1. How to Write a Thesis Statement: The Good and The Bad

2. What is a Thesis Statement?
A thesis statement should meet the following criteria:
One sentence in length (statement, not a question)
Mention the main topic of your paper
Explain what the rest of your paper will be about
Make a statement that is not obvious (i.e., someone else may disagree with it before reading your paper)
Contain an element of opinion (YOUR STANCE!)
Be based on facts or support that your paper will discuss
Be the last sentence in your first paragraph. You will note this by making your thesis bold.

3. Tips on writing a great one!
Research your topic in order to determine what type and quantity of information exists about your subject of study.
Free write about your topic. For several minutes, write about what you know about your topic, including research you have done
Go back through your free written work and underline ideas that you think might make the basis of a good thesis statement.
Check each underlined thought to see which one seems most interesting, possible to support through research, and appropriate for the length and depth of your paper.

4. Tips on writing a great one!
5. Make a short list of minor points that you want to include in your thesis statement, and connect the points.
*sentence combing

5. Examples of Thesis Statements: Too Obvious
→The key to crafting the perfect thesis statement is making sure that it is not obvious to the reader before reading your paper.
The Bad
The War of 1812 came before the Civil War. (bad example)
This is not a good thesis statement because it is obvious and does not need to be proven. Anyone can look at a timeline and figure out that the War of 1812 came before the Civil War.

6. How to Write a Thesis Statement: The Good and The Bad
→This alternative version may not be historically correct, but it could definitely make a strong thesis statement if it were properly supported:
The War of 1812 set into motion the main events that caused the Civil War. (good example)
This example would be a strong thesis statement because it is not obvious, at first glance, that the War of 1812 necessarily led to the Civil War at all. Therefore, this statement is not obvious and could merit a paper to be written about it.

7. The Unclear Statement The Bad
→Sometimes you might find that your thesis statement is unclear. For example:
The judicial system needs to have power over Congress in order to do its job. (bad example)
What does this statement mean? In which way does it need to have power over Congress? What is the job that judicial system cannot carry out without this power?

8. How to Write a Thesis Statement: The Good and The Bad
The following statement clarifies the statement:
In order for the judicial system to judge whether a law is constitutional, it must have the power to overturn a temporary law of Congress. (good example)

9. Too General The Bad Take a look at this thesis statement:
→People need to stay healthy for several important reasons. (bad example)
Could you write a paper on this? You could, but you’d barely be able to scrape the surface.
The Good
Now take a look at a better example, which is much more specific:
→Students must get sufficient sleep at night in order to succeed in school. (good example)

10. Too Specific
The Bad
→In “Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone,” Ron’s last move in the chess game parallels his defense of Harry in Book 7. (bad example)
This example is far too specific. Could you write an entire paper on this? More likely, you could write a short paragraph defending this statement.
The Good
To revise it, you could focus on the chess match as a whole:
→In “Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone,” the chess game parallels the struggle between Harry and Voldemort throughout the series. (good example)

11. Other Writing Issues….
→Make sure that your thesis statement is not written passively (e.g., “the struggle was paralleled by…”) or as a negative statement (e.g., “Students will not succeed in school if they…”).
→You must be able to support your thesis statement through research and observation, and it must sum up the main point of your paper. Use these tips to guide you in creating the perfect thesis statement.

12. Don’t forget:
Topic Proposals & thesis statements are due this Friday, February 3rd!!!!