went to the mall to buy things for eid. ////// / / / /

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20. S pelling All words. Use a dictionary Due you lik looking in your mirror? Low self- esteem is a sigificant problem at Aisha Bint Abi Baker School! Peoble should understand this problem and applie solutions! If all schools solved this problem, it wood improv the UAE and the wourld.

21. Peer Editing

23. Steps to Peer Editing

26. Step 1