1. Revising & Editing from the Top Down Julie Staggers Ed Nagelhout Johnson Jacobson Wilcox Writing Workshops

2. Key concepts for today Revision = re-vision larger changes made to a document’s structure and content higher order concerns Editing changes at the sentence level lower order concerns Proofreading minor changes to spelling & punctuation (last step) Johnson Jacobson WilcoxWriting Workshops

3. Review: Core concepts Why is revision so difficult?

4. “Top-down editing” Structured method for inspecting documents Identifies/fixes problems likely to interfere with reader’s comprehension Divides document into 4 levels 1. Document 2. Section 3. Paragraph 4. Sentence

5. Top-down editing requires you to: 1. Inspect the document at 4 levels 2. Assess where you will get biggest ROI 3. Invest your time where it will pay off 4. Always proofread (but proofread last)

6. Top-Down Editing Process

7. Inspecting the document 1. Document level: Look at title, introduction, abstract, headings, visual/verbal roadmap 2. Section-level: Look at each section individually 3. Paragraph/sentence level: Look at each paragraph, then each sentence

8. When you need/have time to revise… 1. Handle document-level problems first 2. Handle section-level problems second 3. Handle paragraph- and sentence-level problems third 4. Check for transitions between sections and overall context-making 5. Do a final proofreading pass

9. Document-level concerns  What are you talking about?  What’s the organizational (JJW/client) problem?  What’s the occasion for the document?  What type of document is this?  What will the document accomplish?  Where in the document might their logical questions be answered?

10. Typical problems: Document level Review focuses on:  Making context & purposes explicit  Highlighting conclusions & major evidence  Providing visual & verbal roadmaps for readers  Meeting reader’s needs/expectations for this type of document See handout for common rhetorical, structural, and language problems Exercise 1-A: Inspect the sample document and identify potential document-level revisions

11. Section-level concerns  Does this section match a conventional section for this type of document?  Does the heading adequately reflect what the section does?  Can a reader read the opening (of the section) and know what will happen in that section?  Are topics previewed in the order they are discussed in the section?  Are any logical topics omitted? Why?

12. Typical problems: Section level Review focuses on:  Making explicit focus & purpose of each section  Ensuring major discussion points are clearly articulated and appropriately ordered  Ensuring information is complete and necessary  Ensuring sections are arranged and marked so they meet readers’ needs See handout for common rhetorical, structural, and language problems Exercise 1-B: Inspect the sample document and identify potential section-level revisions.

13. Paragraph-/Sentence-level concerns Is information within paragraph arranged to provide easy access to key info? Do sentence constructions pose barriers to understanding the message?

14. Typical problems: paragraph/sentence Review focuses on:  Ensuring paragraphs highlight main idea and are logically ordered  Ensuring sentences are clear and concise

15. A strategy for lower-order editing 1. Read each paragraph & place checks by sentences you: Find tedious Have to read more than once Don’t feel quite right about 2. Focus on sections with most checks Exercise 1-C: Inspect the sample document and identify potential paragraph/sentence-level revisions. ( See handout for common paragraph- and sentence- level problems.)

16. Proofreading strategies Proofread a hard copy, not on screen Start with your known problem areas first Break into chunks; look for just a couple problems at a time (may need to re-read several times) Read backwards (one line at a time bottom to top, or one word at a time right to left) Always spellcheck, but then read for typos anyway (affect/effect, Geronimo/geraniums) For critical documents, never proofread your own work

17. When you need the big guns… 1. Read once from end to beginning, line by line, focusing on punctuation and your own ‘problem’ areas 2. Read again just for your common errors 3. Read aloud to identify subject-verb disagreement, unparallel constructions, choppy sentences, sentence fragments 4. Read it backward word-by-word