1. The Pearl By JOHN STEINBECK Agenda: 2/5/14 Peer Revision Homework: Continue working on revisions and typing draft (*Draft due tomorrow in class) http://blogs.socsd.org/dcastellano

2.  What is the proper way of quoting in this class?  How do you quote quotes within a quote?  What is wrong with these sentences?  In the novel the pearl by john Steinbeck, Kino finds a great pearl.  In the novel "The Pearl" by John Steinbeck.  As the narrator states "he hissed at her like a snake."(700) Are you a pro? – Writing Review

3.  Underline your THESIS/Claim in your introduction paragraph:  Do you have a Hook and are you including TAG (title author genre)?  Does your introduction contain your three reasons?  Underline your topic sentence in each body paragraphs:  Does it state what your paragraph is about?  Does your topic sentence and text-evidence back up your thesis?  Concluding sentences  Does your concluding sentence give your paragraph closure?  PLEASE SHARE!  Word Choice:  Circle any boring/ dead words  Circle and repetitive words and phrases  Replace them with vivid vocabulary Essay Revision- Workshop WARNING: Body Paragraphs should not just be huge quotes with none of your own ideas or analysis!!!

4.  Highlight your topic sentences  Check off your 2-3 quotes that support your topic sentence  Do you explain your quotes?  Do you tie everything back to your topic sentence and claim?  Do your body paragraphs contain mostly YOUR words and not just quotes with no interpretations? Body Paragraph Double Check

5.  Revision plans: With your shoulder partner, swap essays' and check off items they need to work on. Then complete the warm and cool feedback on the back of the revision plan.  Use this feedback and your checklist to make revisions on your essay!  Final Essay do printed in class Friday 2/14!! (Anyone going away is responsible for handing it in prior to leaving on their vacation) Peer Editing Warm FeedbackCool Feedback “I see an excellent use of vocabulary words here” “In your second body paragraph, you brought up an awesome point about Kino’s rage” “Attention to detail is evident.” “I wonder if this fits that.” “It looks like you wanted this to do that, but I’m not sure it does.” “It is unclear what your topic sentence is here and how your evidence connects.”