1. Mrs. T’s Reflection on L.o.F. and The Crucible Comparative Analysis

2. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! HOOKS! – Example: Children once in their lifetime have asked their parents to check under their bed, or in their closets for monsters... – Example: A British 17 th century writer, Thomas Fuller, once said, “The mob has many heads, but no brains”. This quote expresses the idea that mobs are actions based on whims rather than logic. Overall structure and fully-developed INTRO PARAGRAPHS!!!!

3. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! (cont’d) THESIS STATEMENTS!!! – Example: In The Crucible and Lord of the Flies, the fear of the unknown scares societies into a frenzy in which the traits of humanity and civilization are forgotten and barbarism is adopted. Both Miller and Golding show how fear could destroy any society from civilized, innocent boys to the Puritans. – Example: Both Golding and Miller use the characters and setting in their literary works in order to emphasize the darker parts of the human condition, and demonstrate how extreme situations can drive an entire group past the brink of madness.

4. Continue to work on... Moving away from the “blueprint thesis” Blueprint (correct but not advanced) Thesis: – Miller and Golding suggest in their novels that without civil cooperation and respect of each member in the society, the group will gradually become deranged and driven to savagery through the examples of Jack and Abigail, Ralph and John, Piggy and Mary Warren, and Simon and Rebecca Nurse. ADVANCED (revised)thesis: – Through the example of the dynamic characters in both stories, Miller and Golding suggest that without the civil cooperation and respect of each member in the society, the group will gradually become deranged and driven to savagery.

5. Another example... Blueprint (correct but not advanced) Thesis: – In Golding’s novel, L.o.F. and Miller’s play The Crucible, the groups are driven by fear to commit heathen acts of violence and this is seen through Jack and Abigail, Ralph and John, Piggy and Mary Warren, and Simon and Rebecca Nurse. ADVANCED thesis: – In Golding’s novel, L.o.F. and Miller’s play The Crucible, the British boys and Puritans behave paranoid and impulsive through the respective stories because they are influenced by great fear to commit heathen acts of violence.

6. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! *STRETCCCCCCCCCCH THINKING! Assertion: In Golding’s novel, L.o.F. and Miller’s play The Crucible, the British boys and Puritans behave paranoid and impulsive through the respective stories because they are influenced by great fear to commit heathen acts of violence. John and Ralph Abigail and Jack Piggy and Mary Warren Simon and Rebecca Nurse

7. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! *Transitions and Transitional Sentences Examples: – The first clear examples of how groups behave based on fear are the protagonists in each story, Ralph from Golding’s novel and John Proctor from Miller’s play. Examples: – In addition to the antagonists, Miller and Golding present two similar protagonists, Ralph and John. These extremely selfless and virtuous characters contain noble traits that prevent them from allowing fear to get the best of them... Examples: – The final pair of similar figures that show the influence and power of an idea on a group is Samneric and Mary Warren. PLACE WHEN BEGINNING A NEW SUPPORTING PARAGRAPH THAT PRESENTS A NEW EXAMPLE!

8. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! *Quotes Strong selection of quotes! Always continue to LEAD-IN the quotes and don’t allow them to hang on their own Be careful of in-text citation!!!

9. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! *STRETCCCCCCCCCCH THINKING! What is it again?!?! – Separates the “A” level and “B” level work – Go beyond the TEXT to make an evaluation (a critical assertion you make based off the literature) or a synthesis (a critical assertion you make on two things—literature and knowledge of history) – In this case, based off of the comparative characters in the literary pieces.... – What can you assert about groups dynamics? – What do the characters represent about how groups behave in real-life? – What is revealed about the human condition/nature? – Where do you see evidence of this in real-life (examples)?

10. “Steps” of high-level thinking: RECALL State events/characteristics that connect the characters; similarities STEP 1 STEP 2 ANALYSIS Critically analyze characterization and what they represent in the context of the literature (John=scapegoat) STEP 3 EVALUATION Stretch your thinking by evaluating how the literary applies to real-life -human nature -human condition -historical examples *GO OUTSIDE THE TEXT!*

11. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! *STRETCCCCCCCCCCH THINKING! Where does it exist in supporting paragraphs????  AFTER the literary analysis (comparing the characters) Example for ONE COMPARABLE CHARACTER SET PARAGRAPH 1 – The final comparative set between the novels would be SamnEric and Mary Warren who show how easy it is to crumble under the pressure of a group. (1 sentence) – Explain how they’re similar. (4-6 sentences) PARAGRAPH 2 – STRETCH THINKING  These characters demonstrate how people’s fear of a group can leave them with no option but to conform to the group’s desires, even though they have not lost sight of their own morals and values. Similarly, this is seen in real-life when the numbers pressure weaker personalities to follow their lead. For example, the Nazis in WWII did exactly this with some of the German citizens who had almost no choice but to conform... (5-7 sentences)

12. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! ANOTHER EXAMPLE in ONE PARAGRAPH!

13. GREAT IMPROVEMENTS! Conclusions Avoid going through EACH of the examples again! FOCUS mainly on your CLAIM; not so much the literary Many revisited the same way they began the hook and it made for a MUCH stronger conclusion

14. Continue to Work on... ORGANIZATION! – Paragraphs are TOO long! – 5-8 sentences for a fully developed paragraph – 6-7 is SOLID/ADVANCED! PROOFREADING! WRITING IN THE PRESENT TENSE FOR LITERATURE!

15. As a whole... Nice Job!

16. Continue to STRETCCCH your thinking!

17. Golden Writers... Mitch Bekah Pooja Kishan