2. Week 6: Revision & Peer Review

3. Free-Write Prompt: What kinds of difficulties have you had with the Literature Review you prepared for class today? What parts do you think will need revision? How do you think you might accomplish those revisions?

4. Peer Review How-Tos A Peer Review should have 2 Parts: 1.Letter at the end of the draft Addresses problem areas, compliments parts that worked well, discusses the essay holistically 2.Visual markup on the pages Specific identifications of issues on the page (circle, arrow, etc. w/written commentary)

5. From Bedford St. Martin’s Handbook, Section 4b

6. Guidelines for Peer Review Overall Thoughts: What are the main strengths and weaknesses? What might be confusing to readers? What is the single most important thing the writer says? What will readers want to know more about? Introduction: Does the opening make readers want to continue? How else might the draft begin? Thesis and Purpose: Paraphrase the thesis as a promise: In this paper, the writer will… Does the draft fulfill that promise? Why or why not? Does it carry out the writer’s purposes? Audience: How does the draft interest and appeal to its intended audience? Major Points: List the main points, and review them one by one. Do any points need to be explained more or less fully? Do any seem confusing or boring? Should any points be eliminated or added? How well is each major point supported?

7. Further Guidelines… Organization: How has the author chosen to arrange his/her sources? (Chronologically, thematically, etc.) Is this the best organizational scheme for their topic? Synthesis: Is the author adequately synthesizing sources? Or have they just been summarized? Sources: Did the author use reliable sources? Do they seem to be peer reviewed? Is the works cited properly formatted and organized?

8. Compliments v. Constructive Criticism Compliments: I’d never thought of it that way. Really smart insight. Your strongest evidence is ______. I like the way you use ______ to tie all these ideas together. Constructive Criticism: I think you need more evidence to support your claim that _____. You might consider adding ______. I think you need to say this sooner. I had to read this sentence twice to get what you mean. Try simplifying it.

9. Feedback Letter What feedback are you seeking from your peer reviewer? (Structure, topic, thesis, audience/purpose identifications, use of quotations, etc.) Write a brief feedback letter to your peer reviewer asking him/her to review certain aspects of your literature review draft.

10. Peer Review Workshop Cover your Literature Review draft with your feedback letter and turn it in. Ms. Sprouse will redistribute the drafts. First read the feedback letter and then read the Literature Review draft. After your second read, begin to review per the discussed criteria. Remember to mark up the page with critique and then write a note at the end about the entire draft.

11. Homework RaiderWriter : Peer Critiques 1.1a & 1.1b Reading 7 Additional Assignment : Research & Read at least 2 more sources for research project Discussion Post : Look at the feedback you received in class today and Section 4d of the St. Martin’s Handbook and write a 200-300 word post about how you plan to begin revising your Literature Review. Exercise 11.2 (FYW 229-30) : Complete the first part of this assignment and bring the index cards with you to our next class.