1. College Prep 4-16-13 SSR BUT FIRST…ANNOUNCEMENT

2.  Issues with iMovie and possible fixes  So, today, we have to do something else my people  We ARE NOT going to let this go…mostly because I got super excited to see your ads ANNOUNCEMENT

3.  YAY SSR… SSR

4.  Usted necesitará un pedazo de papel TIEMPO DE SALIR BILLETE

5.  Verbs: action words…words that indicate movement  By eliminating PASSIVE VOICE and reducing “to be” verbs, writers can energize action images.  Verbs of passive voice communicate no action.  Typically, passive voice verbs require the help of a “to be” verb. PAINTING WITH ACTION VERBS

6.  “To be” verbs:  is  am  are  was  were  be  being  been FIRST…WHAT ARE “TO BE” VERBS

7.  1. The “to-be” verbs: is, am, are, was, were, be, being, been are state of being verbs, which means that they unduly claim a degree of permanence. For example, “I am hungry.” For most Americans, hunger is only a temporary condition.  2. The “to-be” verbs claim absolute truth and exclude other views. “Classical music is very sophisticated.” Few would agree that all classical compositions are always sophisticated. WHAT’S WRONG WITH THIS?

8.  3. The “to-be” verbs are general and lack specificity. A mother may tell her child, “Be good at school today.” The more specific “Don’t talk when the teacher talks today” would probably work better.  4. The “to-be” verbs are vague. For example, “That school is great.” Clarify the sentence as “That school has wonderful teachers, terrific students, and supportive parents.”  5. The “to-be” verbs often confuse the reader about the subject of the sentence. For example, “It was nice of you to visit.” Who or what is the “It?” WHAT’S WRONG WITH THIS?

9.  “The runaway horse was ridden into town by an old, white- whiskered rancher.”  “The grocery store was robbed by two armed men.”  Notice how the word “by” signals the noun performing the action. Passive voice can weaken images by freezing the action.  How could we fix these?????  Write them on your exit ticket. PASSIVE VOICE EXAMPLES

10.  We swap out our “to be” verbs (“was ridden” and “was robbed”)  “The old, white-whiskered rancher rode the runaway horse into town.”  “Two armed men robbed the grocery store.” FIXES

11.  Even when not used as a part of a passive voice, “to be” verbs slow the action and tend to link complements that TELL. (SHOW DON’T TELL!!!!)  We can improve our writing (“effective word choice”) when we replace as many “to be” verbs as possible.  Action verbs replace still photos with motion pictures.  “The gravel road was on the left side of the barn.”  “The gravel road curled around the left side of the barn.” MORE PASSIVE VOICE

12.  Change our passive sentence into and active sentence using action verbs.  “The biker was in the air.”  Pic #1 Pic #1 OUR TURN

13.  Change our passive sentence into and active sentence using action verbs.  “The car is on fire.”  Pic #2 Pic #2 OUR TURN

14.  Change our passive sentence into and active sentence using action verbs.  “The cop was killed by the explosion.”  Pic #3 Pic #3 OUR TURN

15.  Not ALL “to be” verbs can be eliminated…if we cannot easily replace our “to be” verb, maybe it belongs in the sentence. BUT….

16.  Get rid of those “to be” verbs!!!!!  1) papers with someone  2) Search for ALL “to be” verbs  3) Circle those bad boys  4) Give the paper back (don’t change them)  5) Change those “to be” verbs unless it doesn’t violate any of our rules  I wanna hear what you came up with  So…please share your old sentence THEN your new sentence NOW LETS WORK ON OUR MINI-ESSAYS

17.  Lets try to write our intros now  Remember what you did for your commercial  Try to write a tag line for your paper  RAFT your paper, but focus on your hook  On a separate sheet of paper that you will attach to your mini-essay  Stay away from the conclusion HOOKS???

18.  Has technology outpaced morality?  Gunpowder  Atomic Power  The internet  Encryption DEBATE