1. Clear Writing for College Students and Wordy Emailers Readers do not like long, wordy sentences— they’re frustrating, confusing, and unnecessary

2. What is College Level Writing?  Clear and Concise Fewer words the better but maintain the sentence’s meaning (ACT skill) Avoid a string of prepositional phrases (3 at the most) Avoid Wordy Phrases Active Verb Choice (avoid excessive use of “to be” verbs)  Accurate Summarizing (analysis, evaluate, create) Paraphrasing (analysis, evaluate, create) Can’t do either without Reading Comprehension Ask your teachers to assign some summary writing

3. What is a preposition? Word that sits before a noun (or pronoun) to show the noun’s relationship to another word in the sentence Something a squirrel can do to a tree: around, through, towards, past, of, about,… The squirrel (noun) ran around the tree (noun).

4. Why would you use too many? You have a lot of information you want to put into one sentence. You should spread that information over several other sentences and paragraphs. Look at the all the information in the following sample:

5. Prepositional Phrases As a matter of fact, the article is claiming our society needs new programs with more funding to the recipients of the program for their needs of food, shelter, and clothing so the homeless will be taken off the streets for their safety, well- being, and other stuff that pops up that the directors will need to handle with the new funding. Huh?

6. Were you Right?  As a matter of fact, the article is claiming our society needs new programs with more funding to the recipients of the program for their needs of food, shelter, and clothing so the homeless will be taken off the streets for their safety, well-being, and other stuff that pops up that the directors will need to handle with the new funding.  (61 words, 8 prep phrases. Isn’t that wordy? Keep it at 3 or fewer)

7. Even Uglier: Look at it this Way As a matter of fact, the article is claiming our society needs new programs with more funding to the recipients of the program for their needs of food, shelter, and clothing so the homeless will be taken off the streets for their safety, well-being, and other stuff that pops up that the directors will need to handle with the new funding. (Can you rewrite with one prep phrase, fewer than 20 words, and maintain the sentence’s meaning? If so, you can write on a college level.)

8. Lose the Wordy Phrases  As a matter of fact  Due to the fact that  In light of the fact that  at the present time  at all times  this day and age  has the ability to Actually Because Now Always Today/nowadays Can

9. Shorten Verb Phrases, Verb Usage, and Keep Them Active …is claiming… …will be taken off... …pops up… …will need to handle… …the article claims… …removed… …appears/presents… …handle… …needs…

10. My New Sentence Actually, the article claims new and properly funded programs will provide all of the homeless population’s needs. (17 words and 1 prep phrase) or … provide everything the homeless need. (15 words and 0 prep phrases) Has the meaning of the sentence changed?

11. What about Style and Voice?  Over the river and through the woods to grandmother’s house we go.  No—Gatsby turned out all right at the end; it is what preyed on Gatsby, what foul dust floated in the wake of his dreams that temporarily closed out my interest in the abortive sorrows and short-winded elations of men.  We’re taking the scenic drive to grandma’s house?  No—Gatsby developed nicely; witnessing his behavior nearly ruined my belief in mankind, though. Do not sacrifice concise and clear writing to establish voice and style. Only great novelists can do that.

12. Email Needs Clear, Concise Language Too Source: Gregory Ciotti (marketer and blogger of behavioral psychology) 85% of internet users use email vs. 62% use social media (Professional World) Business is done through email more than any other means of communication 3 Common Questions asked before reading an email: 1. Who is emailing me? 2. What does he/she want? 3. How long will this take? Do your emails pass these questions? “I don’t think I got that email.” (Yes, I did. I deleted it when I saw its length.)

13. 3-B Plan 3-B Plan: 1. Brevity (Use as few as words as possible—you now know how to do this) Keep subject lines brief and on topic Do Not Reply in the subject line = Do Not Open Address the Person—people like seeing their name 2. Blunt (get to the point of why I should read this—no jokes please) Get down to business in the first line Tell (Don’t Show) how I’ll benefit Thank me for my time 3. Basic (don’t make me display images or open attachments every single time)

14. Sample Email: Subject: Presentation Mr. Wojciechowski, Your presentation changed my life. Will you put in on your website so I can review it? Thanks for your time. Every SHS Student