2.  (Worse) To succeed in the laboratory, diligence is essential due to the fact that many experiments are necessary.

3.  (Better 1) To succeed in the laboratory, the researcher must be diligent because many experiments are necessary.  (Better 2) The researcher must be diligent to succeed in the laboratory since many experiments are necessary.

4.  Avoid wordiness by saying because or since instead of due to the fact that.

5.  (Worse) Before submitting a graduate school application, the institution should be selected.

6.  (Better 1) Before a student submits a graduate school application, the institution should be selected.  (Better 2) A student should select the institute before submitting a graduate school application.

7.  (Worse) Pressing the start button prior to operations, the machine turned on.

8.  (Better 1) The machine turned on after the operator pressed the start button.  (Better 2) After the operator pressed the start button, the machine turned on.

9.  (Worse) When simulating the environment, the outcome yielded some surprising results.  (Better) When the laboratory assistant simulated the environment, the outcome yielded some surprising results.

10.  Although the writer of this sentence implies that someone is simulating the environment, the reader will erroneously assume that the outcome is simulating the environment.  The revised sentence eliminates this confusion.

11.  (Worse) The program contains the proposed itinerary that was implemented yesterday.  (Better) The program 【 implemented yesterday 】 contains the proposed itinerary.

12.  In this sentence, although the writer wish to state that what was implemented yesterday was The program, misplacing the clause changes the intended meaning.

13.  (Worse) The container held by the experimenter with many leaks must be replaced.  (Better 1) Held by the experimenter, the container with many leaks must be replaced.  (Better 2) The container held by the experimenter must be replaced owing to its many leaks.

14.  Placing the modifying phrase in the wrong place erroneously states that the experimenter, not The container, has many leaks.

15.  (Worse) To select the level of the design parameter, the effects of the noise factors must be minimized.  (Better 1) To select the level of the design parameter, the engineer must minimize the effects of the noise factors.  (Better 2) The engineer must minimize the effects of the noise factors to select the level of the design parameter.

16.  (Worse) Analyzing the SN ratios, the optimal settings can be determined.  (Better) The optimal settings can be determined by analyzing the SN ratios.

17.  (Worse) When taking an examination, the questions should be answered as thoroughly as possible.  (Better) When taking an examination, a student should answer the questions as thoroughly as possible.

18.  (Worse) To excel in academics, determination is necessary.  (Better 1) Determination is necessary to excel in academics.  (Better 2) For a student to excel in academics, determination is necessary.

19.  (Worse) While conducting an experiment, the timer went off and Jeff took the sample from the oven.  (Better) While Jeff was conducting an experiment, the timer went off and he took the sample from the oven.

20.  (Worse) Taking into account all of the circumstances, the decision on how to deal with the issue was reached by the academic committee.  (Better 1) By taking into account all of the circumstances, the academic committee decided how to deal with the issue.

21.  (Better 2) The academic committee decided how to deal with the issue by taking all of the circumstances into account.